My interest is piqued.

Mine too. :)

Same.

You should post your stories on Yiffstar, Gru. ;)

You know I've been contemplating that, if only for more exposure. I've looked the site over and only one or two rare stories garner my interest. I'd probably add some much needed class to the place, but I'd hate to be one of the few who actual know a few mechanics of writing. It would be like jumping from my mid class here to a high class. Still once I finish TSA, and maybe have another one or two stories on my belt I might just take that suggestion.

Fourth'd. Though I definitely got a feeling, not only for the characters, but for the world setting and the current plot, right away. I liked the "ghosts bickering" line as well. ;D

Glad to hear it. You're new to the story itself, and I kinda wrote this for those more familiar with my work in mind, but the fact the current plot and characters come to you quickly is a good sign.

To clarify a bit TSA is an adult story, but I'm writing it to be more than just porn. The fact I have it up to chapter 13 is evidence of that.

Also I've noted that a lot of the lines I come up with for Iris seem to be well liked by my audience.

Haha. Bizarrely enough, nothing about this suggested to me that it was part of an ongoing story. So good job on really making things accessible, I think that's important if you're writing serial work.

I've been submitting it all as one package, I'm not sure about doing it as one chapter at a time. Never seemed to like hunting and pecking things out to fix it up for .txt, that format never seems to agree with me anyway. (Why I'll probably only use it for the Thursday prompts.)

Now that's a teaser. Looks to be coming along well!

*flops to the floor and pouts... and I was so there... notfairnotfairnotfair

Good job Gru - and I will be watching you... *pulls an eyelid down exposing the bloodshot white for emphasis...

V.

Oh wow, nice way to tease us, silly =P
I LOVE Iris, shes totally my favourite..
"all your hearing is our ghosts bickering" XD BEST LINE EVER.

This seems somewhat familiar. Great snippet, although I have read the chapter as whole. Great way to use the prompt, write a teaser to your readers.