I know your stories are about blatant self-inserts, with the protagonists given no more personality than the back of my cereal box, but would you please stop making every single story first-person. It's clear that it takes a great effort for you to tear yourself away from it, but when you have your character, without changing perspective, narrate events that it is physically impossible for him to know about, it becomes rather jarring.

Also, we didn't really need you to spend several plot-breaking paragraphs so we could see two tertiary characters have sex. Two tertiary chars that already have their own story. It's like you realized no one had gratuitous sex yet, and just threw it in there.

-Eulalie

PS: I know there are plenty of people watching this account. I need, at most two more to spend five minutes their opinion known, and to choose the course of some of my future stories. Two people. Five minutes. Please.