it has potential, some grammatical errors but the story flows well. I give it a B-

*chuckles* This from the one who can't seem to tell the difference between a comma and a period. Thanks for the laugh, I needed it XD

This, is definitely going to be a lot of fun to add to XD I <3 being your twin hun.

Speaking of, it might be wise to let folks know where you're drawing your grammatical influences from sweetie. Remember, you needed to tell me as much as well <3

I use punctuation for dramatic effect. Like. Emphasis. For. Words. and a comma is used to tie two related sentences together into one very long one. Famous writers have done a single sentence for more than one page. I believe the record is 6 pages. So please, keep your petty comments to yourself before I have to report you for harassment.