I can appreciate the fact that you have a grasp of sentence structure and punctuation, you're already a step up over a lot of the writers I've seen on this site.

The content is... well, lets just say ponies aren't my thing. I admit, I clicked on this on the front page because pony stories are typically good for a laugh, but was surprised to see this one at least has the beginnings of a respectable story... I mean, for a story about ponies at least. The "journal" approach is a good one to take when introducing a character and I've always been a fan of it when used properly. You handle it well enough and while its a little bit stilted in its phrasing at points (If she has or does, does or will she match my level, or surpass it? for example), it manages to convey a mostly realistic sense of how people would write in a journal.

My concerns are largely about the characters, as I mentioned before; ponies were old hat about twenty minutes after the first brony reared their head and that all your characters are pre-established in a continuity you didn't create makes it come off as cheesy and unoriginal. As a beginning writer you should focus on original content and themes, branch out and expand your own abilities to create characters and you'll find your stories will improve by leaps and bounds. You have the talent to paint a picture, but you're using a paint-by-numbers canvas.

There's some repetition as well, and I'd consider revising to streamline the writing a bit. You use "But I digress" twice in a very short frame, and a "please don't mind me when I go off topic" which is synonymous with "But I digress". I felt like I wasn't so much as reading an account of the character's day, but just them rambling about inane details.

Character, and theme are more important than the ability to string words together. While you can sometimes sneak one through with some pretty phrasing or imagery, if your characters are weak and your theme scattered and incoherent, you're going to lose your readers before they reach the end of even a short story.

From your criticism here, I think I now have some grasp on my strengths and weaknesses in terms of Writing.

Thank you for taking time out of your life to tell me such, I shall do my best to improve my skill where I have failed.

The journal approach is quite interesting. I cannot give you any helpful critism like the last guy. I must say though I had to laugh at the whole part about Sombra's death being permanent because the story I plan of writing next (after the one I am working on now) is supposed to involve reassembling the shards of Sombra.