You need to use past tense isntead of present to create an illusion of happning and use relfective interection to build scene and description so the story can come to life for the audeince.

Gonna admit, that one took me a minute to decipher :) lot of big words I'm not used to hearing from other people.

Anyway, I'm trying a new style, something more in the moment imersive. I saw it used somewhere, and it kind of stuck with me as unique and preferable. At the same time, it's easier as a writer to literally put myself into those shoes and say 'Okay, I'm here, how do I work it out?' instead of 'If I was here, how would I...?'

Also, this seemed to be a point you were trying to make: I want it to seem like it's happening present tense, not a flashback or what have you. As far as the reader is concerned, this is the moment that everything is happening in, hense my use of the present tense.

As always, thanks for the comment and for reading :) I missed ya buddy.

Reading is a mental process and psychologically the reader translates past tense into present. This does not happen with present. Using past tense does not make something a flashback it is a mode of perspective.

Ah, okay. I do want to continue the different style, though :P I'm actually pretty locked into it, as it took me a month and change to adjust totally. I'm sorry to all who find it difficult to read, and I'll switch back if it's more preferable.

As always, thank you for your input :)