a part three with you getting tortured by acids? Yes please!

ha-ha, still not sure if I would be up for going into too many details on that yet

Indeed, will our young recruit get slowly digested or will he be saved :D?

oh he and the dog are pretty much making their way through the digestive system, but the possible third part might be getting an ID on generic tiger and leading one of the bigger or more capable members of the patrol to him etc...

Sounds interesting

Well... not the worst way to go~ But I hope Masque will be okay D:

don't worry that earring the glimmered like that, well I already explained how he uses it to reform someone else in having him use it on Artois, it's sort of in an eternal passive state on himself, likely he'll be reforming shortly after that to speak with a sketch artist for the VPD.

Very Intresting!

thanks chief *snaps a small salute*

Hehe. Very nice. I like the way this is all playing out.
Personally, I'd love to see the tiger get away, where the story can then develop around the VP being too busy to track down one rogue tiger, leaving it up to Masque to have to hunt him down himself. :)

Very well written, though I feel some parts could have been a little more developed in the details. Little things like where the tiger 'tightens his grip', when we were never actually told where he grabbed. Around the neck? An arm? His chest?

When the tiger pounces, "nearly flattened on impact" reads a bit dull. Where's the grunt of hitting the floor and having the wind knocked out of him? Where's the feel of the tiger's weight, about to break bones? For Masque's growing fear and struggles, does his heart race? Does his breathing become more rapid? Do his fingers or toes dig into the fur of the tiger? Just some little, additional visual queues can go a long way into drawing the reader deeper into the story.

Don't get me wrong, I really enjoyed both of these first parts, and definitely hope you do a third. You have all of the elements to really generate a lot of impact with this story, but there needs to be a bit more details where it's currently generalities. Nothing along the lines of graphic details. Just enough to help the reader better visualize what's happening and feel the pain and emotions of the characters.

Keep up the great work. <3

Shhhhhh, if you read my mind do not divulge what I'm thinking of doing silly rat :P
And thank you for pointing those out, but most of all thanks for reading it, glad you enjoyed it.
I do plan on continuing it, so I'll try and improve my work, though part3 may be a while now that I have started classes again.

*giggles* Don't you know that the only true way for me to read your mind, would be for me to eat you?
No problem on any wait for part 3, though I don't see what the problem is with writing it while in class, and just ignoring your teachers.

I'm in trade school it's a wee bit conspicuous to have a laptop in a commercial kitchen mate. *places a paw on his head and musses up his fur* it's too early to eat me at the moment, please take a number and wait.

*grins* Yeah, you're already busy with a tiger at the moment.

Nah. Just write it into a book and if the teacher asks, say that you're jotting down recipe ideas.

hahah, that'll stand out still written in english, in a french class, nope not suspicious, I'll get to it I just need to work on it.