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This is a concept screenshot I made this week. Was a bit ill and wanted to test some effects. I liked the result of it.
But this isn´t a new animation, there´s no new animation in production at the moment.
Pages 20 to 33 available now =D
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XDragoon #19: XGem the stone of discord
Script, Art and Colors: Felipe Marcantonio
Translation Revision: Jim Eriksson
Pages: 48
April 2012
ENGLISH
http://xdragoon.com/comics/en/019/index.php
PORTUGUESE
http://xdragoon.com/comics/pt/019/index.php
But this isn´t a new animation, there´s no new animation in production at the moment.
Pages 20 to 33 available now =D
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XDragoon #19: XGem the stone of discord
Script, Art and Colors: Felipe Marcantonio
Translation Revision: Jim Eriksson
Pages: 48
April 2012
ENGLISH
http://xdragoon.com/comics/en/019/index.php
PORTUGUESE
http://xdragoon.com/comics/pt/019/index.php
Category All / Human
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 1280 x 720px
File Size 99.2 kB
Page 20: "All Illusion has going for her are her sexy looks and empowering aura. She doesn't have any real power." Since you're describing more than one thing about Illusion, the verb agreement should be "are" instead of "is". Also, replace the comma between aura and She with a period or it becomes a run-on sentence.
Page 25: "This is why we made a deal with Gauthier," Missing an article between made and deal.
Page 26: "She, and everyone else, deserved to die!" Comma after else.
Page 25: "This is why we made a deal with Gauthier," Missing an article between made and deal.
Page 26: "She, and everyone else, deserved to die!" Comma after else.
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