That was unique an quite touchin' mate!
Ye should ask the artist ifn ye can use some of the picture fer yer thumbnail so more fans of babyfurs can find this gem ^^

O_O You faved this? I'm confused... but thanks! As you can see, I don't handle things as other fetishists might.

I've already sent them a message and am crossing my fingers. I'm glad you liked this! ^^

Ol'Squeaks is a fan of tryin out new things, an this one he was unsure about, but he ultimately really liked how this was emotional and looked at things from a different perspective :)
Ye captured the characters well, an yer approach to the subject was pretty unique.
Here's hopin it goes through!

A good mentality to have, methinks. I hope to make all future things of this nature emotional in some way.

I'm so glad I did everypony justice! That's always the thing I worry about most.

:D Yay! Thumbnail worked out nicely mate ^^

I must say, your posts are quite interesting to read, old bean.

He's a crazy guy like that. It's been his thing for as long as I've known it. That isn't more than a few months, honestly.

Heh.

Awww! This story managed to bring a number of tears to my eyes. I've read a number of babyfur-pony stories in my day, but this is my favorite yet. I couldn't hold back my smile as Mrs. Cake and Pinkie had that beautiful moment on page 22. You really have a knack for writing these, dude. I hope you keep up this excellent work ^^

^^ Oh, you silly filly. :P I can hardly believe how emotion I made this, personally. If I brought tears to your eyes through a fit of emotion, that is a compliment most extreme to me. Thank you!

I suppose you've seen my presence on other padded pony stories. More specifically, me bitching about them?

Well, I'm not here for that.

Congratulations on making a solid, well thought-out approach to an adult foal story. You handled the subject matter with a level of care that has, so far, been absent from just about every other story I've had the (mis)fortune to read. There was a clear set of steps leading into Pinkie's "foaling", as it were, that lent an air of believability to the proceedings. It wasn't some "And then I liked diapers" schlock that so often infests the fetish, nor did it go too far with the subject matter like so many others that feel as if, if something is wearing a diaper, it has to make full use of it within a page.

That said, it wasn't perfect. Some sentences were awkward and I noticed several minor mistakes (for example, barrow instead of borrow). A quick edit from a semi-talented third party would reveal most of them.

As my closing comment, allow me to express my interest and humbly request more, good sir, may I please have some more.

I have seen your work, and deeply appreciate your opinion. And, yes, I have seen your complaints, and agree with them. They lack actual, you know, story most of the time. As such, I'm honored that such a refined reader as yourself has compliments for me. I know exactly how you feel, I really do. There's a certain tenderness and care that could easily be explored, but is so often overlooked. Why is this?

And, damn it, do you know an editor? hey seem so very rare to me. I swear, I re-read this thing twenty times and I still can't find the mistakes. I get the feeling it's an aspergers thing, but who knows?

You'll have more when more is ready, ya greedy goose.

If I do have any complaints, it's the rather hammy and constant use of "My Little Pinkie" (especially the all-caps) at the end. It leadens the story's flow and made it more awkward to read.

People ignore it because they're writing with one hand and, ahem, "polishing" with the other. They don't want a realistic progression of events, just something to get off to.

I would recommend Ponychan's /fic/, if you can stomach their gung-ho approach. Be forewarned: Not reading and becoming familiar with their sticky can be a death sentence. If it's TL:DR, then just make sure you submit to a review thread and not make your own thread just for requesting a review since they'll tear you apart for that (admittedly, it's a morbidly entertaining spectacle worthy of popcorn). The subject material isn't too over-the-top, so I don't think your story's reception will be particularly sour. Applejinx's thread is great for getting critique on how close to canon your characters are while the Training Grounds would be your best bet for editing assistance.

Some things you'll need:
A synopsis for your story.
Your story on a Google Document with anonymous commenting enabled (this will let your reviewer mark mistakes on the story directly, making edits far easier).
A steel ego for the bruising it's about to take.

Ah, you have aspies too?

I'll take more when it's ready.

Hmm, I guess I see what you mean. I was just following the rules of proper nouns (as close as they can apply, since language isn't made with story telling in mind) when I was doing that.

I've tried the /fic/ section, but I always get ignored there, even with my non-fetish material. I don't know what it is, man, I try to follow the rules. If you're interested, I also have a fanfic called "Celestia's Daughter". The twist is it's Applejack.

Aspies: its what all the cool writers have. Seriously, why are all the good writers blessed/cursed with this? It's the darndest thing.

It's brewing, you'll get yours yet.

Point taken. Still, Just using "Pinkie" would have sufficed. Save the "My Little" when you want emphasis.

What other stories have you posted there? If you don't make a good synopsis you story may be passed over for not appearing interesting enough. You also have to make sure to investigate your reviewer: there have been several that make a thread and then never deliver on their review promises.

Dunno. Just one of those quirks of life.

I look forward to it.

I'll remember that for future use, and edit this when I can.

Hmm, a story called "The Shadows the Past Leaves" which totally flopped, and the "Celestia's Daughter" story I believe I mentioned. I tried to give the best synopses I could, and even specified that I was trying something new by having Applejack be Celestia's Daughter, but nobody bought it. So I gave up, dejected.

Sounds like a plan.

When did you last visit /fic/? I don't remember either of those stories and I'm a regular there.

It's been a while. A long while. Maybe I should try again... Do you really think someone would proof-read this kind of story? (And I do intend to keep themes relatively the same, with actual plot and not clopping of any kind.)

/fic/ underwent a huge shift in the way it works. EqD now redirects rejected authors to the board since the place is run by reviewers and the like. It's pretty much the biggest writing resource in the fandom.

The themes aren't too overt. Make sure to let your reviewer know what they're getting into to avoid backlash, but otherwise I think you'll be fine as long as you follow the rules. Remember: making a thread only to request a review is a death sentence. Read the sticky, find a review thread that catches your attention and make sure to read its rules as well (some, for example, demand you provide a word count). And again, hosting it on Google Docs with commenting enabled is a must; it'll make both your work and your reviewer's far easier in regards to edits. If you can't figure out how to use it, ask in the sticky for help.

Hmm, alright, I'll give it a try. I do remember them stressing the rule about not making a thread just to ask for a review, but thanks for reinforcing it. I'll try to do that when I have the time. It's not easy when you're homeless and jobless, you know?

Seems like they may be moving bases. Holding back on a review request for a day or two could be a good idea since things are going to get shuffled.

Damn. Hope you get into a better place soon.

Alright, thanks for the head's up. I don't think I was going to bother right now anyway, but thanks.

Yeah. As Confucius says, "Shit Happens". Writing is my outlet in this time.

Welcome.

I do not remember that particular passage.

well, it might be an extreme oversimplification of the general meaning of his words...

And so did Jesus say, "Lolwut", and the people did rejoice...

On The "Aspies" part: I know what that's like. Personally, I've read too many fan fics to write a story as good as yours, but then again, my specialty is artwork, so...

I agree with TheBackup. This was beautiful, well-written, not to mention well-paced. It's perfect for readers of this genre, as it is taken with great care and respect for this lifestyle. After all, for many people, this way of living is just that: A way of Life. It is bizarre, no denying that, but you wrote this debunking the classic "monsters" that this kind of fandom usually gets; namely, the whole "all Adult Babies are freaks" thing. You took this lifestyle, and showed that "monster" was false. That people do this because it makes them feel comfortable, that they enjoy it because of the fun and freedom that Infanthood has.

You also had the Cakes, or rather Mrs. Cake, be confused about this lifestyle from the start, and progressively built up a sort of understanding as you went along, to the point that she starts getting the idea, to the point where she realistically wants to become a part of it as a motherly figure.

What's even more impressive is that you took characters who've already had their personalities established on a global basis, and wrapped this concept around it with logic and reasoning, not changing them in the slightest, but instead making them fit into their personalities in a way that works for them. I'm impressed.

I'll only admit you uck if you leave it at this chp X( I demand an update! UPDAAAATE! DONT MAKE ME GET CHUCK NORRIS!... Seriously, you know how hard it'd be to get a celebrity like him here?

I have no fear of Chuck Norris! If only because I don't think you'll ever be able to pay him... But there'll be more. As I hope my quality demontrates, I'm a dedicated writer.

Ah ha! Now your in for it! I just contacted chuck Norris' email account iAmchucknorris@badliars.com! I just sent him a thousand dollars, and he's on his way right now >:)!!!...though come to think of it, he said he'd reply ASAP. when he got the money, and that was weeks ago...wait a minute...I shouldn't be lower cased on an email!!!

Don't worry, I found him.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pcxthg885ZY

Aww. So sweet!

Grammar's good and the story makes sense.

I especially like the ending. Though for some reason, Keep Alive from Ace Combat: Assault Horizon was playing in my head at the later part. And Driving With the Top Down from Iron Man was playing at the part where Pumpkin was flying. I attribute this to the fact that I am not neurotypical.

Thank you very much. I wanted to explore the often overlooked tender side of the adult baby/foal. Though there are gramatical mistakes, as thebackup pointed out.

I like the ending, too. That makes me tear up a little bit each time I read it. Am I a narcissist because of that?

Seriously, is every writer I like on the autism spectrum? I only know one, and it's not me. But I know that feeling you're getting with the music. It just happens, eh?

It's just that the music is so wildly inappropriate for the situation. I mean, really? Choral/industrial and industrial rock in an adult foal story?

Also, you may want to settle on a spelling of the title. Right now you have both Pinkie Dinky Pie and Pinkie Dinkie Pie.

It's only inappropriate because society says it is. Don't block your mind like that, man. Also, fixed the title. I'm a dummy sometimes.

Damn, I just realized something. Boomer's two adult foals are Lyra and Bon-Bon!

My explanation for why they hang out; they actually pretend to be sisters! I thought it was clever.

Why don't you reply to Conflicter's posts? Making new comments every time looks untidy.

So you're continuing onward from here? ... Huh be interesting to see what you'd do after that! ...Or did you mean that you'd continue onward in the sense that you'd keep writing diapered pony stories, and are now pretty much done with this one?

As the title suggests, this is chapter 1. There will be more in the adventures of Mrs. Cake being Pinkie's mother.

Yeah well as pointless as the question may of seemed I felt compelled to ask it... I don't know what you'll do next since, but whatever it is should probably be pretty interesting =3.

Now remember, there are no stupid questions, only stupid people. Naw, I'm joking. If you have a question, ask. Curiosity expands your mind. Who cares if a cat gets killed? Cats are mean, anyway.

"There is no such thing as a stupid questions, but there are a lot of inquisitive idiots."

Is that a personal quote? That's the best. I would like to borrow this, if I may.

Unfortunately not. It'd from a demotivator.
"What does not kill me delays the inevitable."

Could you please put this on Google Docs? I can't download the file and I really want to read this.

It is done. I expect a proper review and fave for my effort.

Er, by it being done, I mean there's a link in the description.

Thank you very much. I'll leave a little review once time permits.

Wow, I really enjoyed this, very good Conflicted, very good, I look forward to more! But honestly I don't know why someone would want to "Get off" to this as thebackup would say, I only found it sweet and charming, and a good read from start to finish!

Oh, and the want to be pinkie in that story

Thank you very much, scary ghost face. I'm glad you enjoyed it. But thebackup was referring to how some babyfur stories go straight to something sexually arousing for some instead of trying to build a story, and he wasn't talking about my story specifically. He was complimenting me, saying my story is well thought out.

I am really happy you found it sweet. I wanted to explore the tender side of the ab/dl style, something I think is often overlooked.

And who wouldn't want to be Pinkie the adult foal? I found myself quite jelly of her myself.

1. Lamo'd at scary ghost face.
2. Never said he insulted you (kinda surprising lol).
3. Couldn't agree more now that I think about it.
4. Nobody.

Make more! PLZ

Soon, my friend... soon.

That was the most beautiful story of abdl nature I have ever read. It had me smiling so hard my cheeks hurt. Please never stop writing. You are incredibly talented and your stories are a joy to read.

Aww, thank you! I rather like the tenderness that is available in these situations. It's something you don't often see, so I wanted to do it.

Can we expect to see more of this story?

It doeth say "ch1". So, yes, there will be more of this.

Good to hear. There are a few stories that have died at chapter one. You know what this calls for? Baby pinkie fanart!

Ooh, please tell me when you make that! I might use it as cover art, if you'll allow me.

In my gallery I have two pictures of pinkie in a diaper. The one she is curled sleeping on a floor and the second is the fluttershy/pinkiepie crib one. If you have any other suggestions I may just draw them.

Yep, I've seen those, and they're adorable! Hmm, how about one with pinkie playing blocks or something with the Cake twins? Or maybe one of Mrs. Cake reading her a bed time story. Or (for chapter 3 of my story) a picture of Dash and Pinkie playing together. Just some random thoughts, eh?

...

Wow.

This is, in my humble opinion, the most impressive padded pony story I've had the pleasure of reading in my short time in the community. It's wonderfully paced, very well written, almost always (if not always) in character and clearly not written purely for the fetish content. Quite frankly, it puts anything else that I've read or written to shame.

Be proud of this. Be VERY proud.

That certainly means a lot coming from you. You and thebackup are my favorite padded pony writers, and such praise feels wonderful.

I take ALL my writing seriously, fetish or not. A story is a story is a story, I like to say, and a fetish should be can be a means, and maybe a point, but should never be the goal. I have written some other things as well, though real life gets in the way and I haven't written more for it. I am, indeed, proud of my work, because I get to bring other people joy or pleasure.

But don't sell yourself for half price. Like I said, you're one of my favorite padded pony riders. If you hold this in such esteem, imagine how good you must be for it's author to like your work.

I'm one of your favourites?

I feel all warm and fuzzy inside! =D

You are indeed (and I meant to say writers, not riders. Aspergers, eh?). You explored the tenderness and/or strangeness of the situations in your stories. Not to mention you were bold enough to do Mr. Cake. You are talented, and I hope to more from you.

So long as there's always demand, I'll try and supply. Whilst I do have an idea for yet another story, I want to get the one that I've just started at least halfway done before I move on to it.

Aww, thank you! I'm so happy to hear that people loved this story so much and I made them feel emotional. I'm writing more, when my muse permits it. But I'll make more, I promise.

Cake! *nomnomnom*

Seriously, though, thanks for the watch, but do know I have other fetishes, so I hope you can respect that.

Yay, glad you liked it! :D I like the often unexplored tender, parental side of the fetish.

i teared up...one of the very best adult foal stories that i have seen...ever.

Thank you very much. :)

One of the better adult foal story's I've read. I really do like how you took the aproach of the caretaker rather then the adult foal. That must have been hard to do. A great story and I'm looking forward to the next chapter!

Thank you very much! It wasn't all that hard, actually. One just has to put themselves in the right horseshoes, as it were. I mainly did it to put a new spin on how Adult Foal stories usually go. After all, the caretaker should be enjoying the sensations and feelings as much as the foal.

My friend, whatever it is you may be conflicted about, I can safely presume it isn't over your talent for storytelling. This a lovely little journey which I am thankful to have gotten lost in for a while.

It was clear from the outset that you meant for the story to unfold gradually and rationally, upon firm footing toward an emotional payoff. Well, it turned out to be worth all the wait.

The cakes' rationale was believable and well conceived, which made the unfolding crescendo of cuteness equally believable in turn. Your admirable sense of reader expectation, which you managed to tease out by slowly filling in the picture with all the adorable things to come, held my attention and built suspense at a perfect pace. It was all a very clever and cute framing device made so much more so for being quite credible within the context of the canon characters we've come to know and love:

Mrs. Cake really could be that maternal, and Pinkie really might be that regressive if somepony like Mrs. Cake only realized it, and you allowed them both to realize it in a completely natural way.

At times, the characters were so in character that I actually became disappointed when I remembered that I wasn't reliving a real episode. And did I mention it was super super cute and precious? Cuteness for its own sake is lovely, of course, but cuteness you can really believe in is just, wow.

I'll admit that I may not have been so taken with it had I not had some acquaintance with some of the more typical products of fetish fanfiction, but, fetish or not, you've charted a course for both Pinkie and her caregivers' emotional development which I can't wait to follow.

Well, thank you very much, you fabulous pony. If you must know what I'm conflicted about, it's when to add something to a given story/plot.

The hilarious thing is, for me, I never plan anything I write. Sure, I come up with goals a checkpoints, but the guff in between is spur of the moment. In essence, I try to figure out what steps lead to the emotional payoff, and be sure to steer away from anything that leads away. Sometimes it takes 2000 words, sometimes 8000 words. It depends on what that story wants, or what the goal needs.

I've been writing fanfiction for five years, and out-of-character has always been my biggest worry. After years paying attention to this specific aspect, I consider myself extremely good at not doing it. The secret is reaching a zen state where you realize it doesn't exist. Any character can do anything, you just have to transition at the right pace to reach it.

As such, I take it as an extreme compliment for you to notice that, at least, I did plan on making it a rationally paced story. And for you to say that they were so in character that it seemed like it could be a reliving of an episode is a great honor for me. Thank you very much.

Ack! My soul is melting from the warmth and sheer happiness and emotion presented in this story with such sincerity to soften even the hardest hearts.

Thank you, I'm glad you liked it! :)

It was too adorable! It totally made me cry and all... it's so bad such sweet things never happen in real life... I'm so jelly of Pinkie :')

While I don't think I've ever seen anything else from you, I now know you're a really amazing writer, you could touch my soul so much - I know it must sound creepy or something... just keep writing, and continue this story as soon as you can, please :)

Well, sometimes they do, I hear. They're just really rare. A tip? Your AB parent can sometimes turn out to be your best friend of your girlfriend, if you just ask. I wouldn't know, that's just what I heard.

Nope, this is my first (but hopefully not last) babyfur story. If you are interested, I also wrote a non-fetish story called "Celestia's Daughter". The twist is that it's Applejack. :P No, it doesn't sound creepy. It's what any artist strives to accomplish, to leave an impact in their audience. I'm in a bit of a funk now, but I'll keep working on this, don't you worry. ;)

I just read this story again... and I cried all over the place again... but this time because this is the thing that made me happy, that helped get through this past year... thank you.

(p.s.: where can one find the Celestia's daughter story you mentioned in this comment?)

I'm glad, Starry, that I could make you so happy. :)

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/438.....stias-daughter

Here it is~ Please, tell me what you think, if you can.

Havent read fanfics in a while cause i just got tired on how uncreative the stories are, even the high rated ones. when i came by you story i was curious enough to make an exception and was amazed. I love how story driven it is and focused more on character relations than the fetish. I wouldnt even call it a fetish fic either, its such a good story on its own. I wish the show had an episode building relationships between the cakes and pinkie pie. Anyways keep up the good work and i'll look forward to reading more chapters.

I'm glad you gave me a chance and were not disappointed. I try to write actual stories with my work, no matter the content. There is an opportunity for tender, loving feelings that are so often missed. And I also wish for more relationship building with the Cakes and Pinkie. I'd love to know how she wound up working for them. Thank you very much, and I shall try.

I can't say I have anything to offer that hasn't already been said, but I just had to come out of the woodwork to tell you how much I loved this! Really, by the time I was finished manly tears were shed, and I felt a little bit better about my AB side.. It's so nice to see someone handle the emotional side of it all in their work, and handle it well. You really left me hoping that it was all real.

You also got my favorite characters from the show down perfectly. How could I NOT like?! Bravo, sir, bravo.

Thank you very much! I wish I could say more than that. But I am happy to see that I stirred emotions and tears, which were parts of my goal. Don't feel guilt about being an AB, it's just you being innocent and truthful.

That means a lot, as I am told keeping characters in character while taking them to steange places is a strong suit of mine.

If you liked my story, please read "Raising Raindrops", simply search for it. It is inspired by my story, takes place in the same canon, and is written just as well. Go fave and review it, please!

Done and done! Thanks for the tip, I didn't expect to find something in a similar vein quite so fast. Your head canon holds a lot of potential, it's nice that other writers are expanding it.

Also, thanks. That was quite kind of you to say.

CHAPTER 2! Chapter 2! CMON! Ya workin' on it?

Kinda sorta. Been busy with moving. Be sure to bug me, though.

Sorry didnt know, if ya busy, ya busy. I understand... Was just wondering...

Don't be sorry, how could you know? Little reminders like this help me, anyway, so thanks!

Ya, i've been really curious with the next chapter. Take your time though

I'm working on it. :/

Can't wait 'til chapter two.

Neither can I, honestly. Feel free to pester me to write it.

Are you ever going to update? I'm going crazy with excitement and patients! If you cant think of another follow-up chapter, you should try making a new one based off Crinkloo's new pinkie picture ^^

I'm working on chapter two as we speak. >.< Life is just crazy, though. I'm working on more, though I won't be referencing the new Pinkie picture. Feel free to bug me to update, though. :3

you should do the other images after you finish this series, you made a cute story

Heh, heh, you mean one for each of Fillyscoots pictures? Not a bad idea at all, to be honest, but we'll see what happens.

yeah, maybe even come up with random ones

When will this be updated?
(Im asking cause I want to know. And my friend will make a new chp of Ponyville daycare!)

It ought to be in the next week or two, hopefully. Be sure to vote for it in my livesteam journal. And please link me to your friends story. :)

Oh my this is such a wonderfully cute story, I loved every word of it! I do have a quick question about the rest of the chapters, though. Will there be any "clop-worthy" bits anywhere or are you strictly trying to avoid that type of stuff? I understand if you don't want to give out spoilers or anything and I respect that, but I just had to take a chance and ask.

Looking forward to reading more regardless!

Thank you very much! And I am trying to avoid cloppy parts and stick with the cuddly parts of this fetish. Buuuut, I am willing to talk about the story. :3 I'm working on more, though, I promise~

that was a very amazing and cute story. i can't wait to read the other chapters once they get uploaded.
great plot progression and very touching.
keep up the great work^^

Thank you very much, I'm glad you enjoyed it. :3

The catharses.

Made me wet my bed.

I'm glad you liked it. :) I hope you won't need a diaper. :P

I registered here just to ask you something, I'm French and I made ​​the translation of your fiction
but I would like a second chapter because it's a great story and I love

Can you add me on Skype : Fleurine Greendy

I'm afraid I'm not accepting any more requests on skype. But please, feel free to message me through FA any time. And you're more than welcome to post the translation as long as you credit me.

As for chapter two? We will see about that.

Of course you mentioned, such talent can not be hidden ^ ^
As in France against DL is very hiden and i can not post in a website
i wait the Chapter 2, just for me