The big problem with this is the grammer. I usually read my stories once or twice over before submitting them. You'd be sursprised how many mistakes you can catch proof reading your own stuff. As for the content, it is a little short, but this is just the opening. It manages to catch my interest because I wonder who that pony is, and who his master his (although I may have an idea). So I hope you can come out with more soon because I always look forward to a new adventure. Last thing: You may want to choose a different document format. Open Office may be free, but probably not everyone has it. You should be able to tell open office to save in .doc format or if you don't feel any fancy formatting is necessary a simple .txt file will do.

Thanks for your input. I know Open office sucks, but sadly my word is down. I'll look over it again and work more on it. I have a friend in my state that is also willing to help me draw up a few things. My 3DS max skills are a little rusty so If i can get the help. I might animate it. I mean with the way the last EPS ended. I think they might be done with the show. Once again thank you for you input. I will use all of it to my best.

I thought the same thing about the show, but I've had a few people say there is going to be a season 4. We'll see.

Also here is a niffty tool if you've never seen it http://generalzoi.deviantart.com/#/d47efz4
I used it (and some MS paint work) to create 3 of my thumbnails. The other one I stole from the internet >o<, but it's just a screen cap from the show, so I don't feel bad.

I"ll look at it, but there can't be a season four, They more or less just started season 3 and ended it with what 6 eps