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Aid the Gryphon: The best sections of my writing.
12 years ago
Sorry, I'm afraid I'm still off the writing chart. But in the meantime, I'd like to request something of my lovely charming readers. I'm currently engaged in applying for a creative writing course which I would very much like to get into, and the Illuminati behind it have requested a selection of my writing, around 7 pages worth, to showcase what I've got. Some of these will be other pieces of mine, but since it's what finally managed to stick my pen to my paper, I'd like to include some sections from some of the stories on here, because I like to think that I have written them to the best of my ability. And so I come to you as people who actually know what it's like from the other side of the screen. Essentially, if you could, could you suggest to me some of the passages of writing which I've done which you felt were particularly good? Not whole stories, or even whole sections - it could just be a few paragraphs. Not simply bits which appealed to you for the... obvious and most delicious reasons, because I don't think that will really look right by the admissions people. Just the best writing my mediocre abilities have created. Can you think of parts where the characterisation is stronger, the writing flows better, the description is more poetic or imaginative or whatever, or anything else, compared to the rest of my writing?
I will never be as happy as I will be when I start playing Assassin's Creed IV, because I am refusing to do that until this whole bloody business is over. Thank you enormously.
I will never be as happy as I will be when I start playing Assassin's Creed IV, because I am refusing to do that until this whole bloody business is over. Thank you enormously.
This I like because you get to see a hint at a chink in Damien's otherwise spotless obsidian like mental armour.
For me this was the biggest leap towards fleshing out his character.
The knowledge that he can be hurt, can scream and once upon a time suffered like Alex does adds tons of layers to him.
But the greatest acheivment in my eyes, empathy.
"I'm
So
Sorry
Alex..."
Damien is a timeless immortal being, as close to a true god Alex will ever know. He was presented to us as a near flawless perfection of a monster.
And so naturally, his flaws make him biblical to read. They make me play devils advocate and I fall in love with the villain. They give him a lumpy texture to his harsh but perfect nature. If I had to say it like he would:
"I know it hurts... It's beautiful..."
The first part of the first chapter of The Taste of Terror, before “Then he would wake”.
In Playing God part 5, from “Finn's head blurred as it snapped round to face him” to “snapped most of his vertebrae with a gory crack, and started to scream.”
A bit long, but in Guest Lecturer, from “"Ah-ha." To “And the beast spoke, and it called itself Pangur.”
Might want to do some edits to remove furry references, since many people don't take these well. Gryphons are fine though, everybody likes gryphons.
And since I have your attention, I would like to give you something for when you have finished what you are doing, and finished playing Assassin's Creed: In the first chapter of Taste of Terror, when Damian told Alex to run, there was a song that started running through my head. That song was "Prodigal" by the band One Republic, and I think it fits the whole story fairly well actually, if you listen to it with the story in mind.. If you are interested this video has it with a decent quality, and all the lyrics right near as I can tell: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5PwyLsaj8-Y
Though you might find it fun.
>>Meanwhile who he was withdrawn in the shadows the poor white gryphon,scared to death only to thought of be confronted with a creature so great came out of the thick cloud gliding gently and quietly on the ground, like a bird of prey of the night...
The feathered head wondered to himself,meanwhile he was passing near at the shadow of the forest: "If he's gone? he's asleep? I would not be wrong..."
Timorous he walked quickly to the refuge...
"I made it, He'll be napping..." He thought with a giggle of victory in beak;suddendly a shadow emerged and grabbed the electrical griffon in such a way that he did not notice it in time to be able to slip out...
"You're wrong,little one,I never sleep..." The electrical griffon turned his head such as that method of the owl and seen that Goldeneye was exit from the darkness and realized who what will happen of him...<<
I hope that you will not do something of painful to me, at least...You'll exchange me for s lemon marshmallow,surely!!!!! XD
There is also the part when Alex tells Damien that Alex wants to live and Damien's flashback, since you can feel Alex's will to live return to him and the strong exposition during Damien's flashback.