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Someone read this.
16 years ago
An angel to some
A demon to most
The only ones who know
Are the ones who get close
If I am an angel
Then let me protect you
And if I am a demon
Don't let me infect you
There are two choices
Both a beaten trail
One of them will win
But the other must fail
I see the two
Clear in my head
But I cannot choose
Until I am dead
But it is my choice?
Or written in stone?
I honestly don't care...
Because I am my own.
This is my poetry, raw, and unedited. I am looking to start a book of sorts, please send m a message if you are interested in putting something towards it. So far, I only have a few pieces, but I am looking forwards to getting a lot more
A demon to most
The only ones who know
Are the ones who get close
If I am an angel
Then let me protect you
And if I am a demon
Don't let me infect you
There are two choices
Both a beaten trail
One of them will win
But the other must fail
I see the two
Clear in my head
But I cannot choose
Until I am dead
But it is my choice?
Or written in stone?
I honestly don't care...
Because I am my own.
This is my poetry, raw, and unedited. I am looking to start a book of sorts, please send m a message if you are interested in putting something towards it. So far, I only have a few pieces, but I am looking forwards to getting a lot more
(don't take this personal, but here's a critique) the emotion is good, the rhyme pattern is easy to follow but very simple. The lines are very short and the rhythm is set in quick little sways, which makes it sound a little like a nursery rhyme :P It is also lacking visuals and descriptions to draw the reader in.
All in all it does what it needs to, and it does it well... but that's it, it leaves much to be wanted.
Exactly what I was going for, thanks. I didn't want to make it a visual poem. It's strictly emotional.