Random Lyrics by ToastRabbit -- Fur Affinity [dot] net

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posted 13 years ago Photographer

I figure i will toss this up for scrutiny. I am not happy with how disjointed the lyrics are but i am going to keep working with them.

for now this is the scraps of rejected lyrics for the next song i am working on.

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13 years ago

You have a lot of ideas that seem to be related to one another, but give a lot of different feelings and conjure a lot of different images. Why not try sticking to a singular idea and working around that?

ToastRabbit ~toastrabbit

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13 years ago

where can i send my first accepted set of lyrics. keeping them off the net, this stuff is crap, what i wrote is damn good and soon to be kicked into a song. this submission took me 3 minutes to write.

ToastRabbit ~toastrabbit

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13 years ago

DM'd the lyrics to you for the first song, lemme know if you approve ;) yes, it is metal its more of a Korzus style song

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13 years ago

Hmmm... Lots of potential here, you just need to polish the flow from one verse to another.

Should be neet to see this progress if you keep posting updates.

ToastRabbit ~toastrabbit

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13 years ago

the last 2 verses really kill it... but i want to keep them in, i have 20 pages of random lyrics and one good song so far.

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13 years ago

They do kinda shift the mood that was established in the first 3, but I really like the last verse. Maybe changing up the second to last just a little could bring it together.

Tar-Snowpaw ~tar-snowpaw

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13 years ago

cool makes me feel multiple emotions

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