Nabbed from  carrius

[ ] They are possessed by an angel
[ ] They are possessed by a demon
[ ] They are a werewolf/vampire/faerie/dragon
[X] They are physically strong (Trained in combat, and strength grows with each fallen Aldaberan. I guess like highlander?)
[ ] They have a rare hair/fur colour
[X] Their eyes are an unusual colour (Labrn's left eye is inverted colorwise compared to his right)
[ ] This happens to be red
[ ] Their eyes change colour
[X] They have wings (not technically, but psychiclly create some)
[ ] They can grow extra body parts/shapeshift
[X] They are immortal (So long as a female of his race is alive, he will rise to defend)
[ ] (if a female) they have large bra size
[ ] (if a male) they are very muscular
[X] They are very attractive to the opposite gender (Toned, lean, not buff. Gentle eyes and genuine interest to please others)
[X] They are telekinetic/pyrokinetic/etc (Psychic)
[X] They have sixth sense/can mind-read/etc (Psychic)
[X] They have an object of some sort that gives them powers (Memory Stone upon his forehead gives him focus, as well as limits his power)
[ ] They have a special ability/power, but they don't know about it yet
[X] They were bestowed/cursed with these powers (Ritual made him a conduit for the power of his kind)
[ ] They are a healer
[X] They are from a very rich/royal family (royalty)
[ ] They don't know that they are from a very rich/royal background
[X] They have lost one/both of their parents (He has faaar outlived them both)
[ ] They ran away from home
[ ] Their parents are cruel, uncaring, abusive etc.
[X] They witnessed one/both of their parent's death (Father was put to death before him)
[ ] They are part angel/demon/faerie/some other mythical creature
[ ] They never knew their parents
[ ] They were abused/spoiled as a child
[ ] They are very attractive to the same gender
[ ] They have lots of friends/no friends
[ ] They are emo/cutesy
[X] They look much younger/older than they really are. (Body is locked in early 30s, as the ritual preserved the look)
[ ] They are currently in a relationship
[ ] They have lots of morals and state them a fair bit for example: 'I would rather be with my friends than with my boyfriend/girlfriend' 'Nothing matters more to me than my friends/family' 'I wouldn't hesitate to die in place of a friend' etc. It's fine if your OC has these beliefs/values, but if they constantly say them out loud/preach them to others, then we have a problem.
[X] They have a mental disorder (Not quite Nympho, but Libido can take over, as well as a split personality)
[ ] They have an emotional disorder
[ ] They struggle to stay sane
[ ] They are a psycho
[X] They have multiple personalities (Dual personality when mental control is lost)
[X] They are very intelligent (most Aldaberans are, given their psychic abilities)
[ ] They have hallucinations
[ ] They can summon spirits/demons/angels etc.
[ ] They have an unusual/unrealistic pet
[ ] They have a guardian spirit
[X] They have a 'special type' of soul (Retains the souls of his fallen race, like a battery for Aldaberan souls)
[ ] Their soul is not the same as them
[ ] They can talk to spirits/ghosts
[X] Some part of their body glows (eyes can)
[X] They have a rare/unusual name (I suppose. Haven't seen it anywhere else)
[ ] They were born on an important date, such as New Year's Eve, Midsummers Night, The Winter Solstace etc.
[ ] They have a twin/sibling that they were separated from at birth
[ ] They are connected with a certain element
[ ] They are connected with a certain animal
[ ] They always dress like a certain 'label'
[ ] They look quite a bit like a character from a popular anime/manga (I would say the closest is Ghaleon from silver star story)
[X] They are a race/species that is discriminated against/misunderstood (Aldaberans are called 'witches' and shown with distrust)
[X] They have a certain power that is misunderstood/feared (their psychic powers are unknown by most. Their prime directive being "Never let an outsider see the full extent of our powers")
[ ] They live/lived on the streets at some point in their lives
[ ] They are hiding from someone/something
[ ] They have a rare blood type
[ ] They cry blood
[X] Certain noises/smells/situations/etc make their powers activate/give them a nervous breakdown (Sexual situations, a Sister in trouble)
[ ] They are from a different country to where they live
[X] They are very mysterious/dark (As their prime directive states, he can be rather ambiguous with answers and his powers)
[ ] They are very lively/happy
[ ] Their mood changes a lot/very quickly
[X] They are very patient
[ ] They are from a long line of (insert profession/power here)
[X] They have a piece of jewelry/clothing that they always wear (If you don't know what this is, shame on you!)
[ ] They have amnesia
[ ] They have some sort of permanent medical condition
[X] They have a curse upon them ("You shall love them to the end" bestowed on him by his father, causing his Libido to go out of control)
[ ] They are involved in some sort of prophecy
[ ] They are 'the chosen one'
[ ] They have insomnia

Overall points: 26

Point Reductions

Take points off your OCs overall score if they fit any of the following statements:

[ ] They smoke
[ ] They are an alcoholic
[ ] They are overweight
[X] They are addicted to drugs, sex (Sexual Addict)
[ ] They have a short temper
[ ] They enjoy bullying others
[X] They do not care much about others (Though courteous and genuine with his emotions, having lived so long, he never fully becomes attached to anyone. People hold his interest til their parting, be it death or actually leaving)
[ ] They are emotionless

Final Score is: 24

<5 -Anti-Sue Your character may be a bit on the boring side. Of course, this does depend, but generally if they are scoring that low, it wouldn't hurt to 'spice them up' a bit ^^

6-15 -Balanced Character If your OC scored around here, then they are probably quite a well-balanced and interesting character. Those scoring in the higher end of this category may be a bit too much though.

16-25 -Borderline Mary-Sue We have a problem. You need to tone your character down. They are most likely a bit annoying to others, too.

26< -Mary-Sue Oh dear. Do I really need to comment on this?


Hmm, there were a few points that overlap, but thats Labrn. Son of a tyrant king, of a race of psychic beings. A war of the sexes rose up. As the son of the king, he had training and was made "perfect" through ancient tech and ritual to make him an immortal weapon to maintain his father's control. The ritual was interrupted by a rogue squad of female psychers who changed that his immortality would come from the females the king hoped to fight and destroy. Labrn hid from the war, causing the women to win as the males resources were spent on him. Before the king was put to death, he cursed Labrn. "So you love them over your own brothers? Then 'LOVE' them to your end." Thus the male rule of oppression ended, but whatof Labrn? They could not kill or fully control him. He was peaceful and compliant, but the curse upon his libido grew with the years. Tales of nightly visits and wild attacks unprovoked led to his banishment. However, he would still be found and called upon to defend the kingdom. Til 'the end' was engineered by his sister, Mystic. Then it was just Labrn and Mystic. His memory was blocked to keep him from breaking down, but he recalls bits when losing control. Now he travels on a whim with his sister. Her life forced tethered to his by a ritual, and him immortal as long as she lived.