Alright, so I finally finished this chapter. Its a good long one, very exciting, and interesting (If I do say so myself). I'm really hoping to get some criticisms, so if you read it please tell me what you thought. Anyhting you liked anything you hated, anything you would change, how awsome I am ;D. Anything at all, send me a message, make a post, anything at all!
Here is a linke to the first chapter for anyone interested in reading it: http://www.furaffinity.net/view/809212/
I hope you enjoy this chapter.
Happy reading!