YAY SADNESS

that was unbearably sad.

also you did p much better than i could ever do him

I don't think this story was emo, exactly. I was quite surprised at how sensitively and carefully the character's emotions were portrayed, especially during those two particularly difficult points (one of which is obvious, and the other being the fire). From the beginning, I felt bad for P, but not overly much. I and F's comical dialogue almost made light of it, but it contrasted well with his sombre introduction. It was only revealed later on what a state P's life was in, and that's when I desperately wanted things to turn around for him. The stabbing was justice. I totally felt like doing the same thing, and it finally felt like P had some control when he picked up the knife. (I don't want that to be taken the wrong way, but you know what I mean. That moment felt quite uplifting, considering all the crap he must have gone through to become so attached to little-P in the first place.)

Also, I like how you consistently tied the other character's storylines in together. The incident with the fire, IMO, had become more intense because of the other thing which was going on at that time.

I don't know if you plan on continuing this or not (I think it's probably best left where it is) but you certainly know how to write a gripping story, even though the tone is quite hard-hitting, and definitely very real. I like how you've structured the paragraphs, too. It's not pleasant to read great walls of text (like this comment, ugh).

Most of my stories over the lemmings are interlinking with my other friend's stories about them, so I probably won't continue the story from that point.

Thanks for the lovely comment!

cute skecth (soz for spelling ^^;)

it's actually a story, if you hit the download link

I know but im too lazy to read it XD

never mind! its really intence this story and I injoyed reading it but did his dad really raped him?

woah.
that was a cute story :D ...I mean, apart from the raping and the end and stuff, but that was all very good; it was very well written. I like it. Like the stabbing part was pretty cool, lol it's always fun to read about revenge :I m'yeees. You do GOOD lemming fanfics, like a lot of em are like, lemmings whose heads used to be cabbages and that's why they have green hair, lmao :)
I also like how you do those ironic endings, or, uh... ah, I'm not exactly sure how to describe it, really, that's not really what I mean, buuut yes; you get the main idea. You need more credit for your writing. I love your poems that you hate so much, too ;D