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Would REALLY like some feedback, guys (reading)
15 years ago
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2396147/
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3236929/
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3785900/
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3970630/
christ, getting people to read shit is like pulling teeth D: (i have very little reason to complain, i don't like reading on the computer, either)
ALRIGHT, what i'd LIKE feedback on is almost exclusively the kids. I'm having trouble integrating them the way that i'd originally wanted to- they're supposed to be ..... helpful, when Stephen has to enter hell to start solving the puzzle that's in place (guards disappearing, kids dying, hell breaking loose, you know)
i need ot know if they should be dropped (except on the personal level) or integrated in a different way
the original idea involved -three- kids dying, do not know how- get stuck in limbo (cave number two)
stephen finds them, they know something he doesn't about the disappearance,
and.. it goes from there.
essentially they need to help him so that they can get through the gates to get to heaven.. or .. wherever. (incidentally, these gates also lead to hell- it's based more on the idea of Sheol than heaven/hell.. but one of them is common enough for most people to understand.)- kind of an unfinished business deal.
I'm a little iffy on the idea now, though, and even if i can make it work, i'm not sure that i WILL.
so yes, input.ideas.questions. whatever :3 i can answer if there's something you want to know and i can take crits if you have them... though i'm not looking for crits so much at the moment as input regarding whether or not the plot will or will not work.
And, if it helps as incentive or not, if i find your input sufficiently helpful, I'll put you on my list of people to doodle/draw giftart for. (yes, i do have a list, and I'm about halfway done sketching the current list)
also-
pretty much all the info about the plot and world so far can be found through here somehow-
http://www.furaffinity.net/journal/1215087/
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3236929/
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3785900/
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3970630/
christ, getting people to read shit is like pulling teeth D: (i have very little reason to complain, i don't like reading on the computer, either)
ALRIGHT, what i'd LIKE feedback on is almost exclusively the kids. I'm having trouble integrating them the way that i'd originally wanted to- they're supposed to be ..... helpful, when Stephen has to enter hell to start solving the puzzle that's in place (guards disappearing, kids dying, hell breaking loose, you know)
i need ot know if they should be dropped (except on the personal level) or integrated in a different way
the original idea involved -three- kids dying, do not know how- get stuck in limbo (cave number two)
stephen finds them, they know something he doesn't about the disappearance,
and.. it goes from there.
essentially they need to help him so that they can get through the gates to get to heaven.. or .. wherever. (incidentally, these gates also lead to hell- it's based more on the idea of Sheol than heaven/hell.. but one of them is common enough for most people to understand.)- kind of an unfinished business deal.
I'm a little iffy on the idea now, though, and even if i can make it work, i'm not sure that i WILL.
so yes, input.ideas.questions. whatever :3 i can answer if there's something you want to know and i can take crits if you have them... though i'm not looking for crits so much at the moment as input regarding whether or not the plot will or will not work.
And, if it helps as incentive or not, if i find your input sufficiently helpful, I'll put you on my list of people to doodle/draw giftart for. (yes, i do have a list, and I'm about halfway done sketching the current list)
also-
pretty much all the info about the plot and world so far can be found through here somehow-
http://www.furaffinity.net/journal/1215087/
