Truth be told I enjoyed Hanielle's introduction. I know its last minute but still. The war horse was a big surprise as well.

No Pun intended.

Yeah, I think if Darksiders had been a bigger hit, this would have looked sillier... but Ruin's still kind of an insider reference.

As for the Gus/Cassie story, I've just never been one for chicks with beaks. I dunno.

Interesting. That's a good point.

Awww! So no meek, nubile, soft-feathered Martian slave-girls for you? What about lesbian space dinosaurettes from Venus?

Hey, I liked'em all. I just forgot to Fave'em. *Facepalms*

It's not so much the +favs as it is just the general level of viewership. I guess I'm a goof that way... 50 or 150 +favs don't really matter but the difference between 1000 and 1500 views does.

Aww no scarycrow this year? I wanted me some scary crow!

Yeah... Scarycrow is a casualty of the late-October blahs... The pic I posted on Saturday is from his POV, though... If that's something :)

do we have to wait till next halloween for scarycrow?

Yeah, I think so. Though, he's gonna have to make a pretty convincing argument as to why he gets screen time. This year he got his butt kicked by Mr. Thicke a little bit.

As was hoping to find out just what he does with all the girls after he's done with them,

Yeah, that's something that needs to be addressed. I think he went in a dark direction that makes him harder to play with. I've written myself into the corner!

well take them to scarycow's happy place then.

Thought the Gus/Cassie story was great. Having just played darksider's I loved Hanielle's stuff. Just need more of it. All the cliffhangers make me sad.

Well, that's just a function of how long it takes me to write... I like character design. So once a character has a backstory and a personality and motivation... that's the exciting stuff. It's tough to concentrate on one set of characters when there are always new ones nipping at the edges of my consciousness.

I actually dug the story - I just haven't had the time to put together a really constructive bit of feedback on it yet.

Heh, that's the problem about being buried in so much good stuff on this site... once you're off the front page you're forgotten!

I was surprised, and pleased, by how well the bitch resonated with the audiences...

Yeah, I think she set the bar unnaturally high...

Haven't had time to read it yet... amongst too many others, sadly...

When you get a chance, I hope they entertain :)

Liked the Hannielle story, looking forward to the next one. Haven't had the chance to read the Space Australians story yet. But I've been busy.

That's interesting... I assumed a story a week was plenty of time to digest that material. And that you guys had an endless appetite for more stories.

I'm just a bit behind on stories/pics/etc, so I'll get around to it. I've liked the hanielle pics, haven't read the story. Or the Gus/Cassie one yet...at the moment, I have 16,629 submissions o_O Though I did look at your gallery, since I heard there was gonna be new stuffs :D

I liked Hanielle! I've just been somewhat busy this month. I'll give Gus and Cassie's story a read tonight!

I've been meaning to respond to this; As someone with a mutual interest in Science-Fiction, I enjoyed Calamity the best. It truly sparked my interest, as the first scene went rather well, noting the level of violence as she tried to fight back against a technologically superior warrior, further enthralled me, by the test of endurance she had to go through from the interrogation. Just the way it was described, met with the intensity of the Solider's tactics was enough to further intrigue me to ask if there will be a sequel? (Sadly, it's been a while, and I can't remember the Second Scene, where it cuts of to other characters.)

Hanielle, however, as I think it was superbly written for it's erotic niche of fiction, as someone that tried to analyse Dante's Inferno for a High School Report and failed miserably, I still enjoyed the celestial jargon that was used to describe the Heavens and denote other people and places, giving it a sense of being an inhabitable world. She however failed to move me, because I wasn't convinced she was an angel where it seemed suggested she had "sinful" desires so to speak, that she didn't come across as the most spiritually pure person, .. okay, It may not have been an intention to make Her purely angelic, otherwise the story would take a nasty turn as such a character would cry "Rape" would would dampen the mood, but her fall in the final scene as she's failling into a dark abyss, to me, wasn't that spectacular.

The "Antagonist" of the Story; Ruin . I'm probably a sucker of a girl for Domineering Male Figures, but I felt he was more compelling because he had a more prominent motivation. Which was to ruin your day and everything else for that matter, he may have been stereotypically demonic, power-hungry and lustful (But at least he wasn't a caricature of a specific Seven Deadly Sin.) but he had character, he stands out to my mind.

Mister Thicke, I had mixed feelings over. He was a grotesque monstrosity of a carnival freakshow, which does remind me of another Urban Legend; Bloody Mary, but the chant in the mirror horror stories are probably a dime a dozen, but Mister Thicke is probably the first even if fictional, example of one. What didn't appeal to me, was his stitiches of his male appendage. Which still as I see makes me shiver with terrified disgust, at even thinking of being screwed by that. (Never mind He'll manage to screw up my internal organs in the process as well; too big!) But then for a horror story that's probably mission achieved.


The Gus/Cassie Story is probably something I'll enjoy, but I'm having difficulty finding the time at the present moment. It's an interest Genre, the character's species aren't a issue (I find Australian wildlife somewhat interesting.) It's something I'd read and enjoy, I have a burning desire to read it, but I'm trying to match a deadline by Friday.

~Zinn

First off, thanks for the feedback!

I think it's really interesting that the consensus is that I overloaded on the stories; they need to be spaced out!

I thought a lot about Hanielle's world. However, you're right that when I use such resonant mythology as a starting point that I probably need to spend more time exploring the important rules, especially when the differences between the existing concepts and my twist on the concept are so great.

Lemme say this: the 'angels' and 'demons' in the White Fields world were not always angels or demons. They have been forced into those roles and where as the demons tend to punish each other by vying for power, the angels punish themselves with stifling rules.

There's always a lot of work that goes into the world building... I have to have that when I write because the characters kind of tell me how they'd react and the more they have a coherent set of rules to act against, the better their action flows.

Mr. Thicke, well, I was trying to see if I could trip Uniform Vixen's trigger :) So of course he had to be gross :)

I will have to revisit Calamity; I like her, too!

I certainly liked "The Fall of Hanielle", I was hoping to see more and read more of her.

I'm going to try and be a little kinder/gentler this year, so no Hanielle. Her adventures are pretty heavy on the non-consensual stuff. Heck, I wasn't going to post CeLIA either, but a) she does kind of want to have sex with STUD.service (though she was coerced through her programming) and b) she does come out on top sort of. Ah, the truth is I don't have time to do enough content to fill October without her.