*gives the cat a hug..... that was so sadddddd.....

V.

Thanks. I have seriously got to stop writing these things, it’s beginning to get to me.

I think next week we should declare Happy Week!

Hugs...

V.

That is so sad

Yeah, sorry ‘bout that. You could you go read one of Vixxy’s again as an antidote. ;)

So sad. Too many of my classmates have their name on such a wall in this world. your story reminded me that I am powerless to stand at that wall.

Sorry. I’m actually fortunate enough not to know personally anyone on that wall, but I know plenty of those that do have friends or family that are. I hope one day you’ll be able to bear the pain and face that wall, if not for yourself for the memory of your friends and classmates.

That was pretty sad, and a little cruel I think of the mother to be honest... I mean I would have at least tried to explain to my son that his father was dead before saying "we're going to visit your father to day"...."oh by the way, we're visiting his grave". I understand the mother's way though... I mean how would you try to explain that to your son anyway? The poor woman, really. Just..not something I would have done were it my son.

However I'm not that woman and she is not me, and this way actually made for an interesting story through the eyes of the child :)

So you did very well, in characterising both the kid and his mom.

One small technical note <.< the forth paragraph began with "Timothy slimed"...was that supposed to be "smiled" or... am I missing the meaning of a verb again ^^; Sorry, just thought I'd point it out and ask.

I did enjoy this, it was an interesting take on the prompt. I do like your characters a lot...

Yeah, and I had every intention of changing that while I was writing it but by the time I had finished the first go through in editing I couldn’t really take much more of my own story. That part of their relationship I wanted it to be a misunderstanding from the aspect of him not yet having gotten the concept of death. That being said I agree with you that character’s actions shouldn’t be based on where you want the story to go but on their own motivation as reflected in the story. So, yeah I’ve just done something I hate to see in stories.

Thanks for your comments. All of them.
;)

<3s. Well all in all it wasn't a bad thing entirely. I can see a few people I know actually doing that, just nothing that I would do at all. It would make a lot of sense now that you mention it, if the kid didn't understand death. She may have tried to explain it to her son, but he never understood until he saw. That could work nicely :)

Very nice. I can see how the child would misunderstand 'going to see Father', and if you want to come back to this sometime, you could probably play that up a little from his viewpoint, maybe having him imagine how the meeting will go, and that might make it clearer that his mother isn't lying to him, just that he didn't get it. (I'd also give him a name, just to keep from having to repeat the species so often.)

Oh, wait, you did give him a name. Oops. >^_^< Anyway, maybe introduce it in the first paragraph?

Really liked this line:

"His father’s name doubled, tripled and became a blur, blending in with those other names surrounding his."

Thanks.

You have a knack for tugging on a person's heartstrings. I have to agree with everyone else and say that was sad.

I do like the point of view. It is odd and enlightening seeing the conventions of mourning from the point of view of someone who is still trying to understand them instead of an older or more mature fur who is taking them for granted. Always nice to see something through new eyes . . .

Poetigress purred ...
Really liked this line:

"His father’s name doubled, tripled and became a blur, blending in with those other names surrounding his."

That line was where I started to mist up too. It was heartrending. A very nicely thought out piece. I admit, though, not having much knowledge of military matters or memorial walls, that I didn't grasp that idea until I was reading the comments and had an 'ohhhhh' moment.

Fine work, TS. (Sorry for taking soooooo long to get to it!)

Thanks, and don't worry about taking too much time, I'm still catching up myself.

Touching. Detailed. Intense. Great work, although sad.

Okay, now I see why you told me to bring tissues with these earlier Timothy stories. When I finally realized what the large black line was, I said, "Oh s$@#!" Once again, very good. I love how even when your characters are doing the simplest acts, you can keep me glued to the page.

Thanks. Can't think of more to say other than I appreciate comments even this for from writing it. Sorry if that doesn’t make sense but I’m exhausted right now and heading for bed.

Later.