A very interesting piece, almost with a prose-poem quality. Love to see this expanded...

Agreed. I particularly liked the list of what he couldn't see followed by "But he could see the past." That line alone was very powerful.

I liked the premise of the character, but if you want it to be a story you should expand and add some conflict, maybe have him see his own past so we can learn more about him.

He can't see his own past; he can see the past in the sky because light from distant objects takes time to find its way to us. That's what came to mind when I thought about the writing prompt.

And the nice thing about the prompts is that you can quit after 15 minutes and never really make a story out of it, but you're supposed to share what you've done--that's why this is in scraps.

okay yah! I was just giving my 2 bits.

Wow, now that's extraordinary!

Way cool... I am reminded (mentally) of David Bowie all dressed up in a similar fashion. I think the movie was 'The man Who Fell To Earth'. It certainly tells us that sometimes too much of something is deffinately not good.

*gives him a hug... good job hun.

V.

You're right, I just thought of that now..where he's strapped into a chair in that movie, and they take an X ray of his head despite his pleas..

*laughs and dances around with him... ahhh... careful of all the toxic stuff...

V.

Greetings,

As mentioned above. Very interesting play on ideas. I like it. Thanks for letting me read.

-Koronis

I'm glad you liked it!

Very cool. The concept is very interesting.

That's high praise, coming from you--I read your "twins" piece, that was very cool.

That's funny how Vixyy thought of a different movie. The one that came to mind for me was The Man With The X-Ray Eyes, particularly the real ending hardly anybody's seen.

I don't agree with this in scraps. Nor should it be expanded. PT with the stripes is right - this should be worked on, but not changed. It's lovely. Simple. Easy on the mind. Thought provoking. The phrasing is dreamlike. It's self contained and enigmatic ... and I'm starting to sound pompous so that's all I'll say.

Other than I've favourited it because it's really good.

(and double points coz there's no eggs in it...)

Awww.

Well, I'm glad you liked it anyhow. :> Thanks for the +fav.

I have sometimes imagined how it would be to see every single wavelenght of electromagnetic spectrum. Would drive one insane, I guess. This is a very good story, it definetly pictured the ability as I had imagined it. Great little piece, I enjoyed reading this.