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Sam´s adventures beging
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Okay, this is chapter one. XD Egads, I need to read which chapter I'm reading! *bonks her head* :B
Okay, good intro. :) Good to know the character and things about him. But like I (mistakingly) commented on the fourth chapter, there are a few mispells and a few words that are not needed (EG: "then dressed my clothes on," should really say, "then dressed myself," or "then got my clothes on,").
I believe this is where my last comment should've gone (the one I placed about the fourth chapter). :P Now I feel silly...
This starts out relatively smooth. :) None of this bam-action-right-in-the-face stuff. That kind of stuff I never enjoyed reading because it would confuse me.
Okay, good intro. :) Good to know the character and things about him. But like I (mistakingly) commented on the fourth chapter, there are a few mispells and a few words that are not needed (EG: "then dressed my clothes on," should really say, "then dressed myself," or "then got my clothes on,").
I believe this is where my last comment should've gone (the one I placed about the fourth chapter). :P Now I feel silly...
This starts out relatively smooth. :) None of this bam-action-right-in-the-face stuff. That kind of stuff I never enjoyed reading because it would confuse me.
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