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Captain David Everett and his squad have been sent to respond to a series of reports of illegal mining in the distant town of Ardis. The eight soldiers are met by Nathan Frost, the Talwyn master of shadow. The scene they find at the crystal refinery is far different than what they expected with far reaching consequences.
Starring:
Chris Hartley
Kyle Simon
Kathris Reinhardt
Sir Walter Mathis
Nathan Frost
Captain David Everett
Marla Frost
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Chronology note: This takes place one month after The First Lesson, and two months prior to the war. It occurs at the same time as Nadir.
Status: First draft posted.
Starring:
Chris Hartley
Kyle Simon
Kathris Reinhardt
Sir Walter Mathis
Nathan Frost
Captain David Everett
Marla Frost
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LaurenRiversChronology note: This takes place one month after The First Lesson, and two months prior to the war. It occurs at the same time as Nadir.
Status: First draft posted.
Category Story / General Furry Art
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With this set of short stories I've tried to arrange them in chronological order so they fill in a lot of the gaps between the larger narratives, and expose what some of the characters are doing during these times. ;) This and the other one I posted cover the same events from two opposite POV's, so if you read the other one you'll see a connection. :)
Thank you so much for your support, readers are well cherished by me, you guys make it all worth it. :)
Thank you so much for your support, readers are well cherished by me, you guys make it all worth it. :)
Thanks so much, I'm glad you chose this one. I'm rather proud of these two stories since I worked very hard to plot, write, and execute them simultaneously. They're twin stories, this one tells the story from Chris's perspective, and the other tells the same events from Kathris's. Both sides of the same story, so they're different, but where they intersect.... ;) The way I like to work is that all my comics, stories, etc.... When you see it as a whole, everything lines up perfectly. It all makes sense, and the OMG moments....
The last line for each story was a last moment thing, but each one seemed to have the right gravitas, it being the last thing you remember. :)
It feels good to be back. Even if I don't end up trying to go pro, I'm writing again, and it's a big first step considering where I was mentally two years ago. I swore I'd never write again. I couldn't even sit down at my computer for 6 months. I just pushed too hard and it broke me. This time, I'm not going to make that same mistake.
The last line for each story was a last moment thing, but each one seemed to have the right gravitas, it being the last thing you remember. :)
It feels good to be back. Even if I don't end up trying to go pro, I'm writing again, and it's a big first step considering where I was mentally two years ago. I swore I'd never write again. I couldn't even sit down at my computer for 6 months. I just pushed too hard and it broke me. This time, I'm not going to make that same mistake.
Thank you! ;) This world is definitely my favorite of my worlds. I've always just loved the realistic world with a little bit of extra. I say just because a world has magic, advanced technology, etc.... Doesn't mean that people are any different, that the laws of behavior change... etc. Powers and such are like spices, they enhance the flavor, but spices can't save a bad recipe.
In this case, I had the idea early on in the project that I wanted two stories that told the same events from two different perspectives, and the more I thought about it, the better it seemed that this be well before the start of the war. :)
In this case, I had the idea early on in the project that I wanted two stories that told the same events from two different perspectives, and the more I thought about it, the better it seemed that this be well before the start of the war. :)
I'm glad that came across that way. ;) It was my hope they would each fill in the gaps in the other, so that together they form a perfect package. ;) It also hopefully highlights the different cultures each one is from. :)
I'm always open to talking about story. :) I hope it doesn't sound too pretentious but I think I have a natural gift for it.
I'm always open to talking about story. :) I hope it doesn't sound too pretentious but I think I have a natural gift for it.
I really like how you've set this chapter up to intersect with and compliment the other one. You've done a fantastic job of meshing the two together, and presenting the events from both sides in a really seamless way. I'm particularly impressed that, even after you know what happens after reading one chapter, the way each one is presented makes them equally fascinating and equally fun to read. Not to mention, I like how you don't have to know what happened in both chapters for all of the events to make sense.
It's interesting, too, that the overall experiences of both groups seems to mirror each other so closely. Both groups lose someone to the illegal miners, and both groups are military units on a rather special and unusual mission. As I said on the last chapter, I really like how both sides of the conflict are set up to be sympathetic, and not divided into black and white. It makes the threat of war between them seem even more disturbing, as you could easily imagine them getting along instead, if only they might be allowed to try.
Something I neglected to mention on the last chapter is that I'm quite impressed by how well you handle your characters' animal natures, and let their various species specific traits and abilities really shine through. Such as the elephant using his trunk to type, in the other chapter, or showing the difficulties that can be posed for particularly tall species even in just finding a place to sleep, as with the giraffe. It really helps to make your characters, and your world, feel more distinct and interesting, I think!
It's interesting, too, that the overall experiences of both groups seems to mirror each other so closely. Both groups lose someone to the illegal miners, and both groups are military units on a rather special and unusual mission. As I said on the last chapter, I really like how both sides of the conflict are set up to be sympathetic, and not divided into black and white. It makes the threat of war between them seem even more disturbing, as you could easily imagine them getting along instead, if only they might be allowed to try.
Something I neglected to mention on the last chapter is that I'm quite impressed by how well you handle your characters' animal natures, and let their various species specific traits and abilities really shine through. Such as the elephant using his trunk to type, in the other chapter, or showing the difficulties that can be posed for particularly tall species even in just finding a place to sleep, as with the giraffe. It really helps to make your characters, and your world, feel more distinct and interesting, I think!
Thank you a million times, that was my hope that it would come together that way. I wanted to make sure that if you read one it wouldn't matter if you read the other, but if you do read them both, you get a whole new perspective on the events at hand, not to mention you see the places where the stories cross. It was tricky to write the action scenes as mirrors of each other but the effect is unique. Each story has it's own beginning, middle, and end that is independent of its twin but mesh together at at least three points of intersection. :) As you surmised, you can read either one and it makes sense whether you read one or the other first. ;)
You know, I hadn't even realized that. Speaks to the parallels of the stories even more I suppose. ;) That was the plan, to make neither side a clear affiliation, and at the same time leave the question open as to who's side anyone should really be on.
I'm pleased, I guess I do that naturally having been a fan of furry for so long. After all, in a furry world species traits would be even more pronounced than in a world where there's just one dominant species. Imagine all the different ways you'd have to design things like clothes, shoes, and the markets that would develop, like tail jewelry and such things. I could see elephants using their trunks as a third appendage, considering in our world they can manipulate blades of grass and so on, and how handy would it be to type on your tablet with a trunk while your hand is free for other things? Kyle is a good amount taller than Chris, and it seemed like a funny observation that he'd need a taller bed, being at least a foot taller than most of the folks he knows. Topaz's chest comes up to his waist, I think, for example. :)
You know, I hadn't even realized that. Speaks to the parallels of the stories even more I suppose. ;) That was the plan, to make neither side a clear affiliation, and at the same time leave the question open as to who's side anyone should really be on.
I'm pleased, I guess I do that naturally having been a fan of furry for so long. After all, in a furry world species traits would be even more pronounced than in a world where there's just one dominant species. Imagine all the different ways you'd have to design things like clothes, shoes, and the markets that would develop, like tail jewelry and such things. I could see elephants using their trunks as a third appendage, considering in our world they can manipulate blades of grass and so on, and how handy would it be to type on your tablet with a trunk while your hand is free for other things? Kyle is a good amount taller than Chris, and it seemed like a funny observation that he'd need a taller bed, being at least a foot taller than most of the folks he knows. Topaz's chest comes up to his waist, I think, for example. :)
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