I had to do this revision for my CRW2001 (Creative Writing) class and this is what I came up with.

The class had a lot of "too matrix like" comments for the previous story, so I really, really went on a limb to try and make this original. It is pretty crazy, and the main character also kind of reacts unrealistically, but I did what I had too.

Anyway, Zacks name is now Reno and Archimedes plays a huuuuuge part now.