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Getting around to editing
11 years ago
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So, I keep getting distracted from editing that novella, so far titled "The Pride of Parahumans", I wrote for NaNoWriMo. I mean, I have serious doubts that anyone outside of Amazon would publish it and it's unlikely that anyone would read it, so why bother?
That said, I would like to ask if anyone would be willing to help me with the editing process. In particular I have two questions to ask?
1. Should I keep the unbirth/pouch scene in chapter 2? I thought it seemed a bit gratuitous and didn't really add much to the plot, just a blackmail attempt later on that became moot the next chapter.
2. Would tetrodotoxin be lethal to something designed to survive several minutes of hard vacuum? I heard that it leaves the heart alone and kills by suffocation, hence its use as a "non-lethal" paralytic.
That said, I would like to ask if anyone would be willing to help me with the editing process. In particular I have two questions to ask?
1. Should I keep the unbirth/pouch scene in chapter 2? I thought it seemed a bit gratuitous and didn't really add much to the plot, just a blackmail attempt later on that became moot the next chapter.
2. Would tetrodotoxin be lethal to something designed to survive several minutes of hard vacuum? I heard that it leaves the heart alone and kills by suffocation, hence its use as a "non-lethal" paralytic.
1.. If it doesn't add to the plot, and doesn't fit the theme of the story, consider cutting it. Go ahead if you have doubts.
2. Depends on how the poison works on the physiology of whatever creature you imagine. Tetrodotoxin shuts down the nerves that control breathing in and out (in terrestrial biology), as well as nerves for controling other muscles (paralysis). If the "hard vaccuum" creature was like a whale --storing oxigen in its lungs for a dive-- than it could survive poisoning until its stores were depleted. Incidentally, CPR breaths would be a way to prevent suffocation from this poison until it wares off.
Black muscles, got to remember that.