this is a little project of mine that I wish to expand on in the future. it's a snippet of my expierience about Master-slave relationship. please comment and add suggestions
[Edit] press F5 for new changes typo errors and few fixes
[Edit] press F5 for new changes typo errors and few fixes
Category Story / Fetish Other
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 12.1 kB
Oh god, this applies to me so much. Thank you so much for writing this. I agree 100%. A lot of people would take a look at a relationship like this and immediately make the mental connection of sex, yet skip over what it truly represents to those that find a great deal of comfort in this kind of relationship. I'm definately someone that sees it from a more comforting perspective, and now I just hope that I'll be able to find a good owner someday, and I hope that if that does indeed come to pass, that my Master will understand the great responsibility that comes with my submission and handle that power with skill and grace, treasuring me as an ever loyal companion and his prized possession.
However, if I may, I think I spotted a few grammatical errors while reading, the most glaring of which being when you said, "I would really have liked if my relationship actually devolved into that". Judging from the rest of the passage, it would have made a lot more sense to have put "wouldn't" in the place of "would", or fixing it in some other way. Plus, there are the times where you spelled the word "great" as "grate", as well as a few other minor errors that you might want to fix when looking over it again.
Overall though, I like the message of what you've written, and despite a few errors here and there, it was still easy to understand. I may very well watch you for any continuation of this.
However, if I may, I think I spotted a few grammatical errors while reading, the most glaring of which being when you said, "I would really have liked if my relationship actually devolved into that". Judging from the rest of the passage, it would have made a lot more sense to have put "wouldn't" in the place of "would", or fixing it in some other way. Plus, there are the times where you spelled the word "great" as "grate", as well as a few other minor errors that you might want to fix when looking over it again.
Overall though, I like the message of what you've written, and despite a few errors here and there, it was still easy to understand. I may very well watch you for any continuation of this.
<blushes> thanks for pointing out the "wouldn't" yes you're right :P it does make much more sence. I'm glad you like it. be sure to visit this story every once in a while I'll try to expand it. maybe if my little pets will agree I'll trow in their stories as chapters <smiles> thank you again
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