So... I've been writing this story: Fire in the Hearth... and was thinking that once it was done with all 10 (possibly 12) parts that I might actually take it out there and publish the book. As it stands the story is done with the first act with everything being introduced for the second act to continue on.

If you've read it, what are some suggestions you might have to help add a little oomph to the parts so far? What could be improved? What don't you like about it? What do you really like about it?

Let a mouse know in some comments please ;3

-Mr. Mouse