It's clear, concise, quantified, and standardized for a scientific paper. Nice work so far.
After I read it, the first thing I could think of was "boring as fuck". I'd recommend taking cues from other scientific papers that somehow make their research findings super exciting, as if the scientific community should care. But hey, that's just my opinion.

Ahh thanks. I'll try to see if there's some way to translate how evoking the research should be for the rest of the scientific community.