

Worth noting: I've changed Kaynen's last name to Abelson. So the pun is covered up, just a bit. Also, his sister is 5, incapable of speech, and a little slow. Also, I'm totally once again just making things up without rhyme or reason. Uh, I guess that's all from me.
EDIT: Reuploaded 1/06/08 to retcon Kay's species.
Category Story / Pokemon
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 120 x 120px
File Size 4.6 kB
Listed in Folders
Uhum, yeah. Gotta admit I’m in the probably 1% here that doesn’t know squat or care about pokemon, but I did get what you were trying to do here. I think the key was the dialog having enough information to convey what was going on. Earns a ‘Nice Job’ award from one of the clueless.
Oh boy... I was a bit scared as I glanced the commentary before reading and read the word "pokemon". But I made it through the story, even if the concepts and the character... species... are unfamiliar to me. Very interesting little piece, nothing much to say in addition to that.
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