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second part of my first comic!
i've changed the font and background a bit, so i hope you can
read it better.
also i hope, the speech bubbles aren't too chaotic oO
should the majority of people have problems with that, i will add numbers
to the pictures.
i guess i wanted to skip this scene so badly, that i packed the content of two pages in one and this speech-bubble-chaos is the result ^^'
sorry for that
<<-- first --
second part of my first comic!
i've changed the font and background a bit, so i hope you can
read it better.
also i hope, the speech bubbles aren't too chaotic oO
should the majority of people have problems with that, i will add numbers
to the pictures.
i guess i wanted to skip this scene so badly, that i packed the content of two pages in one and this speech-bubble-chaos is the result ^^'
sorry for that
Category Artwork (Digital) / Vore
Species Wolverine
Size 1100 x 1026px
File Size 880.3 kB
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There's always the issue of show versus tell in a work. As a writer it comes up a pot. I think you may have packed too much exposition into one page. It's like you wanedto set up the notion of suicidal depression too fast and too easily. Still, for a short comic, I think it's alright.
Very interesting, can't wait to see where it goes!
I think it's a good read. It sets up just enough exposition I think. Lets us know what we need to know, doesn't do it in a rushed or forced way. You really don't want to drag out the giving of information, unless you want attention paid to the lack of it to set up suspense or mystery.
I think it's a good read. It sets up just enough exposition I think. Lets us know what we need to know, doesn't do it in a rushed or forced way. You really don't want to drag out the giving of information, unless you want attention paid to the lack of it to set up suspense or mystery.
Oh, if I were -his- sister... I think I'd have a few choice words to share with him... *grumbles something under her breath*
*coughs* Erhm... anyway, I agree that the story vaults into things a bit quickly, but for a short comic, I don't think there's really any getting around it. Unless you'd like to drag out a couple dozen page back-story to the flashback... ^^'
But nice start to the comic, hon. I enjoy the art style and quality you've put into the pages. Looking forward to seeing the rest of your comic!
*coughs* Erhm... anyway, I agree that the story vaults into things a bit quickly, but for a short comic, I don't think there's really any getting around it. Unless you'd like to drag out a couple dozen page back-story to the flashback... ^^'
But nice start to the comic, hon. I enjoy the art style and quality you've put into the pages. Looking forward to seeing the rest of your comic!
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