Writing with Ayla and Straitis: "The Business District"
13 years ago
General
When trying to proof read some of straitis' writing, this is the conversation that took place.
Tobias: “Anyway” Trish interjected, effectively quelling Laura’s protests “This is the main business district."
Ayla: Maybe add a little more description of the surrounding area? For example,
Ayla: "This," Trish interjected, gesturing towards <object in environment here, say, a tree> "is the main business district."
Tobias: "This, "Trish interjected, pointing at the tree, is the main business district."
Ayla: Okay so maybe not a tree, but you get the idea. A building of some sort.
Tobias: "This," Trish interjected, pointing at the pub "is the main business district"
Ayla: A pub in a tree...
Tobias: At this point, Gareth could already tell that moving here was a bad idea. "Surely there is more..."
Tobias: "Well... there is a tree over there" Trish muttered.
Tobias: "Do you actually have a house...?" Gareth started, worried for what the answer might be. "Let me guess, you live in the tree."
Tobias: "No, that's silly" Trish giggled. Gareth sighed in relief. "I tried that already, I kept falling out. So I just live under it."
Tobias: *As they pass, a strong breeze knocks down the cardboard cutout pub*
Tobias: “Anyway” Trish interjected, effectively quelling Laura’s protests “This is the main business district."
Ayla: Maybe add a little more description of the surrounding area? For example,
Ayla: "This," Trish interjected, gesturing towards <object in environment here, say, a tree> "is the main business district."
Tobias: "This, "Trish interjected, pointing at the tree, is the main business district."
Ayla: Okay so maybe not a tree, but you get the idea. A building of some sort.
Tobias: "This," Trish interjected, pointing at the pub "is the main business district"
Ayla: A pub in a tree...
Tobias: At this point, Gareth could already tell that moving here was a bad idea. "Surely there is more..."
Tobias: "Well... there is a tree over there" Trish muttered.
Tobias: "Do you actually have a house...?" Gareth started, worried for what the answer might be. "Let me guess, you live in the tree."
Tobias: "No, that's silly" Trish giggled. Gareth sighed in relief. "I tried that already, I kept falling out. So I just live under it."
Tobias: *As they pass, a strong breeze knocks down the cardboard cutout pub*
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