Yep, all that time I could have spent to finish that damn third chapter (now three quarters done hopefully), I used it on thinking out that Celestia's commission. Oh well, pretty sure most people around here enjoyed that great sequence SirMasterDufel drawn, that has to count for something.

So I rewrote everything in past tense and corrected ponctuation and various errors, plus a couple slight improvements in dialogs and such.
I'll probably find new things to correct when I proofread again like each time but eh, at least I'm getting things closer to tolerable for potential grammar nazis.