The only criticism I could offer, apart from a couple of spelling and grammatical errors here and there, is that it suddenly shifts from narrating in the past tense to present.

The only thing I could think to suggest would be a little more reason as to why the tribes were fighting. Or, at the very least, to state that there must have been a reason, even if it's just having the narrator comment on the futility and/or stupidity of causes so trivial that nobody even remembers them now.

Beyond that, I've got nothing.

Ah, I'll fix that in the final story. I knew it was going to be rough, but I had a tough time even making this. I see that It is still too condensed to convey the details of exactly what the legend says. Thanks for that though. As for the switch from past to present, it's how the legend is told, being on a planet that almost seems out to kill you, the snowfoxes look only to the future.