Hmm interesting lil uh, story there ^^;

Little Story of comming back to the Woods from a bad 15 Years for Being Craped on and Ripped apart thru 15 of the city trash..
Wait ti'll I get to the part of What happened 15 years ago that made him leave the woods..

arr i see ^^ well, i'll be awaiting the next instalments!

Hehe this time I'am using word to setup this part..

It's all the OLD story of his PUP life and how NJ used him as a Lab Rat Because of his Hyperactive power...

great story =3

Yea took a few day to do but I need to get some of my Missing info for the Members to get to know me a little better..

Yea took a few days to do but I need to get some of my Missing info for the Members to get to know me a little better..

read the profile versioN!
Much easier to understand XP
It would have taken me awhile to get it or desifer it!
You just need a place to belong and a place where you can feel loved =3
FA can be your home for awhile!

Yea I've been so into the Fur Years ago not it's like I totaly missed out on alot of stuff...

Cool story! I like the style it's written in. I forget the exact name of the style, I learned it in my literary analysis class a few weeks ago, but this is a really cool way of writing and I think you pulled it off well! Despite a few grammatical errors, I'm impressed =)!

Aw thank I forget also I had to reight my stuff like that to get most of my old stories out..
YEA.. my spelling sux.. Been a hole for a wile and I'am supprized that I still got the nack with this..It kind of like riding a bike.. NOw to get the new ART programs to work easy..
I love this ART RAGE 2.0.. Been looking for it and found in on one of my Servers up in NYC..NIce.

nice =3

Thanks.. What are the top ART programing appz out for this year.. Playing with ART RAGE today Nice with the color part..
Going to try and do a FurSuit color in with it..

Coolies :3 Do you like to RP by any chance?

Let me Clear my Self.. RP..HELLA YEA>..> Me and my friends use to have fun ti'll the sun came up in the woods..OHHh.. I ready anytime.. Been waiting for the for 20 years..NICE..!!..!!..!!

Yay! ^^ Waiting that long to RP? Eep X3 Well, if I start any roleplays somewhere, I'll let you know.
My friend made one a few days ago for meerkats.

You got a link to it..

Sorry for any delay in posts still tring to setup this and I get lost into the Photo and art area.. In a few days I'am going to post the Years of his live as a PUP and How NewJersey Used him as a Lab Rat to study his Hyperactive powers..

Sure :3 Here it is: http://phpbb-host.com/phpbb/index.p.....orum=katkolony
I'm Athari on there.
And iss alright, I'm a good waiter ^^

That is a great story :)

Yea I have a bounch of ones I want to post on this site...

But when the time comes I need to leave a pike of food for my (3) cats.. take the Phones out of the room and Nail the door shut..

I'll be good for about 2-1/2 days and I'll have volumes of stuff posted.. OH I got some tasty nibbles to put up.. *grin*

Sounds nice. You should submit it as a story and see how people react to it. =D

Yea still tring to get the feal of the Website..

Where is one to place a story around here..

Just type a story on word or something that you can type some stuff on. Save it under .doc files or whatever they say can be used to submit in as a story. Then go to Submit and select story. Then browse for your story under your saved files on your computer, then after that the rest is up to you.

Hope that helps? =3

that's what I'am doing but when I get to someones site I just start Typing and Splat it's posted..

I like it ^^ Kinda short but I was never big on readin' anyways XD

I like to keep them short in life and the WEB it too easy to get side tracked and never get a chance to look at again.. So it nice to leave them in sections..

Getting the hang of a lot of new ART programs for my system.. Got any suggestions for NEW ART Appz..

No sure what ye mean exactly. What kinda programs ya got runnin' ?

Programs.. Well I got a lot of them but never real got back into them to tinker with...
Hmm.. Here is one for the DUMP servers that are on my rack of HD arrays.. Ijust wat to know what is the NEW and Good software to use for just scribbleing with..

Ok, now that I have the time to sit down and read, I�ll try to give some constructive critique.

Your story seems like a good start, as it does create a sense of questioning what is going on with a character that�s doesn�t seem to know much himself. That�s a concept that does have the potential to be a good hook for your story there.

Also, there were some spelling and grammar mistakes in your writing, would you like me to point them out for you?

Please Point out my spelling errors you sould see the First Draft.. My Big Problem is I type too fast to keep up on the correction.. Sometimes I cant even read what I typed.. them PEPSI nights..But I'am not going to have any people tis time do any of my Books I want them to be WEB only and from my heart..

*nods* Alright, I�m going to go through this story and show you what has been corrected in bold. Suggestions will be in italics and aren�t necessarily mistakes, but how to word it better. ALL CAPS WITH AN UNDERLINE[u] means I, Ganren, am speaking to you directly at this point.


'SNIFF' 'Sniff' that scent, it reminded him of his old home..

I must be dreaming.. he thought to himself.. That place was destroyed 25 years ago by a fire by man.. it must be a dream.. I'll just keep my eyes closed and dream some more..

It�s nice and quite here.. I'll just keep my eyes closed for a little while more till the sun comes up and starts to warm up the City never has there been anything good to wake up to...


��the sun comes up and warms the city again. Never has there been anything so good to wake up to.�


"thump'' he hears it again, "thump, thump" I must be passed out in the back alley of the old wood plant...



Oh I so don't want to get up, it feels so good here.. The old spot where I can get some sleep. Even the Human bums sleep here... and not bother me..

'sigh' a little more shut eye and I'll have to leave soon..

"Thump" as his 'ear twitches' "thump" "shuffle" now he hears a tent flap opening up.. the sound is real close now.. Oh crap.

I am asleep in someone�s tent. Oh I hope I was not some drunk's bitch last night ..Oh my head hurts and my gut feels like it got stomped on..

As he put the pillow over his head and starts to cry he feels a warm body lay next to him.. It scared the sh*t out of what he got himself into this time..

[u]YOU HAVE TO BE CAREFUL NOT TO MIX THIRD PERSON AND FIRST PERSON PERSPECTIVE WRITING.

He felt a big, heavy, hairy paw slump off his side, and grabbing hold of his chest, it gave him a big squeeze close to the thing that is with him...

[u]I THINK YOU WERE GOING FOR SLUMP? BUT I�M NOT ENTIRELY SURE.

Oh I'm going to get it this time ..WTF did I get myself into now.. As he feels the nuzzle of the beast behind him rest on his neck..

He has the feeling of running out the tent at full speed he is scared out of his mind.. WTF happened to me,,

Crap. Sorry about the bad html text on the first comment. Let's try this again.

*nods* Alright, I�m going to go through this story and show you what has been corrected in bold. Suggestions will be in italics and aren�t necessarily mistakes, but how to word it better. ALL CAPS WITH AN UNDERLINE means I, Ganren, am speaking to you directly at this point.


'SNIFF' 'Sniff' that scent, it reminded him of his old home..

I must be dreaming.. he thought to himself.. That place was destroyed 25 years ago by a fire by man.. it must be a dream.. I'll just keep my eyes closed and dream some more..

It�s nice and quite here.. I'll just keep my eyes closed for a little while more till the sun comes up and starts to warm up the City never has there been anything good to wake up to...


��the sun comes up and warms the city again. Never has there been anything so good to wake up to.�


"thump'' he hears it again, "thump, thump" I must be passed out in the back alley of the old wood plant...



Oh I so don't want to get up, it feels so good here.. The old spot where I can get some sleep. Even the Human bums sleep here... and not bother me..

'sigh' a little more shut eye and I'll have to leave soon..

"Thump" as his 'ear twitches' "thump" "shuffle" now he hears a tent flap opening up.. the sound is real close now.. Oh crap.

I am asleep in someone�s tent. Oh I hope I was not some drunk's bitch last night ..Oh my head hurts and my gut feels like it got stomped on..

As he put the pillow over his head and starts to cry he feels a warm body lay next to him.. It scared the sh*t out of what he got himself into this time..

YOU HAVE TO BE CAREFUL NOT TO MIX THIRD PERSON AND FIRST PERSON PERSPECTIVE WRITING.

He felt a big, heavy, hairy paw slump off his side, and grabbing hold of his chest, it gave him a big squeeze close to the thing that is with him...

I THINK YOU WERE GOING FOR SLUMP? BUT I�M NOT ENTIRELY SURE.

Oh I'm going to get it this time ..WTF did I get myself into now.. As he feels the nuzzle of the beast behind him rest on his neck..

He has the feeling of running out the tent at full speed he is scared out of his mind.. WTF happened to me,,

I was talking bout updating this for a part #3 but the FurSuits I am working one are taking up my time..

IM me if you get a chance..

I didn�t tag any of the dialogue or sound effects because that really depends on the style of the writer. But, a suggestion is that when you make a sound effect, it helps to clarify it to the reader by writing it in all caps (which you did for the first �SNIFF�), while dialogue traditionally has quotation marks to signify spoken word and sometimes even thought.

Example:

The sun�s warm rays pierced through the gloomy clouds, giving much needed warmth to the worn travelers.
�Thank the heavens, for it seems things have finally started to get better!� The shepherd exclaimed. But his optimism was cut short by the THUNK of an arrow burring itself into the trunk of a nearby tree. It was then the shepherd and his party knew that things would only get much worse...


Anyways, good luck to you in the future and I hope this could be of help to you.

Thanks.. ANd you should of Seen the First Draft.. I was like in a Weard Mood.. And Needed a Change Before I blew it up and turned it into more of a mess..
Thanks for the Re-Wording Info.. I need it..

I know I have to get a chance to update this page.. but I've been working on my FurSuits for a wile now and About to start on the Main body of the Wolf FursSuit..in multy Stages..

I don't understand what you're getting at here. O_o ?