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★Plus1 belongs to meggersnuff(story) and Neko-maya (art).
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★Plus1 belongs to meggersnuff(story) and Neko-maya (art).
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Category Artwork (Digital) / Comics
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 848 x 1200px
File Size 833 kB
Um, hate to say this (because I know what it's like to be told something major-ish isn't right after all the work), but having her facing right in the initial frame then facing left in the third frame is disconcerting. It makes it look like she's done a major change of position between these two frames.
In film-making the problem is called 'crossing the line', moving the viewpoint over an invisible centerline of who/what you're filming, giving the unintended impression that they've changed direction/facing between two frames. (Yes, I've had problems with it too.)
In film-making the problem is called 'crossing the line', moving the viewpoint over an invisible centerline of who/what you're filming, giving the unintended impression that they've changed direction/facing between two frames. (Yes, I've had problems with it too.)
I understand the logic behind it though - if she were facing right in the third panel, she would be facing off the edge of the page, rather than inward to keep with the composition, which is quite well done. I love the clear wide borders, by the way. And the bold way of having the speech bubbles use space in previous frames rather than trying to fit them into their own frame (yes, been there, done that. Fitting long speech bubbles into small spaces is not enjoyable). While putting speech bubbles in their own frame is less likely to be confusing, it's doesn't have the cleanness of design that this has.
Other than this, (I make it sound like it's all negative), it's quite well drawn!
Other than this, (I make it sound like it's all negative), it's quite well drawn!
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