
Sketch sample 5: Opps my apology
Guys, miss my colored commission pieces? give me some more time, will start soon. :D
Guess what, these would be the next lovely couple in the short future.
Bill, a middle-aged bodybuilder, a qualified nutritionist, and a fishing enthusiast, never have thought his life would be anything better than current. One day Bill went out for some book shopping, he didn't go to the gym that day and he has planned to go fishing somewhere in the afternoon after he grabs some books from the book store. The decision changed his life, in a good way.
Bill was scanning for some fishing related books and magazines and he actually wasn't paying attention to a girl by him, also browsing her favorite stuffs.
"Here you are," Bill's right eye shines as he spots something he requires, and reaches that book with his muscular, trunk-like arm, without knowing the girl was just few inches from him.
"Opps," Bill's arm nudges her from back, accidentally. he quickly turned around and apologize, "I'm very sorry..." His eye now saw the girl, some weird feeling arises deep in Bill's mind. He wasn't sure what is that, but for sure that girl looks pretty attractive to him, blue-eyed, long golden hair with glasses...
The girl named Hillary, one of the college lecturer in different faculty from Bill. Somehow, Bill never met her before, and never have thought that she is one of the college lecturer. Hillary stunned a bit, looking at Bill, a 7 feet tall male in singlet, which could hardly contain his bulging muscle all over the body. She quickly noticed the sorrowful scar and learned that Bill is blind on the left.
Bill stared at her face for a few second, before continued "looking for some fishing materials?"
"Yeah...for my little brother, he is always craving for this," she replied.
"Na...name Bill, you...?" Bill always think that he is experienced enough to suppress his tension deep within, but not this time, his face started to turn red, it is barely covered by his thin face fur, and the broken fluency of speech flow betrayed him.
"Hillary. Nice to meet you Bill. I wonder if you could help me in getting a few related one, coz I am not very good at...you know...fishing stuffs." Hillary smiles while replying Bill.
"Oh... that would be o...okay, I have few recommended authors in...in mind. If you don't mind, I...I can try to get a few for you.“ Bill is now stuttering more 'severely, his heart pumps fast without voluntary control.
"Oh thanks Bill, it is very nice of you," Hillary smiles again, and this time to Bill.
Hmmm...seems like Bill's afternoon fishing plan is going to be ruined...
Guess what, these would be the next lovely couple in the short future.
Bill, a middle-aged bodybuilder, a qualified nutritionist, and a fishing enthusiast, never have thought his life would be anything better than current. One day Bill went out for some book shopping, he didn't go to the gym that day and he has planned to go fishing somewhere in the afternoon after he grabs some books from the book store. The decision changed his life, in a good way.
Bill was scanning for some fishing related books and magazines and he actually wasn't paying attention to a girl by him, also browsing her favorite stuffs.
"Here you are," Bill's right eye shines as he spots something he requires, and reaches that book with his muscular, trunk-like arm, without knowing the girl was just few inches from him.
"Opps," Bill's arm nudges her from back, accidentally. he quickly turned around and apologize, "I'm very sorry..." His eye now saw the girl, some weird feeling arises deep in Bill's mind. He wasn't sure what is that, but for sure that girl looks pretty attractive to him, blue-eyed, long golden hair with glasses...
The girl named Hillary, one of the college lecturer in different faculty from Bill. Somehow, Bill never met her before, and never have thought that she is one of the college lecturer. Hillary stunned a bit, looking at Bill, a 7 feet tall male in singlet, which could hardly contain his bulging muscle all over the body. She quickly noticed the sorrowful scar and learned that Bill is blind on the left.
Bill stared at her face for a few second, before continued "looking for some fishing materials?"
"Yeah...for my little brother, he is always craving for this," she replied.
"Na...name Bill, you...?" Bill always think that he is experienced enough to suppress his tension deep within, but not this time, his face started to turn red, it is barely covered by his thin face fur, and the broken fluency of speech flow betrayed him.
"Hillary. Nice to meet you Bill. I wonder if you could help me in getting a few related one, coz I am not very good at...you know...fishing stuffs." Hillary smiles while replying Bill.
"Oh... that would be o...okay, I have few recommended authors in...in mind. If you don't mind, I...I can try to get a few for you.“ Bill is now stuttering more 'severely, his heart pumps fast without voluntary control.
"Oh thanks Bill, it is very nice of you," Hillary smiles again, and this time to Bill.
Hmmm...seems like Bill's afternoon fishing plan is going to be ruined...
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I see a lovely romance or friendship blossoming here. :3
Btw, you don't need that extra quotation between in Hillary and I and to avoid it being a run-on, just put a period: "Hillary. I wonder if you could help me in getting a few related one, coz I am not very good at...you know...fishing stuffs." English teacher away! :D
Btw, you don't need that extra quotation between in Hillary and I and to avoid it being a run-on, just put a period: "Hillary. I wonder if you could help me in getting a few related one, coz I am not very good at...you know...fishing stuffs." English teacher away! :D
Is this the first time Bill stares a woman and talk to her with shy and blush face? HaHa. Bodybuilders look like they always hit down many stuff thanks to their huge body or giant arms, and so does Bill. XD The singlet is very fit for Bill. It makes Bill's muscle stand out more. Like it.
Hillary's image is just like one of my teachers, gentle, adorable, but sometimes kinda serious. I love this teacher. Which faculty does she teach?
Hillary's image is just like one of my teachers, gentle, adorable, but sometimes kinda serious. I love this teacher. Which faculty does she teach?
lol they have no idea how destructive they are in real life, and there should be some who are very careful. Luckily Bill unintentionally movement only resulted in nudging of his future girlfriend at this moment and not a fracture lol. XD Bill in singlet definitely wouldn't mimic him a doctor or a lecturer huh? Erm I have not yet create a detail profile for Hillary, but she will be a multi-language lecturer from the Faulty of Languages Study or something like that, in my mind she masters 8 languages in total, including English, Spanish, French, Italian, Russian, German, Japanese, and Chinese Mandarin. Haha another genius, girl this time.
I wonder it is maybe a little inconvenient for every bodybuilder to do everythings. Such as walking on a street with a crowd of people, or buying stuff in a tiny store. They need to be very careful, or otherwise they will hurt somebody even a fracture and muss the store up! But I can consider their feeling. XD
Multi-language lecturer..., I will say it is the unreachable domain for me because of my poor language skill. =[
Multi-language lecturer..., I will say it is the unreachable domain for me because of my poor language skill. =[
The lighter weight class suppose would not have any problem compare to superheavy weight class, whose beefy pecs and biceps simply impossible to be masked by any form of clothing, and they will definitely have problem buying decent shirt size and going to toilet. XD In real life, there are people who speak more than 8 languages, so it is not a new thing but if Hillary have mastered all 8 it would be quite impressive. XD
*smirks* What makes this even funnier of course is how you've completely given them different personalities from their namesakes...since the other Bill was quite confident and suave with the ladies, and the other Hillary far more dominant and determined. Nice to see a different dynamic here!
AMAZING! That´s the best love at first view that I ever saw ^ ^ And with those dialogs it makes the magic of understing how does the characters feels about this encounter.
Their expression of shy and nervous are very realistic for this momment, Hillary´s design is pretty nice and beautiful, of course, we can´t forget Bill, he looks pretty cool and both looks nice with their expressions.
What a romantic touch you did on it, this one really deserve to be colored that I even want to be offered to do it XD Is just that this pic is very unique from all your gallery, it gives a great feeling through the pic.
Now you know how much I like it man, congratulation for the first design for Hillary ^ ^
Their expression of shy and nervous are very realistic for this momment, Hillary´s design is pretty nice and beautiful, of course, we can´t forget Bill, he looks pretty cool and both looks nice with their expressions.
What a romantic touch you did on it, this one really deserve to be colored that I even want to be offered to do it XD Is just that this pic is very unique from all your gallery, it gives a great feeling through the pic.
Now you know how much I like it man, congratulation for the first design for Hillary ^ ^
The more romantic stuffs hasn't arise but I already have those idea in mind. I cant wait to finish my college exam and get started. Thanks Aldo, I wish I could color at least one of the romantic picture of Bill and Hillery. :D If you are interested, we can do a collab or 2, but that will be only if I have got time. :D
Of course that you have more romantic stuff waiting for those two, that´s for sure, but this is the first step for it, which is important to know the answer of the typical question "how did they meet each other?" And I like the way that both were acting ^ ^
So I see you have exams too, I´m on the same situation here, but pure projects like logos´designs with their backgrounds and more stuff like that. If everything is alright, I´ll be free on June 15.
And of course, it would be my pleasure and honor to work in something with you ^ ^ I wish you luck to have good results on your exams!
So I see you have exams too, I´m on the same situation here, but pure projects like logos´designs with their backgrounds and more stuff like that. If everything is alright, I´ll be free on June 15.
And of course, it would be my pleasure and honor to work in something with you ^ ^ I wish you luck to have good results on your exams!
You got it. :D Bill was not named intentionally but since
schreddedwolf said this is a rare coinident as all my OCs has names identical to the previous US presidents, he asked how about naming Bill's girlfriend Hillary and make Ronald a former actor etc. XD I accepted his suggestion (not Ronald's).

Hehe congratz Bill. And small guys are violent, they are opposite in nature. lol!!
Btw I know this is kinda redundant, but I feel really sorry for those who order picture from me because my previous lappy was lost, this delayed my work progression, I mean, I know you probably would say: take your time, which I really appreciated. but, seriously lemme apologize once again to make you wait extra unnecessarily.
Btw I know this is kinda redundant, but I feel really sorry for those who order picture from me because my previous lappy was lost, this delayed my work progression, I mean, I know you probably would say: take your time, which I really appreciated. but, seriously lemme apologize once again to make you wait extra unnecessarily.
我你果然是我的忠实粉丝啊,评论好长,但是我非常非常喜欢,尤其是你把Bill叫做笨蛋Bill,很合适啊,当他脸红时的确看起来笨笨憨憨的。
Hillary是比较主动的,她是和Bill在同一间大学教书的讲师,但Bill似乎没见过她,因为他们在不同的学院工作。Bill在生物科技与大众营养学学院里的食品科技部门里工作,而Hillary则是在语言学院里教书,一个精通八种语言的天才女讲师,分别是英语,西班牙语,法语,意大利语,俄语,德语,日语和汉语。Bill应该不会感到压力吧,他是受过高等教育,被人称呼为医生的健美选手,可以说是“文武双全”啊。Hillary现年28岁,性格开朗是个容易相处的人,但她的缺点是有时倔强不服输,大致上还好,但她面对着脸红口吃的Bill,她本身应该也觉得Bill蛮可爱的。她家里父母健在,算是个蛮普通的小康之家。并非Hillary喜欢钓鱼,只是她帮弟弟到书店去找有关钓鱼的书,可能他弟弟是初学者吧。不过兴趣是可以培养的,可以考虑你的建议哦,比方说姐姐带弟弟去垂钓,Hillary因为没有钓鱼经验而必须请Bill这位老将指点一番。看着看着Hillary对钓鱼的兴趣产生了。。。
有看过冰河时期,第二部有点闷,不过幹第三部太搞笑了!
Bill的单身时代结束了,开始投入他人生中的春天,年龄并不是问题,重要的是Bill不久后就会发现自己是真心爱着Hillary的,他发觉不能再浪费时间了,自己的年纪也不小了,怎么样也得有个伴,到鬓发转银时,身边还有个人依靠,牵手,相爱到终老。
动画我不行啊。哈哈~~继续以画的形式将笨蛋Bill展现给大家吧。
Hillary是比较主动的,她是和Bill在同一间大学教书的讲师,但Bill似乎没见过她,因为他们在不同的学院工作。Bill在生物科技与大众营养学学院里的食品科技部门里工作,而Hillary则是在语言学院里教书,一个精通八种语言的天才女讲师,分别是英语,西班牙语,法语,意大利语,俄语,德语,日语和汉语。Bill应该不会感到压力吧,他是受过高等教育,被人称呼为医生的健美选手,可以说是“文武双全”啊。
有看过冰河时期,第二部有点闷,不过幹第三部太搞笑了!
Bill的单身时代结束了,开始投入他人生中的春天,年龄并不是问题,重要的是Bill不久后就会发现自己是真心爱着Hillary的,他发觉不能再浪费时间了,自己的年纪也不小了,怎么样也得有个伴,到鬓发转银时,身边还有个人依靠,牵手,相爱到终老。
动画我不行啊。哈哈~~继续以画的形式将笨蛋Bill展现给大家吧。
Bill奔波了半辈子,最终都找到真爱,他死去的母亲也能真正安息了吧。虽然Bill一向习惯独来独往的Bill,平时除了和朋友聚聚,和学生来往,参加健美赛,和给讲座教书,空闲时就喜欢自己一个人静静在湖边垂钓,他一度认为自己的生活很充实很有意思,后来将近壮年的Bill发觉身边好像少了一个人和他分担喜悦和烦恼,但是从未谈过恋爱的Bill,竟然因为自己是半个瞎子而自卑,他认为没有人会喜欢一个左眼有伤疤,无法预测前方距离的熊。Bill害怕被拒绝,他害怕自尊受挫,慢慢的他变得很被动,纵使他一身蛮肉,学历高社会地位都很完美,但就因为小时候的那一场恐怖车祸留下的缺陷,成了Bill最苦恼的东西。可能他的担忧是多余的,但有这种想法,对第一次谈恋爱的人来说很正常。所以Bill这次成功地向女生自我介绍已经算很不错了,毕竟他没有经验嘛。。。
漫画我倒有香想过,情景是在Bill向Hillary表白的当晚:地点是在地铁站,Bill和Hillary晚饭后,Bill把Hillary送往地铁站买票回家,原本已计划好表白对白的Bill居然在重要关头时结巴,净说一些对方听到一头雾水的话。Hillary两手定住紧张的Bill的脸两则,对他说:“没事的Bill,放松点,你试着再说一次看。”话还没说出口,Bill正要开口,Hillary这就朝他的嘴唇亲了下去。。。联想一下Bill接下来会干些什么?我想到的是Hillary强吻Bill十数秒后,原本口吃的Bill突然有如神助似的把所有他想对Hillary的告白的话顺畅又有魄力的说了出来。Hillery愣了一下,双眼闪乏着泪光,然后冲动的拥抱Bill。Bill这时候才开始脸红怎么样?这是其中一场浪漫的情景,你有什么额外意见吗?很想听听你的看法。
Bill慢慢会适应的,在那之前你就先叫他做笨蛋Bill吧哈哈~~容易脸红的大块头是很受青睐的啊呵呵~~
漫画我倒有香想过,情景是在Bill向Hillary表白的当晚:地点是在地铁站,Bill和Hillary晚饭后,Bill把Hillary送往地铁站买票回家,原本已计划好表白对白的Bill居然在重要关头时结巴,净说一些对方听到一头雾水的话。Hillary两手定住紧张的Bill的脸两则,对他说:“没事的Bill,放松点,你试着再说一次看。”话还没说出口,Bill正要开口,Hillary这就朝他的嘴唇亲了
Bill慢慢会适应的,在那之前你就先叫他做笨蛋Bill吧哈哈~~容易脸红的大块头是很受青睐的啊呵呵~~
当真,你是可以去做编剧了没错。 XD 但是列,地铁站是有瓦遮头的地方,用雨伞来做Bill开窍的条件就有点怪了。闪电侠与这幕还行,不过我觉得把Hillary走后的剧情改成一幕可以让她知道Bill不只是肌肉发达而已,他是个真正靠得住,有安全感,可以依托终生的人。要满足这个条件就得让Hillary陷入一些麻烦中,比如遇到一些很可怕的东西,或是让她生命受威胁的事件。单单追上前拥吻有点单调,不如来点能让Hillary感动落泪的情节吧,不过就要为难笨蛋Bill了。
我会想到以Hillary来强吻Bill的点子不是闹着玩的,毕竟角色的设定是西方国家,思想都是比较开放的。所谓女生的矜持这观念在他们的价值观历史很薄弱的,这玩意只有东方人是比较重视的。但你说的也有道理,Bill应该是主动那方(或者“被主动”),毕竟堂堂一个大汉,要一个比他年轻十数岁的女生给暗示才懂如何做的话实在是太不象话了。Hillary之前有谈过恋爱,但已经分开了,详细情节就让他含糊吧,毕竟一个故事有趣的地方,就是没有什么都清楚列明,让读者自己发现的隐藏内容。
跟你谈故事发展,脑里突然多了好多他们日后生活中各种有趣的画面,例如
1.工作累垮的Bill趴在书桌仍未完成的文件上睡着了,Hillary走过来替他盖被,她深情的凝视住熟睡中流着口水的Bill的憨样子,莫名地微笑了。
2. Bill握住Hillary的手合力把钓到的鱼拉上来;
3. 两人手拉手,漫步在夕阳下的浪漫场景,晚风轻拂,幸福非常。
4. 还有一幕,发生在Bill向Hillary表白不久后:三名健美大将Bush, Bill和,Ronald一天约好一起上健身房,Bush和Bill每次训练时都会穿上短裤,Bill会穿上汗衫,而Ronald这家伙则有点爱现,他都只穿健身三角裤,就好象随时可以向旁人炫耀似的,Bill当天太匆忙结果错把他的健身三角裤当短裤带来健身房,他心想没办法了,总不能让他唯一一条待会儿要穿回家的长裤被汗水弄脏掉,再看看,包囊里就只有一件外套,一条毛巾,一双袜子,沐浴露。。。没了,糟糕,竟然连汗衫都忘了带,注定Bill这次被逼仅穿健身内裤上阵。训练完了,大伙儿都汗流浃背,Bush和Ronald在一旁擦汗喝水,Bill则在收拾健身道具准备到浴室去洗澡,这时,Hillary不懂什么风把它吹了进健身房,还带了水和汗巾给Bill。(她知道Bill是健美选手,但从来没看过他出赛,虽然邂逅时勉强知道Bill有多大块头,但之后Bill都是衣衫端正的打扮见她,所以当然也没看过仅穿健身内裤,筋肉一览无余的Bill)“噢,”Hillary被Bill的身材吓了一跳。Bill也吓了一跳:“Hillary,你。。。怎么会在这里?”, “来送水和毛巾给你啊,听你的学生说,周六你都会上这间健身房的,”Hillary答道,“你。。。你流汗太多了,块擦干吧,来我帮你擦” 她拿了汗巾就向前往Bill那被汗水湿透的左手手臂拭擦去。Bill来不及反应,说:“Hillary,我这就要去洗澡了。。。" 在一旁观看的Bush和Ronald向Bill投向不知如何形容的眼神,如你所说"我们似乎知道了什么”的眼神。原本已经有一点进步的Bill这时的脸更是红得像番茄。。。(这幅素描我已经完成一半又多了,XD)
都想要用画来将故事说出来。也许我不能太关注在Bill的感情发展上,还有Ronald的家族故事等着我模拟呢。
我会想到以Hillary来强吻Bill的点子不是闹着玩的,毕竟角色的设定是西方国家,思想都是比较开放的。所谓女生的矜持这观念在他们的价值观历史很薄弱的,这玩意只有东方人是比较重视的。但你说的也有道理,Bill应该是主动那方(或者“被主动”),毕竟堂堂一个大汉,要一个比他年轻十数岁的女生给暗示才懂如何做的话实在是太不象话了。Hillary之前有谈过恋爱,但已经分开了,详细情节就让他含糊吧,毕竟一个故
跟你谈故事发展,脑里突然多了好多他们日后生活中各种有趣的画面,例如
1.工作累垮的Bill趴在书桌仍未完成的文件上睡着了,Hillary走过来替他盖被,她深情的凝视住熟睡中流着口水的Bill的憨样子,莫名地微笑了。
2. Bill握住Hillary的手合力把钓到的鱼拉上来;
3. 两人手拉手,漫步在夕阳下的浪漫场景,晚风轻拂,幸福非常。
4. 还有一幕,发生在Bill向Hillary表白不久后:三名健美大将Bush, Bill和,Ronald一天约好一起上健身房,Bush和Bill每次训练时都会穿上短裤,Bill会穿上汗衫,而Ronald这家伙则有点爱现,他都只穿健身三角裤,就好象随时可以向旁人炫耀似的,Bill当天太匆忙结果错把他的健身三角裤当短裤带来健身房,他心想没办法了,总不能让他唯一一条待会儿要穿回家的长裤被汗水弄脏掉,再看看,包囊里就只有一件外套,一条毛巾,一双袜子,沐浴露。。。没了,糟糕,竟然连汗衫
都想要用画来将故事说出来。也许我不能太关注在Bill的感情发展上,还有Ronald的家族故事等着我模拟呢。
你的文法一流,故事逻辑也很好,我被影响了,感觉有冲动要以一副短篇漫画描述Bill表白的经过,从地铁站讲起:一直到你说的Hillary离开了Bill的视线� �围和他冲上去跟Hillary表白为止,Bill无意中发现Hillary不见了,以他的速度,应该追上了才对。原因是Hillary被三个臭阿飞扯进了小巷打劫,焦急的Bill最� �在紧要关头出现,(这剧情好像在哪里看过,算了~~XD)并打飞了那三条杂鱼。Bill大意,遭其中一个还没倒下的阿飞以硬物袭击头部,陷入半昏迷,H illary大惊,哭喊着把Bill送入医院的紧急部门。Bill的脑里闪过小时候和母亲一起生活的时候,记忆片段时续时断,脑中又闪过小时候的恐怖车祸,他和母 亲被送进紧急治疗室,抢救不果,Bill母亲离世。。。视线回到了现实,朦胧中,他感觉自己被快速的推动着,他看见Hillary在哭泣,表情紧张地望着他跟 着跑。他的两则则是一些医护人员,他没法开口,又昏了过去。一直到不知过了多久,Bill回复意识,看见Hillary握着她的手,靠在床边睡着了,那时是深 夜。Bill动作把Hillary弄醒了,见Bill平安无事,喜极而泣,Bill拥抱Hillary,向她表白,Hillary答应,Bill亲吻Hillary。(终)这新剧情怎样?我能够像画成漫画 出售,如果真的完成的话我会送你一个副本,答谢你那么有诚意帮忙编故事。
Hillary这角色是后期拟定的,说她比较强势,倒不如说Bill外刚内柔,笨蛋B ill对心仪的女生脸红结巴的举动会特显出Hillary处于较强势的一方,事实上她也只是一个普通女性。
你说Hillary追求Bill到有点怪了,次序到反了。因为当 时的他们是刚开始发展,热恋中的女生都会特别想念和要跟随男友的,但基于Bush和Ronald都还不知道Bill有心上人了,所以就很尴尬。我是在说,Hillary晓� �Bill是健美先生,因为Bill在较早的会面中已经告知Hillary自己的职业,而她本身也看到Bill在书店时露出的粗壮手臂,但Hillary从来没有看过他比赛时的样� �,直到抢劫事故后的一个周末,Hillary才有机会目睹Bill的真实身材。
也许你有兴趣再把我的想法排一排,我迟些就会开始画了。:D
Ronald和Mark会是最 佳拍档,一起整顿Bush,哈哈~~
Hillary这角色是后期拟定的,说她比较强势,倒不如说Bill外刚内柔,笨蛋B ill对心仪的女生脸红结巴的举动会特显出Hillary处于较强势的一方,事实上她也只是一个普通女性。
你说Hillary追求Bill到有点怪了,次序到反了。因为当 时的他们是刚开始发展,热恋中的女生都会特别想念和要跟随男友的,但基于Bush和Ronald都还不知道Bill有心上人了,所以就很尴尬。我是在说,Hillary晓� �Bill是健美先生,因为Bill在较早的会面中已经告知Hillary自己的职业,而她本身也看到Bill在书店时露出的粗壮手臂,但Hillary从来没有看过他比赛时的样� �,直到抢劫事故后的一个周末,Hillary才有机会目睹Bill的真实身材。
也许你有兴趣再把我的想法排一排,我迟些就会开始画了。:D
Ronald和Mark会是最 佳拍档,一起整顿Bush,哈哈~~
变长篇故事了哈哈~~不过概念是不错的,我觉得在Bill把Hillary推到安全范围时,应该让Hillary亲眼看见Bill陷入死亡的危险中,比如说山崩把Bill活埋,Hil lary徒手拨开泥土,一个人(一只熊)最多只能5分钟不呼吸,3分钟脑细胞就开始缺氧了,五分钟再不回复正常呼吸,脑袋就完蛋了,也就是说Hillary只有大 约五分钟的时间救出Bill,时间已经过了一分钟了,Hillary开始着急,眼泪都飙出来了。她不知所措,心里只想着日后的日子不能没有Bill,但自己却无能� �力。。。这时有几个到山上露营的年轻人见状,也加入行列,最后所幸Bill被埋到不深,但在拉Bill出来的那瞬间,第二波土崩爆发了,他们用尽吃奶之� �把Bill这几百磅的大块头救了出来。接下来就是医院的温馨场面了,怎样?这样写会不会比较惊险?行动中也能显示出Hillary也深爱着Bill,无需表白,两� ��都心中有数,当然Bill被吻,比起Bill主动吻Hillary会显得Bill比较可爱?我个人喜欢Hillary主动吻Bill,感觉特别甜蜜。
哈哈,我想的没太过分吧,Bill到最后还是吉人天相平安无事,虽然受重伤但至少在他身体上我不会画下你所讲的“深深的伤口”,因为他还要练健身还要比赛的,身上有疤就不好看了是不?我会选择岩石击中后脑导致Bill陷入昏迷,呼吸急促和心率变弱(把Bill拉出来后还没完啊,接下去就接回之前紧急治疗室里我所说的情节吧,叙述一下Hillary在手术室外等待的无助心情,不断哭泣和自责等小情节,直到“紧急”灯暗了下来,医生对他说Bill的危险期还没过,需要在加护病房观察24小时,而且可怕的症状如严重抽搐,呕吐和体温失衡都有可能在极短的时间内发生,不容太乐观。Hillary崩溃了,她日夜不眠在加护病房外看护着笨蛋Bill(亲人以外的人都不怕被允许进入),面容变得很憔悴。过后Bill终于脱离危险期,转至普通病房,Hillary也一直不离不弃的照顾仍未苏醒的Bill,(这时候穿插新角色进来能不?因为Bill还有一对很疼他的养父养母-Charles夫妇,38年前他们收留小时候一夜间变成孤儿的Bill,都是有钱人,在Texas经营餐馆生意。他们知道Bill出事后很担心,特地从Texas赶到加州探望(较早前连地点背景我都想好了),看到Hillary没有怨言的照顾着Bill,一把年纪的他们(养母72岁,养父74岁)也为Bill终于找到另一半而深感安慰。Bill在出事后第四天终于苏醒,这里在接回你之前的结尾吧。。。大概就这样,故事应该没有矛盾。。。吧。。。?哈哈~
那好,我就专注在Bill在医院的恢复状况,和他心上人对他的照顾吧。我想把故事的场景分成5 小部分:
1. 瀑布(Bill和Hillary郊游的地点)
2. 土崩现场 (Bill把Hillary推上安全地方,自己却被崩土活埋的地点。)
3. 急诊室 (Bill重伤昏迷,接受治疗,Hillary崩溃的地点)
4. 病房 (Bill醒过来,被女友照顾,和被她亲吻的地点)
5. 比赛现场 (三个月后,Bill完全恢复,参赛,Hillary在台下观赛,emcee 公布Bill名字,Bill出场,Hillary为他欢呼打气,现场掌声不断,Bill仰望着台下的Hillary,自信的展现,把最好的呈现出来) 《终》
就这样好吗?句点就停在Bill开始比赛那一幕。。。
1. 瀑布(Bill和Hillary郊游的地点)
2. 土崩现场 (Bill把Hillary推上安全地方,自己却被崩土活埋的地点。)
3. 急诊室 (Bill重伤昏迷,接受治疗,Hillary崩溃的地点)
4. 病房 (Bill醒过来,被女友照顾,和被她亲吻的地点)
5. 比赛现场 (三个月后,Bill完全恢复,参赛,Hillary在台下观赛,emcee 公布Bill名字,Bill出场,Hillary为他欢呼打气,现场掌声不断,Bill仰望着台下的Hillary,自信的展现,把最好的呈现出来) 《终》
就这样好吗?句点就停在Bill开始比赛那一幕。。。
又是一篇感動且驚險的故事,Lyrical我覺得你如果思路好的話可以寫一本短篇小說,然後Echin作畫,做一本完整的圖文書了。 XD
這篇故事劇情讓我想到日本動畫電影[Detective Conan: Quarter of Silence],不知道你是否看過? 在最後Conan因雪崩而被雪活埋時,Nan(蘭)帶著眼淚徒手試圖挖開雪想救出Conan,結果挖到自己的手和雪地都沾滿了她的鮮血了,好在Conan急中生智找出方法才得以被大家營救。 當時看了心情真的完全被那緊張情節影響。不過這種劇情若只有文字敘述的話,效果可能不好,這時候圖片就發揮很大的影響力了。
我的語文能力不太好(前面回應有提過,這不是我的專項),無法像你那樣可以有邏輯且順暢的想出一連串的故事,所以沒辦法提供一些劇情上的想法與修改,不過想出一些奇奇怪怪的點子倒是很行 XD。不知什麼原因,現在我每次使用電腦時第一件最想做的事情,就是看到你們倆想出的精彩劇情。
Maybe it need to be translated to let everybody know you guys' stories.
這篇故事劇情讓我想到日本動畫電影[Detective Conan: Quarter of Silence],不知道你是否看過? 在最後Conan因雪崩而被雪活埋時,Nan(蘭)帶著眼淚徒手試圖挖開雪想救出Conan,結果挖到自己的手和雪地都沾滿了她的鮮血了,好在Conan急中生智找出方法才得以被大家營救。 當時看了心情真的完全被那緊張情節影響。不過這種劇情若只有文字敘述的話,效果可能不好,這時候圖片就發揮很大的影響力了。
我的語文能力不太好(前面回應有提過,這不是我的專項),無法像你那樣可以有邏輯且順暢的想出一連串的故事,所以沒辦法提供一些劇情上的想法與修改,不過想出一些奇奇怪怪的點子倒是很行 XD。不知什麼原因,現在我每次使用電腦時第一件最想做的事情,就是看到你們倆想出的精彩劇情。
Maybe it need to be translated to let everybody know you guys' stories.
哈哈,我比较期待
lyx8520258回复我的故事大纲,怎么说都是一个对写作有经验的人啊,我只是半职业画家,通常在想一幅图(漫画尤其)的构图概念,人物表情,动作和角度控制来做优先考虑,所以剧本这样东西,只有好好想才会有,而且都不会太精彩的,需要人帮哈哈。。。漫画的话不但要画工好,还要有好的剧本,才能将感动带给读者。其实说时容易做时难,如果真的要实行这漫画的话,可能要最少得花上半年,要:iconlyx8520258:消耗大量脑汁帮我想剧情,说实在的很感动。其实生活上所遇见的事物,大大小小,都能触碰灵感写出好故事,所以人人皆有这项才华的,就看你要不要费神去想了,我倒喜欢一些怪怪的点子,那么故事就很多元化很不平凡了。不介意的话可以分享出来。柯南的作品我没看过,因为。。。我从不追长篇漫画,好像火影忍者,死神,海贼王什么的都没看过,哈哈。。,看那么长篇的漫画动画会很累的啊。XD 这故事就我们先想,过后才公布会比较好,因为在那之前只放一些我三个角色的生活小插曲的素描,和完成我的Commission。

我英文不太行阿,哈哈,用英文寫一篇故事可能要花上我一整天的時間,真有想法的話還是用漢文吧。 不過我還是會試試看用英文,等到這幾個禮拜的考季過完後。
說到想法,我有想到一點,是在Bill昏迷住院時,Hillary不眠不休照顧Bill的場景。Hillary在某一天照顧時,腦中突然想起剛開始見面的場景,想起Bill當時臉紅且結巴的愚蠢情形。不禁笑了出來,這時剛好Bill從昏迷中醒來,見到Hillary在一旁笑,便說:能看到你笑真是太好了。Hillary驚訝,情緒轉為一點發怒,靠在Bill身旁,且雙手不斷搥著Bill胸膛,說:你這個大笨蛋,大笨蛋,為什麼當時...。講到一半突然Bill用他的雙臂抱住Hillary,說:對不起,我不會再離開你了,...我愛你。 Hillary驚訝,流下淚來,在病床上相擁。 唉唷,我一定是受你們影響才會寫出這麼多想法。XD
我沒有看過[Clannad],我大多只看過廣受大眾喜愛的動漫如海賊王那些的。 [小情歌](好聽!)我也覺得很適合用在地鐵站那邊,旋律跟歌詞內容很符合當時情形。 XD
說到想法,我有想到一點,是在Bill昏迷住院時,Hillary不眠不休照顧Bill的場景。Hillary在某一天照顧時,腦中突然想起剛開始見面的場景,想起Bill當時臉紅且結巴的愚蠢情形。不禁笑了出來,這時剛好Bill從昏迷中醒來,見到Hillary在一旁笑,便說:能看到你笑真是太好了。Hillary驚訝,情緒轉為一點發怒,靠在Bill身旁,且雙手不斷搥著Bill胸膛,說:你這個大笨蛋,大笨蛋,為
我沒有看過[Clannad],我大多只看過廣受大眾喜愛的動漫如海賊王那些的。 [小情歌](好聽!)我也覺得很適合用在地鐵站那邊,旋律跟歌詞內容很符合當時情形。 XD
Well, You're right. While in Rome, do as the Romans do. But I think I need to live in America for above 10 years, so that I can entirely know about pure american grammar and tune. BTW, can I ask you where do you come from? If you care about it, you can do not tell me or note me.
This is absolutely adorable, so very sweet. I absolutely love the size difference between them, I love how very shy Bill looks, I love how different they each look and yet how it sounds like they have much in common. I also like how Bill's scar adds a unique look to his otherwise startled, sheepish expression. Really great job, I look forward to knowing more of these two.
What a wonderful story having Bill finally meeting the girl of his dreams and trying not to shrink back in fear:)
Oh, and I also caught sight of lion bodybuilder over in the e621 site. I don't know if he's here or not but the posing and the facial expression is pretty awesome. I only go there of course to find other decent material that hasn't been posted anywhere else, just so you know:)
Oh, and I also caught sight of lion bodybuilder over in the e621 site. I don't know if he's here or not but the posing and the facial expression is pretty awesome. I only go there of course to find other decent material that hasn't been posted anywhere else, just so you know:)
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