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This is my first poem that i will be submitting. It is short but i hope that it is still enjoyable. Please comment if you can. Thank you for your time. :)
Category Poetry / All
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File Size 19 kB
I like the mid-rhymes of the first stanza.
"Upon your being" and "sweetness" were the weakest parts of the poem because of the vague references. Try to be more specific to keep things interesting.
Regardless, I felt the topic was touched upon well enough and the rhymes didn't sound forced, which is a very good thing. Keep it up.
"Upon your being" and "sweetness" were the weakest parts of the poem because of the vague references. Try to be more specific to keep things interesting.
Regardless, I felt the topic was touched upon well enough and the rhymes didn't sound forced, which is a very good thing. Keep it up.
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