mmmm, does this also flow back to the start of the Star of Hope we've worked on? If so I like constructive comments.

I am trying to rework the Moondrop to make it more according to the Star of Hope. The storyline should've been linked to some part in the novel. However I'd like the timeline to be around 2-5 years the end of SoH.

Yeah,

Lauren began writting in a log book. "The town has grown in the past three years after my wives and I were driven from Centric. My wives, they are all so lovely. Nina, my youngest wife has been able to make all kinds of inventions with the military surplus we got from Centric. Centric has been a decent outpost, it is now in disrepair after several dragon attacks. Luchie pretty much lives there by himself, he comes up to visit every so often. Fern is doing well, she just has her episodes with falling alseep. She doesn't seem to have weakened any from all her naps, if naything she seems to be getting stronger. She is also very protective of that necklace she says I gave her. I don't know why but I feel it is connected to this town somehow. End entry, 3275 D.E.S.

lol sorry got carried away... yeah they basically live in some peace, and at the end of like book two, Luchie's father moves off back to the north. They live in peace but dragons still pop up, and lauren has to save both of his homes. Luchie is (such) a book worm, he is always taking samples of the rock and minerals samples near the old shirne. he has even taken samples from Ariache's Bath house. there I go again... anyway yeah the Ox guy and bunny lady show up, and they are from a kingdom in the south or something, no more Spoilers!

Hmm, I'm not quite confident.....first, I think that in the upper right panel, you can try add some motion blur on the monster, and some impact effect on that guy in the air(if he is being blown away).

Second, about the line "Just how does a Skull Serpent wander so close to the city", adding the place name to know where the monster comes from might help....like "How did a Skull Serpent from ____ wander so close to the city", something like that.

And the last one is, any Names and Titles for the character presented in the comic? I think it's quite important to let the readers know some kind of background.

That's all I can think about. I hope it can help you improve the comic.

Thanks, your critique gotta make this going a lot. Maybe I'll need to add some effect and stuff so the upper right panel gets more impact I suppose.

About the line about "Skull Serpant" I'll tried cover this in the on-going pages. I tried not to make it too messy with words because it'll be hard to read. But I'll make sure the line becomes more clearer in the future.