I very much enjoyed this one. The fight scene was well written. Tamaho's sense of never being out of control makes for an entertaining fight, I think. I'm curious to know why Tamaho was getting so nervous and why a temple would need a girl from (I'm assuming) far away.
Do tell me if the second part gets posted by the other person, if you would be so kind :D

-M

since I don't think anything else of this story will ever be writen here's some story points I had worked it, mind you, since me and lokan were alternating some of thos might have changed based on what he'd do.

Tamaho suffers from Agoraphobia, He's nover been anywhere before and the monastary where he lived was nears a rather small town, since he never had been in a large crowd before he didn't know about it.

as for the girl, she's destined to be an Oracle, so the temple was going to be training her. but she had other plans, she was going to flee the temple and find Tamaho again as he's on his way to accomplish the mission the temple was going to give him

since I don't think anything else of this story will ever be writen here's some story points I had worked it, mind you, since me and lokan were alternating some of thos might have changed based on what he'd do.

Tamaho suffers from Agoraphobia, He's nover been anywhere before and the monastary where he lived was nears a rather small town, since he never had been in a large crowd before he didn't know about it.

as for the girl, she's destined to be an Oracle, so the temple was going to be training her. but she had other plans, she was going to flee the temple and find Tamaho again as he's on his way to accomplish the mission the temple was going to give him

Tamaho's quick. *laughs* I like that. Reminds me of one of my own characters.

The fighting seen was spectacular, and very well-orchestrated. Brought up a lot of tension.

What exactly IS Tamaho? Was his species mentioned, cause I didn't catch anything...

A very nice read. I missed dinner trying to break away from it. *laughs*

thanks, I'm glad you liked it.

Tamaho is a rabbit, the only place his specie is mentione is when the weasel says that "He'll make the bunny talk" :)

Oh I see. I thought "Bunny" was some sort of slang insult. Tamaho's description really didn't make him seem quite the bulky one; lithe and agiile is what I gained, hence all the dodging. Maybe "Bunny" could have been said as an insult to his size.

Bah. I was wrong. *laughs*

kindar chuckles "I would attribute it to me trying tobe too subtle"

But subtlety has its rewards. I blame it on me being a bit too analytical. You're a wonderful writer. I know I can learn from you.

thanks, I'll happy to help in any way I can

Would you care to read a chapter of what I've got?... I've yet to find someone with the time, or the skill.

If so, send me a note with your e-mail. And I'll send it your way.