It's the Ultimate Showdown of Ultimate Destiny! With Alan Menkin! ;D

So now we just need Bat-Zeke and Stunner-Man to show up?

Hey, goin' back through your gallery. I love the passion you put into your writing. :D This was touching, although you can tell it's a "what if", if only for the implication that Boris might actually have a sense of humor! :O

Boris has a sense of humor. Its just....buried. Deeply. And only comes out on blue moons. <.< >.>

And thank you for the compliment. I try and put a lot of emotion into each of my stories because it makes them come out better. This one was fun to write if anything for the big production number at the end...PCA stuff needs more big production numbers.

I agree. A very cool idea for both a school event and a way to move a plot along. :D

I want to give you one criticism, however, if you'll take it.

Fire away. Art doesn't grow on praise alone.

This is a structural complaint, which I generally detest making, just FYI. I'm not sure if this has remained consistent in your more recent stories, but you have a particular quirk that impacts the readability of your stories.

When a character's dialogue begins a paragraph, it is common practice to place the character's name somewhere after it to indicate who has spoken. This is not, of course, necessary to do if the flow of conversation is either transparent or unimportant. However, you very, very often will continue with action or a response from another character directly after the first speaks. I find this very confusing, because it makes it sound like that second character has spoken. After figuring it out, of course, I've learned to cope, but it is nevertheless a very disconcerting habit.

Allow me to give an example, right from this story.

Both glanced up to see Boris and Duncan the Sudowoodo approaching them. Hokori couldn’t help but smirk as she saw the Team Generation member.

“Here I thought you guys wouldn’t want to talk to us after what happened,” Duncan grinned at the leader of team Nocturne and rubbed the back of his head with a rough hand.

“Nah, we don’t hold it against you guys,” He said, lowering his arm, “besides, it makes quieter at practice,” Hokori give a little snort of a laugh before looking back towards Weaver who was still stunned.

This section contains two instances of this occurrence. In the second paragraph, it is not immediately clear who is speaking. Hokori is mentioned prior to the dialogue, but her actions don't necessarily mean she is going to speak; likewise, Duncan is mentioned directly after the dialogue, and given the inclusion of the ," directly before his name, it suggests that the dialogue is his.

Reading on, we see that this is not the case, and the entire scene becomes extremely confusing. You specifically tell us that "he," meaning Duncan, has said the second dialogue line, but again you follow up with a comma-quote combination, which again suggests that Hokori has spoken.

Two things could be done to clear these up. First, make sure you end dialogue with a period in the quote if the person has finished speaking. It seems nitpicky, but in this case, punctuation makes all the difference as far as readability is concerned.

Second, if you want to avoid overuse of dialogue tags, and you should, set single lines of dialogue off on their own. Doing this, the first paragraph transition would become:

Hokori couldn’t help but smirk as she saw the Team Generation member.

“Here I thought you guys wouldn’t want to talk to us after what happened.”

Duncan grinned at the leader of team Nocturne and rubbed the back of his head with a rough hand.

You could also, in this case, tack the dialogue on to the end of that first paragraph, so that we are absolutely certain it is Hokori who is speaking.

Like I said, I don't know if you've continued this trend in recent work, but I feel it is a problem and I wanted to point it out. I'm sorry for being a little tl;dr, and I'm also sorry for harping on structure, but... well, I just hope I'm clear about everything. c.c

No no, that's what we call an example of Constructive Criticism. Its a good thing to point out as I've never noticed it so it gives me something to look for in future stories. Thank you.

I wonder where you'll be going next, given your big plot is over, as is the battle with Nocturne. I look forward to it! ^v^

Hmmm, I was noticing this in some of your stories, too. It actually helps the flow if you write it almost as if it had been an RP in an IM client, with each characters dialog and actions being separated from other characters.

Yup. You'll notice a change in my later stories.