From what I understand, the Forest spirit decided it would be a waste for Lorne's spirit to be eventually corrupted by human depravity and weakness of the flesh. So instead she tricked him into believing that he would be able to protect his people like a god(from afar) for all eternity if he took up on her offer. But instead she transformed his spirit into a living great hawk gifted with immortality deprived of his former desire to protect the common folk. But other than the deception involved, I think it's a good story to tell if a little vague on his life.

One way to look at it i suppose. Spirits always were supposed to be tricksy.

As for the vagueness on his life, what kind of additional details do you think the story would benefit from? Not adverse to looking it over and adding to the story later.

An unusual TF, and unusual is generally good. While I abhor minutae details of a TF sequence, the best part was the conflict of the man when he was falling, and how it was resolved: His old body left behind, unchanged and dead from the fall, while he flew off in his new body. And I was waiting for you to refer to the hawk by name.

I truly loved this. It reminds me of a somewhat similar dream I once had, though my body didn't die and the form was a raven, if I remember correctly. Admirably done; the story flowed well and the details allowed me to visualize it perfectly. It might have been nice to have the spirit beside him, watching the form of his old body being taken inside as well, invisible to mortal eyes at the end... but I still loved it.

great story! you did well. the diologe was great, same with the TF sequence. got me confused for a second when the body was falling.good job, you should do more medival ones. you have a knack for it.

thanks, glad you liked it ^.^ i like medival settings best myself i think.

well, every writer is the best at their own area. take me for example. i do great in sci-fi or apocoliptic settings, but i suck at fantasy. keep up the good work!