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New track, sorry I haven't been posting. And that I deleted everything LOL
From the doubt in our cortex
Rationale is attained;
Repose keeps us afraid
But fear is the chemical gluing our vigilance together
Reason lets us thrive
Use the spectrum in your eyes
From a callow soul comes courage
Naive courage
No God to guide me through this, my nerves quiver steadily, but that means I am free
Now, no longer hollow, but still, I'm just a formula
Oh, our hearts are led astray, but that's okay, for we are just chemicals
Our souls may stay as shallow ponds, but nothing's wrong; we are the universe
From the doubt in our cortex
Rationale is attained;
Repose keeps us afraid
But fear is the chemical gluing our vigilance together
Reason lets us thrive
Use the spectrum in your eyes
From a callow soul comes courage
Naive courage
No God to guide me through this, my nerves quiver steadily, but that means I am free
Now, no longer hollow, but still, I'm just a formula
Oh, our hearts are led astray, but that's okay, for we are just chemicals
Our souls may stay as shallow ponds, but nothing's wrong; we are the universe
Category Music / Rock
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File Size 8.93 MB
Welcome back, I suppose.
As for this track, I like it, but I'd like to pick it apart a little.
The music itself is nice. A chaotic style that reminds me of Pink Floyd. But I had a few issues with the lyrics.
Some of them don't fit the flow of the song, they feel a little forced (although the "But fear is the chemical" line felt purposely forced, ergo ironically sounded good)
Some words are a bit "wordy" and feel quite above the listener, and disrupts flow. Callow, quiver, cortex, steadily. They aren't bad words, but they jar the song a little.
I love the "Use the spectrum" line.
Issues aside, good work.
As for this track, I like it, but I'd like to pick it apart a little.
The music itself is nice. A chaotic style that reminds me of Pink Floyd. But I had a few issues with the lyrics.
Some of them don't fit the flow of the song, they feel a little forced (although the "But fear is the chemical" line felt purposely forced, ergo ironically sounded good)
Some words are a bit "wordy" and feel quite above the listener, and disrupts flow. Callow, quiver, cortex, steadily. They aren't bad words, but they jar the song a little.
I love the "Use the spectrum" line.
Issues aside, good work.
ya, I suck with lyric flow LOL. I ended up cutting lines and it made holes everywhere, but I was too happy with the instrumentation to care. XD It's very scattered brained, I agree.. I tried to explain two ideas at different spots and it doesn't really work. BETTERLUCKNEXTTIME
But, words above the listener? As long as they aren't a million syllables and tough to pronounce, I feel like I'm good to use them. Yeah, the flow is weird, but the words.. honestly aren't that hard unless you're in junior high school. I'm not going to dumb down some words for the audience, but I'm not going to pull a Faceless either. I think I picked a nice middle ground in word usage, even if I wasn't so good with flow. Here's some Faceless lyrics:
We must transcend the illusion
Breaking the barricade of infinite cognizance
A glimpse scurries trhough the peripheries of allowance
There is a doorway in the suppression of the mind
Quiver, cortex, and steadily are wordy, though? I fear for the education system. I think the hardest word in there is callow, man. XD
But, words above the listener? As long as they aren't a million syllables and tough to pronounce, I feel like I'm good to use them. Yeah, the flow is weird, but the words.. honestly aren't that hard unless you're in junior high school. I'm not going to dumb down some words for the audience, but I'm not going to pull a Faceless either. I think I picked a nice middle ground in word usage, even if I wasn't so good with flow. Here's some Faceless lyrics:
We must transcend the illusion
Breaking the barricade of infinite cognizance
A glimpse scurries trhough the peripheries of allowance
There is a doorway in the suppression of the mind
Quiver, cortex, and steadily are wordy, though? I fear for the education system. I think the hardest word in there is callow, man. XD
Pretty freakin awesome music man. Some of these vocals are starting to sound really good. Love the chord progressions, and all the shredding of course :P
As much as everyone is entitled to their opinion, I'd have to disagree with the other guy. The lyrical flow doesn't bother me any, but then again I'm used to listening to crazy insane music. . . So maybe I'm biased x3
As much as everyone is entitled to their opinion, I'd have to disagree with the other guy. The lyrical flow doesn't bother me any, but then again I'm used to listening to crazy insane music. . . So maybe I'm biased x3
have you been listening to a lot of Haken lately?
really get that sort of vibe from this song in the music and vocals :P
Very not a bad thing, this is awesome <3
Actually the middle section gave me vibes of something else I can't figured out especially the section with the long fast sweep .-.
really get that sort of vibe from this song in the music and vocals :P
Very not a bad thing, this is awesome <3
Actually the middle section gave me vibes of something else I can't figured out especially the section with the long fast sweep .-.
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