Regarding Furaffinity's New Policy
Posted 2 years agoIn compliance with the new FA policy, I am removing all my stories involving Pokemon and Digimon, as well as Undertale as while I intended charaters in it to be aged up, they are also likely affected by the policy.
The majority of my work that I have not previously deleted will remain available on Sofurry, however I am not really active on that site so I likely will not respond to messages or comments.
https://www.sofurry.com/browse/user.....ies?uid=396871
In general, I will not be discontinuing my use of FA altogether, though I will be increasing my use of Inkbunny.
In case it wasn't clear I think this is ass backwards, I have felt unwelcome in furry spaces for being a pokemon fan or a long time, which is weird considering its literally the most popular furry franchise in the world, and usually only socialised with other pokemon furries.
The majority of my work that I have not previously deleted will remain available on Sofurry, however I am not really active on that site so I likely will not respond to messages or comments.
https://www.sofurry.com/browse/user.....ies?uid=396871
In general, I will not be discontinuing my use of FA altogether, though I will be increasing my use of Inkbunny.
In case it wasn't clear I think this is ass backwards, I have felt unwelcome in furry spaces for being a pokemon fan or a long time, which is weird considering its literally the most popular furry franchise in the world, and usually only socialised with other pokemon furries.
Hi New Watchers! Also Q and A.
Posted 4 years agoSince I started writing again, I've gained a number of new watchers.
I'm glad you all are enjoying my work, I didn't write anything for a long time but having people to workshop it with really helps. I actually got back into it because someone messaged me asking to workshop ideas.
I figured I'd put up this journal as a space for people, both new watchers and others, to ask questions about me, my work, or anything really.
Even if this is old by the time you see it and you have a question, don't hesitate to ask.
I'll do my best to answer.
I'm glad you all are enjoying my work, I didn't write anything for a long time but having people to workshop it with really helps. I actually got back into it because someone messaged me asking to workshop ideas.
I figured I'd put up this journal as a space for people, both new watchers and others, to ask questions about me, my work, or anything really.
Even if this is old by the time you see it and you have a question, don't hesitate to ask.
I'll do my best to answer.
Unfinished Story
Posted 6 years agoI have an unfinished story where I wrote about Nick and Finnick from Zootopia taking a drug that gives them mental age regression so they have fun and wear diapers. They keep their adult intelligence but are regressed emotionally to the level of kids, so they enjoy wearing diapers more than normal. If anyone wants to see it I will publish it, because I do not think I am going to finish it. Post a comment if you want to see it, but if nobody who already follows me cares I doubt anyone else will enjoy an unfinished story, so let me know.
Nsfw twitter
Posted 8 years agoI know I haven't exactly been active on here but I wanted to let you know I have made an nsfw twitter. It is protected but feel free to follow if you want to know my random lewd thoughts.
https://twitter.com/River_ofDreams
https://twitter.com/River_ofDreams
Random future story ideas
Posted 8 years agoHere are some story ideas I have at the moment. What do you think of them?
Ruki and Renamon
Ruki does want to make Renamon cum but because of her relationship with Renamon, she can't stop telling Renamon what to do, and since Renamon is so obedient she will obviously obey, so Ruki keeps telling Renamon to do things like reveal herself or touch herself, or use toys on herself, while Ruki watches, and sometimes Ruki will tell Renamon to touch her, but still not give too much attention to making Renamon cum, maybe just touching her a bit at the end to finish her off after Renamon has already prepared herself.
Sora and Piyomon
Piyomon is being way too clingy and asking for sex way too much, so Sora wants to do something different. Maybe she could tie Piyomon up and gag her so she can't move or talk, puts a vibrating dildo on her pussy and clit, then fucks her with a strap on dildo up the butt, or maybe she doesn't gag her and gets one of the other digimon like Tailmon or Hawkmon to sit on her face to keep her quiet instead.
Nick and Judy
Nick thinks Judy should get more into ABDL, so he comes to her house, already diapered, diapers her and then they go out for a walk. They go into a public bathroom and Nick tries to slip a suppository up Judy's butt, but Judy suggests how about she puts it up Nick's butt instead, which she does, then they continue their walk, but Nick can't hold it for very long. Good thing he is diapered.
Ruki and Renamon
Ruki does want to make Renamon cum but because of her relationship with Renamon, she can't stop telling Renamon what to do, and since Renamon is so obedient she will obviously obey, so Ruki keeps telling Renamon to do things like reveal herself or touch herself, or use toys on herself, while Ruki watches, and sometimes Ruki will tell Renamon to touch her, but still not give too much attention to making Renamon cum, maybe just touching her a bit at the end to finish her off after Renamon has already prepared herself.
Sora and Piyomon
Piyomon is being way too clingy and asking for sex way too much, so Sora wants to do something different. Maybe she could tie Piyomon up and gag her so she can't move or talk, puts a vibrating dildo on her pussy and clit, then fucks her with a strap on dildo up the butt, or maybe she doesn't gag her and gets one of the other digimon like Tailmon or Hawkmon to sit on her face to keep her quiet instead.
Nick and Judy
Nick thinks Judy should get more into ABDL, so he comes to her house, already diapered, diapers her and then they go out for a walk. They go into a public bathroom and Nick tries to slip a suppository up Judy's butt, but Judy suggests how about she puts it up Nick's butt instead, which she does, then they continue their walk, but Nick can't hold it for very long. Good thing he is diapered.
Finally watched Digimon Tri 4!
Posted 8 years agoI kept putting it off because I knew I would hate it. I was right too. It was so unbelieveably bad it made me never want to write Digimon fanfic again.
Then again, I haven't written digimon fanfic in 5 months, and solo written, unrequested, uncommissioned digimon stuff in 10 months. Did you notice? Do you care or not? Do people follow me for characters, or for the type of content I write?
Then again, I haven't written digimon fanfic in 5 months, and solo written, unrequested, uncommissioned digimon stuff in 10 months. Did you notice? Do you care or not? Do people follow me for characters, or for the type of content I write?
To Publish or not to Publish?
Posted 8 years agoThis is a thing that is really frustrating me and I want to talk about it somewhere where people can understand.
Remember Lycanroc on the Prowl? I thought it turned out pretty well, it's hot and all, so the person who I wrote that with approached me to write a sequel together. I said, "Sure! Why not?" so we did, but it turned out pretty damn bad. It was nobody's fault, I was overly tired when I was writing it, and I try to not be too tired when I am writing because it always suffers, and he was babysitting and typing on his phone when he was doing it. If I had known I would have waited since everyone gets better results with a keyboard.
I usually like to go through and edit my stories before publishing them. If I am writing them alone they usually don't need much editing, doing it as a roleplay understandably takes more editing, but if two people work well together it usually doesn't take much, but since neither of us were on form, every time I try to edit the story I just think "Damn this is bad... Really bad." I've kind of not been in the mood to write much anyway, the story is about 1/3rd edited now and every time I try to edit it I can't help but see all the glaring flaws and get overwhelmed, and it makes my brain all cloudy and it makes me unable to focus.
I know there is a good story in there under all the typos, padding, rushed stuff, terrible dialog and weird descriptions, but I just can't seem to edit it. I want to publish the story but releasing it in it's current condition would be totally unacceptable considering the level of quality that I hope my watchers have become accustomed to. There only seems to be one answer to this, and that is to wait until I am in better form and then edit it, and that is a good solution, so I don't know if I am looking for advice or anything, I just wanted to let people know.
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On a different topic, another thing I have been thinking about is I would like to do an Animal Crossing story, but I don't know if it would be acceptable on furaffinity, as I once got a temporary ban for a similar story and I would very much not like that to happen again. In the story as I see it in my head, Isabelle and Digby, you know, the two dogs who are brother and sister, both take enemas. I figure Isabelle is feeling she wants one or something and asks Digby if he is into it, and he is. Isabelle and Digby are very close and have had enemas since they were pups, so don't really see it as sexual, however it is obviously supposed to be sexual to the audience.
As they take the enemas, they reminisce about times when they were puppies getting the enemas, like remembering getting bulb enemas and then being moved onto the bag, maybe the first time they gave each other enemas, etc, and say how nice it was. This is where I think the problem lies, as it is essentially sexualising them as kids, and I don't know if that would be acceptable on FA. I have done something similar with the Hikari and Tailmon story in the past, but that was only a small part of that story. I really don't want to risk getting banned again, but I think it would be a nice story. I understand why FA do the No underage rule, I really do, but this is a grey area. I could defend it by saying "They are not abusing kids, but they are sexualising themselves as kids, and that is pretty much exactly what babyfurs do" but I really don't want to have to defend it.
What do you think? Is it a good idea? Would it get my ass banned from FA again? It has been on my mind for a while and I thought it might be better to ask here rather than just write it and post it and take the risk. I don't even know if anyone would like it, so I thought I might as well put it out there while I am on the topic of not being sure whether to publish or not.
Remember Lycanroc on the Prowl? I thought it turned out pretty well, it's hot and all, so the person who I wrote that with approached me to write a sequel together. I said, "Sure! Why not?" so we did, but it turned out pretty damn bad. It was nobody's fault, I was overly tired when I was writing it, and I try to not be too tired when I am writing because it always suffers, and he was babysitting and typing on his phone when he was doing it. If I had known I would have waited since everyone gets better results with a keyboard.
I usually like to go through and edit my stories before publishing them. If I am writing them alone they usually don't need much editing, doing it as a roleplay understandably takes more editing, but if two people work well together it usually doesn't take much, but since neither of us were on form, every time I try to edit the story I just think "Damn this is bad... Really bad." I've kind of not been in the mood to write much anyway, the story is about 1/3rd edited now and every time I try to edit it I can't help but see all the glaring flaws and get overwhelmed, and it makes my brain all cloudy and it makes me unable to focus.
I know there is a good story in there under all the typos, padding, rushed stuff, terrible dialog and weird descriptions, but I just can't seem to edit it. I want to publish the story but releasing it in it's current condition would be totally unacceptable considering the level of quality that I hope my watchers have become accustomed to. There only seems to be one answer to this, and that is to wait until I am in better form and then edit it, and that is a good solution, so I don't know if I am looking for advice or anything, I just wanted to let people know.
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On a different topic, another thing I have been thinking about is I would like to do an Animal Crossing story, but I don't know if it would be acceptable on furaffinity, as I once got a temporary ban for a similar story and I would very much not like that to happen again. In the story as I see it in my head, Isabelle and Digby, you know, the two dogs who are brother and sister, both take enemas. I figure Isabelle is feeling she wants one or something and asks Digby if he is into it, and he is. Isabelle and Digby are very close and have had enemas since they were pups, so don't really see it as sexual, however it is obviously supposed to be sexual to the audience.
As they take the enemas, they reminisce about times when they were puppies getting the enemas, like remembering getting bulb enemas and then being moved onto the bag, maybe the first time they gave each other enemas, etc, and say how nice it was. This is where I think the problem lies, as it is essentially sexualising them as kids, and I don't know if that would be acceptable on FA. I have done something similar with the Hikari and Tailmon story in the past, but that was only a small part of that story. I really don't want to risk getting banned again, but I think it would be a nice story. I understand why FA do the No underage rule, I really do, but this is a grey area. I could defend it by saying "They are not abusing kids, but they are sexualising themselves as kids, and that is pretty much exactly what babyfurs do" but I really don't want to have to defend it.
What do you think? Is it a good idea? Would it get my ass banned from FA again? It has been on my mind for a while and I thought it might be better to ask here rather than just write it and post it and take the risk. I don't even know if anyone would like it, so I thought I might as well put it out there while I am on the topic of not being sure whether to publish or not.
Frequently Asked Questions
Posted 9 years agoI figured I would do an FAQ for some of the questions I am asked kind of often, even though I rarely get asked questions, I try to answer them as best as I can. Have a question that is not listed here? Feel free to ask and I will answer.
Q: When is your next story?
A: I really don't know. I only write when I have a really good idea that I am excited for, or if I am co writing something with somebody. While I always have several ideas in my head, I am really less enthusiastic about writing than I used to be. I will still do as much as I can though, so keep an eye out.
Q: Will you write this cool idea I have?
A: In short, probably not. I actually get a lot of ideas, and while I like getting them, and have written a few in the past, I am not likely to take them. Most of them are either things I do not like or simply do not fit in my style. I still enjoy discussing ideas though, so if you have one you want to send me, don't hesitate to do so.
Q: Can I have a commission?
A: Again, probably not. While I have done them in the past, it has been tremendously stressful for me and not worth the money. If you come to me with a good idea I may be interested in role playing it however, which leads me to,
Q: Can we role play?
A: Maybe! Before you ask me to roleplay though, there are some things you will need to know. I am very picky about roleplay. The main point is, everything I roleplay is with mind to turn it into a story. Some of my best stories have been roleplays. If you want to ask me to roleplay, I am going to want to see an example of something you have written before so I can know your level and style. It is also going to have to be an idea that interests me, I am always happy to discuss and develop an idea together. I don't mind grammar in posts too much because it can be edited, but f you want to roleplay with me you should be able to take criticism. If you are doing something that I think will come off badly to the readers, I will ask you to stop doing it. If you want to roleplay for pure fun, you should probably look elsewhere. Also I have a strict rule about OCs. All characyers in my stories and roleplays are either canon characters from shows are games, or characters made up specifically for that story. I will not roleplay as or alongside anyone's OCs.
Q: Will you read my story?
A: Yes! I always like to read other people's work, and I will usually give notes, I have been known to write whole essays on other people's stories and what they can do better in the comments sections, so be prepared for that if you ask me to read something you wrote!
Q: I found a mistake in one of your stories.
A: That is not a question, but if you do spot a typo or anything else wrong in one of my stories, tell me in a note or comment and I will fix it, and probably thank you in the process.
Q: I have a detailed and thoughtful critique of your story's content.
A: Again, not a question, but if you do, excellent! I will happily discuss it with you and take your critique into account for future stories. There is nothing like a good critic and I am always looking to improve my writing.
Q: Want to chat?
A: I am happy to talk with anyone who has something meaningful to say. Feel free to leave me a comment or a note any time, and I even have a discord for my friends I have met in these fandoms. If you wanna chat or be added to that discord, just ask!
Q: When is your next story?
A: I really don't know. I only write when I have a really good idea that I am excited for, or if I am co writing something with somebody. While I always have several ideas in my head, I am really less enthusiastic about writing than I used to be. I will still do as much as I can though, so keep an eye out.
Q: Will you write this cool idea I have?
A: In short, probably not. I actually get a lot of ideas, and while I like getting them, and have written a few in the past, I am not likely to take them. Most of them are either things I do not like or simply do not fit in my style. I still enjoy discussing ideas though, so if you have one you want to send me, don't hesitate to do so.
Q: Can I have a commission?
A: Again, probably not. While I have done them in the past, it has been tremendously stressful for me and not worth the money. If you come to me with a good idea I may be interested in role playing it however, which leads me to,
Q: Can we role play?
A: Maybe! Before you ask me to roleplay though, there are some things you will need to know. I am very picky about roleplay. The main point is, everything I roleplay is with mind to turn it into a story. Some of my best stories have been roleplays. If you want to ask me to roleplay, I am going to want to see an example of something you have written before so I can know your level and style. It is also going to have to be an idea that interests me, I am always happy to discuss and develop an idea together. I don't mind grammar in posts too much because it can be edited, but f you want to roleplay with me you should be able to take criticism. If you are doing something that I think will come off badly to the readers, I will ask you to stop doing it. If you want to roleplay for pure fun, you should probably look elsewhere. Also I have a strict rule about OCs. All characyers in my stories and roleplays are either canon characters from shows are games, or characters made up specifically for that story. I will not roleplay as or alongside anyone's OCs.
Q: Will you read my story?
A: Yes! I always like to read other people's work, and I will usually give notes, I have been known to write whole essays on other people's stories and what they can do better in the comments sections, so be prepared for that if you ask me to read something you wrote!
Q: I found a mistake in one of your stories.
A: That is not a question, but if you do spot a typo or anything else wrong in one of my stories, tell me in a note or comment and I will fix it, and probably thank you in the process.
Q: I have a detailed and thoughtful critique of your story's content.
A: Again, not a question, but if you do, excellent! I will happily discuss it with you and take your critique into account for future stories. There is nothing like a good critic and I am always looking to improve my writing.
Q: Want to chat?
A: I am happy to talk with anyone who has something meaningful to say. Feel free to leave me a comment or a note any time, and I even have a discord for my friends I have met in these fandoms. If you wanna chat or be added to that discord, just ask!
My thoughts on Character Ownership.
Posted 9 years agoNormally, when you create a work, you automatically have copyright of that work, meaning other people can't just copy it. While it probably wouldn't hold up in any court, you DO have a technical, legal right to any fursonas and works you create featuring them, unless of course you renounce the rights by releasing it under creative commons.
However, this is different when it comes to derivative works. If you use characters from somebody else's copyrighted material, like fanart or fanfiction, you probably won't get sued unless you are profiting from it. Selling commissions is a legal grey area holders generally don't care about, but making and selling unlicensed merchandiser is gonna get you in trouble.
What I am trying to say from all of this, is that all of my fanfictions are derivative works. All of them, which means that I have no implicit or legal right to any stories and characters I use. I am taking characters and interpriting them in my own ways, I am ripping them off, so if anyone makes derivative works of my derivative works, which people have done with fan art, I have no right to be annoyed or to stop them. I just use canon characters, but even if your character is a "Pokesona" or "Digisona", they are still a derivative character, and you have no right to stop anyone else trying to use them, like Remus and Sam from Lycanroc on the Prowl.
If someone took those characters and wrote about them without my permission, there would be nothing I could ethically do about that. I used characters from Pokemon, so if someone takes those characters from me and uses them, there is nothing, ethically I can do. If I derive characters and people derive characters from me, I can't stop them, because then I would be a hypocrite.
However, this is different when it comes to derivative works. If you use characters from somebody else's copyrighted material, like fanart or fanfiction, you probably won't get sued unless you are profiting from it. Selling commissions is a legal grey area holders generally don't care about, but making and selling unlicensed merchandiser is gonna get you in trouble.
What I am trying to say from all of this, is that all of my fanfictions are derivative works. All of them, which means that I have no implicit or legal right to any stories and characters I use. I am taking characters and interpriting them in my own ways, I am ripping them off, so if anyone makes derivative works of my derivative works, which people have done with fan art, I have no right to be annoyed or to stop them. I just use canon characters, but even if your character is a "Pokesona" or "Digisona", they are still a derivative character, and you have no right to stop anyone else trying to use them, like Remus and Sam from Lycanroc on the Prowl.
If someone took those characters and wrote about them without my permission, there would be nothing I could ethically do about that. I used characters from Pokemon, so if someone takes those characters from me and uses them, there is nothing, ethically I can do. If I derive characters and people derive characters from me, I can't stop them, because then I would be a hypocrite.
Anyone interested in Discord?
Posted 9 years agoSome of you may already know this, but I have a furry Discord that I a quite active in. It is just a general Discord, we mostly talk about general stuff, as well as Pokemon, Digimon and furry stuff in general, I also discuss writing and it is where I find new people to co-write stories with. There are also NSFW channels that can be accessed on request.
So is anyone interested in joining this Discord? If you are, send me a note or leave a comment. Looking forward to talking with you!
So is anyone interested in joining this Discord? If you are, send me a note or leave a comment. Looking forward to talking with you!
Story Review: Judy's Little Vacation.
Posted 9 years agoWay back when, before I wrote myself and when I used Tumblr, a feature I would often do is to review stories people would show me. In a way, it is kind of how I got into writing.
PantherCub recently showed me a Zootopia story he made that is somewhat similar to my own, so I would like to start by giving a shoutout to him, and to suggest that if you are into weird diaper stuff like I am, tot you go and read it because this review will spoil it. Link is here: http://www.furaffinity.net/view/21886079/
Anyway, I hope you enjoy the story and the review. If you are looking to get into, or improve your own writing, there are some good tips in there, although keep in mind this is all my opinion, so if you disagree with it, that is fine. If you disagree with it, let me know in the comments! Without furtuer ado, here is my review, although it is framed like I am talking to the author, so if you are not the author, it might seem a bit weird. Just imagine you are.
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I promised a review, so here it is. I am going to be typing my thoughts as I read through the story. First thing's first, it would be better if you had uploaded it as a TXT file, then no download is needed, and more people would read it.
To start with, I thought you captured the character's personalities reasonably well, the dialog was pretty much spot on, although the starting paragraphs could have used a bit more description about where they were and what they were doing to help build a picture in your reader's head. Same with the brief action scene, I thought you could describe the actions more thoroughly.
"Darkham correctional facility?" Too Subtle! lol. Seriously, I don't even really know Batman and even I thought that was too obvious.
Personally, I am not a fan of expressing character's thoughts as dialog. As far as I am concerned, saying what your characters think is fine, but having it like dialog is weird, because thoughts don't really work like that, you know what you think, but it is not the same as talking, plus in this they are in italics, but if it was in plain text, I would personally just say "Bellwether couldn't believe those idiots were using the exact same system she had helped set up" and it would make more sense. Also, your description of the character's actions gets better by the Bellwether scene.
"Bellwether electronically the money she had promised" You are missing a word here, just a minor grammatical error. Already I am seeing a passing resemblance to my Judy story. I am giving you the benefit of the doubt though, I wouldn't even care if it was based on mine, I base my stuff on other people's work all the time. I am not saying I think it is directly based on mine, though I have a feeling you saw the same pic I based my story off.
You do not need to say when you switch POV. Anyone with half a brain will be able to tell whose POV it is from. I would suggest you use some kind of symbol for a scene break. Personally, I use "***" on a line of its own to indicate a scene transition, but many authors use many different symbols, you can trust your readers to know whose POV each scene is from.
I think it is time I said this, I am not a fan of automated babying machines. At all. I feel they lack the personal touch, and I find it far hotter when it is another person doing it, it being a machine just feels soulless, and it is far less humiliating for the person on the receiving end, which makes it less fun. I get this is a story and all, but the way they are usually drawn is ridiculous too. They usually look like something out of Dr Seuss, and I can't say I find anything Dr Seuss related sexy! Plus, can you imagine programming one of those things? There is a reason production line robots are simple and perform one task, it is because they are hard to program, especially for doing this kind of stuff, it just isn't realistic. I get that it's furry porn and all, but I still like my stories to feel like they could actually happen to somebody in the real world! Anyway, that is my little rant over, I will give the rest of the story the benefit of the doubt and maybe just imagine it is a person doing it to her, that will probably make it more appealing to me, and I will still be able to enjoy it if it is hot.
"take her blood pressure scanned her eyes. " Missing another word here.
Rectal temperature taking? Hell. Yes. I always love when this is included in stories, I find it incredibly hot and usually enjoy anything it is in. My only complaint is that it was over too fast. You could have had it held in there for a good while, have it slowly warm up to her body temperature, describe how it felt inside her and how she clenched against it before relaxing and submitting to it, I feel like it is a bit of a missed opportunity, but I still found what was there hot. Also you could have put more description into the spanking, I don't like spanking as much as rectal temp taking, but plenty of people like it, and if you say how it felt and how fast and hard the hits were I am sure readers would appreciate it.
While drugging is not my favorite thing in the world, I feel it can fit well in these type of stories, and it can be hot, although I really feel like Judy could have reacted more to having needles stuck in her bunny buns. I appreciate she is still trying to escape though, Judy wouldn't give up just yet!
"which she tried to sip out" Typo here. Why Sip when you can spit?
I notice you used the word "Padded." While it is a word many people use I am not a fan, it always takes me out of the story since it is a babyfur/diaperfur word, and is not really used outside this community.
Was she searching through toys for half an hour? That seemed to go awfully fast.
While I like force feeding in theory, I have never enjoyed it in any story, which is weird. I think your description is fine though.
"fill the back of her diapers" Is she suddenly wearing more than one diaper?
This is a common criticism, but the wetting and messing went by far too fast. How did resisting it feel? How did it feel when she finally lost control? Both physically and emotionally. How did it feel in her diaper? If you say how it felt, then your reader can put themselves in her place more easily, and if they are into that kind of thing, which I am, then it makes it far hotter. See some of my stories for examples of this.
"she was feeling very tire now" Another typo.
Personally not a fan of brainwashing. I just find it creepy, is it just me or is having your memory and personality erased one of the scariest things imaginable? Didn't get too creepy in this though, it was just implied. I also liked how Bellwether was watching, although it would have been better if Judy had known.
Overall, I liked the story. I thought the robot arm thing was kind of silly and a several places were lacking in detail, I found it sufficiently hot, and I think your writing skills, while already above average, still show room for improvement, with some more refinement, detail, and proof reading, I think you could be great, and I would happily recommend this story, even though not everything in it was to my taste. For a sequel I would recommend more detail in the humiliating and sexy parts, like the spanking, temp taking, force feeding, diapering, messing, and changing, as well as Judy formulating a plan to escape, but also starting to kind of enjoy it because the brainwashing is having a bit of an effect on her, I think there is a good opportunity to explore her internal struggle here. I would happily read any follow up to this and I hope you take some of my criticism and suggestions on-board.
PantherCub recently showed me a Zootopia story he made that is somewhat similar to my own, so I would like to start by giving a shoutout to him, and to suggest that if you are into weird diaper stuff like I am, tot you go and read it because this review will spoil it. Link is here: http://www.furaffinity.net/view/21886079/Anyway, I hope you enjoy the story and the review. If you are looking to get into, or improve your own writing, there are some good tips in there, although keep in mind this is all my opinion, so if you disagree with it, that is fine. If you disagree with it, let me know in the comments! Without furtuer ado, here is my review, although it is framed like I am talking to the author, so if you are not the author, it might seem a bit weird. Just imagine you are.
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I promised a review, so here it is. I am going to be typing my thoughts as I read through the story. First thing's first, it would be better if you had uploaded it as a TXT file, then no download is needed, and more people would read it.
To start with, I thought you captured the character's personalities reasonably well, the dialog was pretty much spot on, although the starting paragraphs could have used a bit more description about where they were and what they were doing to help build a picture in your reader's head. Same with the brief action scene, I thought you could describe the actions more thoroughly.
"Darkham correctional facility?" Too Subtle! lol. Seriously, I don't even really know Batman and even I thought that was too obvious.
Personally, I am not a fan of expressing character's thoughts as dialog. As far as I am concerned, saying what your characters think is fine, but having it like dialog is weird, because thoughts don't really work like that, you know what you think, but it is not the same as talking, plus in this they are in italics, but if it was in plain text, I would personally just say "Bellwether couldn't believe those idiots were using the exact same system she had helped set up" and it would make more sense. Also, your description of the character's actions gets better by the Bellwether scene.
"Bellwether electronically the money she had promised" You are missing a word here, just a minor grammatical error. Already I am seeing a passing resemblance to my Judy story. I am giving you the benefit of the doubt though, I wouldn't even care if it was based on mine, I base my stuff on other people's work all the time. I am not saying I think it is directly based on mine, though I have a feeling you saw the same pic I based my story off.
You do not need to say when you switch POV. Anyone with half a brain will be able to tell whose POV it is from. I would suggest you use some kind of symbol for a scene break. Personally, I use "***" on a line of its own to indicate a scene transition, but many authors use many different symbols, you can trust your readers to know whose POV each scene is from.
I think it is time I said this, I am not a fan of automated babying machines. At all. I feel they lack the personal touch, and I find it far hotter when it is another person doing it, it being a machine just feels soulless, and it is far less humiliating for the person on the receiving end, which makes it less fun. I get this is a story and all, but the way they are usually drawn is ridiculous too. They usually look like something out of Dr Seuss, and I can't say I find anything Dr Seuss related sexy! Plus, can you imagine programming one of those things? There is a reason production line robots are simple and perform one task, it is because they are hard to program, especially for doing this kind of stuff, it just isn't realistic. I get that it's furry porn and all, but I still like my stories to feel like they could actually happen to somebody in the real world! Anyway, that is my little rant over, I will give the rest of the story the benefit of the doubt and maybe just imagine it is a person doing it to her, that will probably make it more appealing to me, and I will still be able to enjoy it if it is hot.
"take her blood pressure scanned her eyes. " Missing another word here.
Rectal temperature taking? Hell. Yes. I always love when this is included in stories, I find it incredibly hot and usually enjoy anything it is in. My only complaint is that it was over too fast. You could have had it held in there for a good while, have it slowly warm up to her body temperature, describe how it felt inside her and how she clenched against it before relaxing and submitting to it, I feel like it is a bit of a missed opportunity, but I still found what was there hot. Also you could have put more description into the spanking, I don't like spanking as much as rectal temp taking, but plenty of people like it, and if you say how it felt and how fast and hard the hits were I am sure readers would appreciate it.
While drugging is not my favorite thing in the world, I feel it can fit well in these type of stories, and it can be hot, although I really feel like Judy could have reacted more to having needles stuck in her bunny buns. I appreciate she is still trying to escape though, Judy wouldn't give up just yet!
"which she tried to sip out" Typo here. Why Sip when you can spit?
I notice you used the word "Padded." While it is a word many people use I am not a fan, it always takes me out of the story since it is a babyfur/diaperfur word, and is not really used outside this community.
Was she searching through toys for half an hour? That seemed to go awfully fast.
While I like force feeding in theory, I have never enjoyed it in any story, which is weird. I think your description is fine though.
"fill the back of her diapers" Is she suddenly wearing more than one diaper?
This is a common criticism, but the wetting and messing went by far too fast. How did resisting it feel? How did it feel when she finally lost control? Both physically and emotionally. How did it feel in her diaper? If you say how it felt, then your reader can put themselves in her place more easily, and if they are into that kind of thing, which I am, then it makes it far hotter. See some of my stories for examples of this.
"she was feeling very tire now" Another typo.
Personally not a fan of brainwashing. I just find it creepy, is it just me or is having your memory and personality erased one of the scariest things imaginable? Didn't get too creepy in this though, it was just implied. I also liked how Bellwether was watching, although it would have been better if Judy had known.
Overall, I liked the story. I thought the robot arm thing was kind of silly and a several places were lacking in detail, I found it sufficiently hot, and I think your writing skills, while already above average, still show room for improvement, with some more refinement, detail, and proof reading, I think you could be great, and I would happily recommend this story, even though not everything in it was to my taste. For a sequel I would recommend more detail in the humiliating and sexy parts, like the spanking, temp taking, force feeding, diapering, messing, and changing, as well as Judy formulating a plan to escape, but also starting to kind of enjoy it because the brainwashing is having a bit of an effect on her, I think there is a good opportunity to explore her internal struggle here. I would happily read any follow up to this and I hope you take some of my criticism and suggestions on-board.
Poll: What era of my writing to you prefer? Please reply!
Posted 9 years agoSo I have a question to ask anyone who watches me. If you are seeing this and have ever read something I have written, please consider replying, as this is quite important to me and your support keeps me going. I generally divide my writing into 2 eras, the 2015 era and the 2016 era. I kind of feel that somewhere between these 2 eras, I lost my touch, and my work got a lot less popular, while there are some outliers, this is the general trend. So, I ask you, my readers, which era do you prefer?
Do you like the 2015 era, beginning with Let the Bed Bug Bite, and ending with Tohma and Gaomon's night in, or do you prefer the 2016 era, from Curb your Enthusiasm to now? Maybe you have never even thought of it and not perceived any improvement or worsening over time, in this case I would like to hear your opinion too, maybe it is not my work that is changing, but my attitude.
If you like stories I have done in the past and want to see more in the future, then please reply.
Do you like the 2015 era, beginning with Let the Bed Bug Bite, and ending with Tohma and Gaomon's night in, or do you prefer the 2016 era, from Curb your Enthusiasm to now? Maybe you have never even thought of it and not perceived any improvement or worsening over time, in this case I would like to hear your opinion too, maybe it is not my work that is changing, but my attitude.
If you like stories I have done in the past and want to see more in the future, then please reply.
Collab with The_Unnamed_Pawn
Posted 9 years agoHi, I recently worked with
The_unnamed_Pawn on a Digimon story of his. It is about Terriermon and Impmon. It is hot, lewd, and sexy, and I hope you check it out. He is a really good writer, far better than me.
https://www.furaffinity.net/view/21258769/
The_unnamed_Pawn on a Digimon story of his. It is about Terriermon and Impmon. It is hot, lewd, and sexy, and I hope you check it out. He is a really good writer, far better than me. https://www.furaffinity.net/view/21258769/
Another Elecmon Story? Share your ideas.
Posted 9 years agoEvery time I ask about what my fans like that I do, there is always one name that is mentioned more than any other, and that name is Elecmon.
Even though I have only done 3 Elecmon stories, he seems to be the most popular feature I do, and people often ask me for a new one, even though it has been many months.
The reason I haven't written another Elecmon chapter is I simply haven't been able to think of anything. The first two chapters were good, the third was kind of meh, I thought.
So, I ask people who are fans of the old Elecmon stories, do you want another one? If so, I am sure you have some good ideas as to where it will go.
So I ask you this. If you have a good idea for another Elecmon story, please share it with me via comment or note. This is not a contest, I am not guaranteeing anything, but there is a possibility that I MIGHT like an idea good enough to write a story based on it, and if it is a brilliant idea I will commission a picture to go along with it, just like I did for the previous chapters.
Keep in mind, this is Elecmon, so there is at least one fetish it should definitely have, but feel free to suggest others. Keep in mind however, I know what Elecmon's turn ons and turn offs are.
Looking forward to hearing from you!
Even though I have only done 3 Elecmon stories, he seems to be the most popular feature I do, and people often ask me for a new one, even though it has been many months.
The reason I haven't written another Elecmon chapter is I simply haven't been able to think of anything. The first two chapters were good, the third was kind of meh, I thought.
So, I ask people who are fans of the old Elecmon stories, do you want another one? If so, I am sure you have some good ideas as to where it will go.
So I ask you this. If you have a good idea for another Elecmon story, please share it with me via comment or note. This is not a contest, I am not guaranteeing anything, but there is a possibility that I MIGHT like an idea good enough to write a story based on it, and if it is a brilliant idea I will commission a picture to go along with it, just like I did for the previous chapters.
Keep in mind, this is Elecmon, so there is at least one fetish it should definitely have, but feel free to suggest others. Keep in mind however, I know what Elecmon's turn ons and turn offs are.
Looking forward to hearing from you!
Removing my Skype from my profile
Posted 9 years agoWhile I have met plenty of friends through FA and Skype, I no longer think it is wise to have my Skype name on my profile, so I have decided to remove it. If you are interested in talking to me, please note me first.
The reason I am taking it off is I have had an extremely disrespectful person try to contact me. Anyone who may be reading this, take note. Do not ask me to roleplay. If I want to roleplay with you, I will ask you. My time is in high demand and I do not roleplay with just anyone. It is right there on my profile.
Also, the only reason I roleplay is to publish. I do not roleplay with people who are having the results published. The person who added me asked me to roleplay, tried to convince me to roleplay with him and only him, and as soon as it looked like I wouldn't he instantly blocked me, even though I was remaining friendly. I do not roleplay privately, ever. I wouldn't even do it if I was commissioned to. The reason I write is so I can write something that potentially hundreds of people can see and enjoy.
So there you go. I am still reachable through notes and comments, I love getting notes and comments, it makes it feel like everything I am doing is worthwhile, if you want to talk feel free to send a note or comment, I will even still give out my skype through notes, just please, do not ask me to roleplay.
The reason I am taking it off is I have had an extremely disrespectful person try to contact me. Anyone who may be reading this, take note. Do not ask me to roleplay. If I want to roleplay with you, I will ask you. My time is in high demand and I do not roleplay with just anyone. It is right there on my profile.
Also, the only reason I roleplay is to publish. I do not roleplay with people who are having the results published. The person who added me asked me to roleplay, tried to convince me to roleplay with him and only him, and as soon as it looked like I wouldn't he instantly blocked me, even though I was remaining friendly. I do not roleplay privately, ever. I wouldn't even do it if I was commissioned to. The reason I write is so I can write something that potentially hundreds of people can see and enjoy.
So there you go. I am still reachable through notes and comments, I love getting notes and comments, it makes it feel like everything I am doing is worthwhile, if you want to talk feel free to send a note or comment, I will even still give out my skype through notes, just please, do not ask me to roleplay.
Zootopia is good. Great even. I am not worthy.
Posted 9 years agoSo I re watched Zootopia today and I realized something. Zootopia is an amazing movie. This is probably not news to anyone reading this, but Nick and Judy are amazing and nuanced characters, and that is the problem. They are too good for me to possibly be able to do justice to. People say I capture characters well, and I do, but they are usually anime characters, much less deep than characters from zootopia, and the fact they are subtitled makes it easy to capture them. If not that, then I just make up the characters entirely, like Syrup and Elecmon, using only appearances. So if I write something with Zootopia, I should do it with minor characters, like that Finnick and Gideon fic, expanding two characters that are only in the movie for five minutes each, that is the way to go. So anyway, here is something I wrote about Nick and Judy that I don't want to finish because I don't feel qualified to handle the characters, though if anyone wants to turn it into a little RP to try and continue it please leave a comment and maybe I will write a post in response. It will probably never be edited into something good, but who knows. The story is missing a beginning but Nick is driving Judy home from work. I am also not looking for vague critique, I know there are typos, no buildup, and I misrepresented Nick's personality. If you want to critique, please be in depth and specific.
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Edit:No longer displaying the wip here as I plan to actually finish it. Look out for it in the near future.
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Edit:No longer displaying the wip here as I plan to actually finish it. Look out for it in the near future.
I want to write something good but I'm a talentless hack.
Posted 9 years agoI have started a good few stories lately but they all suck and I don't want to finish them, I am really down on writing lately. I could finish the stories if I RP'd with someone, but they probably wouldn't be good. I have the same ideas over and over again, and other comics and fics are just so much better written than everything I can do. The only ideas I ever get are stupid plotless smut things, and everything that seems like it is original is either a ripoff of another pic, or story, or media in general.
Zootopia Headcanon
Posted 9 years agoJudy's favorite kink is Pred/Prey play
Finnick's is Age play
Nick likes both, and does kinky things with both Judy and Finnick
I may never do anything with this, but it is always on the back burner if I want to write Zootopia stuff, what do you think, would you enjoy seeing zootopia fics from me?
Finnick's is Age play
Nick likes both, and does kinky things with both Judy and Finnick
I may never do anything with this, but it is always on the back burner if I want to write Zootopia stuff, what do you think, would you enjoy seeing zootopia fics from me?
Anyone interested in short story commissions?
Posted 9 years agoHi, I am thinking of selling some commissions. If you are interested, please let me know through notes or comments.
I would like to keep the stories short, 1-2 thousand words, nothing too big or complicated.
Can be any characters, any franchise, but I reserve the right to turn down requests.
£5 per 1000 words.
SFW, NSFW, Kinky, anything you want.
I would like to keep the stories short, 1-2 thousand words, nothing too big or complicated.
Can be any characters, any franchise, but I reserve the right to turn down requests.
£5 per 1000 words.
SFW, NSFW, Kinky, anything you want.
Where have I been? & Writer's Block
Posted 9 years agoHi, as you may or may not have noticed, my FA has been dark for a while, and there are several reasons for this. The first being I was working hard on getting my driver's licence, and I am happy to say I passed my test first time, which was super great and I have been going on car adventures ever since. Anyway, that is not the main reason.
Have you ever had Writer's Block? Art block if you are an artist. It sucks! I have a bunch of ideas, good ideas at that, well, I think they are good, a lot of stories I have done recently have not gotten any interest, and the one that has gotten interest was the story that I didn't like. Basically, I have all these ideas and I am unable to put them into words. I have no attention span, every time I think about writing I just go into something else. I have stories left unfinished, but no motivation to finish them.
I don't know, I have been doing this for over a year now, and while I have expanded I mostly write the same few things over and over again. People who claim to be my fans only report they have read one or two of my stories, which makes it feel like putting the amount of effort I put in a waste. If you are a genuine fan of mine, then rest assured that this journal is not a sign of resignation. I am not quitting. I most likely will do more stories in the future when I want to, but right now I simply do not want to, despite numerous good ideas.
I guess, in short, I figure if I am bored of writing these stories, then you guys are probably bored of reading them.
Have you ever had Writer's Block? Art block if you are an artist. It sucks! I have a bunch of ideas, good ideas at that, well, I think they are good, a lot of stories I have done recently have not gotten any interest, and the one that has gotten interest was the story that I didn't like. Basically, I have all these ideas and I am unable to put them into words. I have no attention span, every time I think about writing I just go into something else. I have stories left unfinished, but no motivation to finish them.
I don't know, I have been doing this for over a year now, and while I have expanded I mostly write the same few things over and over again. People who claim to be my fans only report they have read one or two of my stories, which makes it feel like putting the amount of effort I put in a waste. If you are a genuine fan of mine, then rest assured that this journal is not a sign of resignation. I am not quitting. I most likely will do more stories in the future when I want to, but right now I simply do not want to, despite numerous good ideas.
I guess, in short, I figure if I am bored of writing these stories, then you guys are probably bored of reading them.
Digimon Spectrum Discord
Posted 9 years agoHey, remember that Digimon Spectrum thing I mentioned a while ago? It is a cool roleplay setting that I made up with the help of some other Digimon fans. I have some information on it here, http://www.furaffinity.net/view/20409293/ and a ref sheet on my characters here. http://www.furaffinity.net/view/20519727/
Anyway, if you either roleplay in the Spectrum setting already, or you are interested in doing some Digimon OC roleplay with me or some others, then check out our Discord. It's not that big right now, but if you are interested please drop in and say hi
https://discord.gg/PcqXSgM
If the link expires just ask and I'll give you a new one.
Anyway, if you either roleplay in the Spectrum setting already, or you are interested in doing some Digimon OC roleplay with me or some others, then check out our Discord. It's not that big right now, but if you are interested please drop in and say hi
https://discord.gg/PcqXSgM
If the link expires just ask and I'll give you a new one.
Poll: What would you like to see?
Posted 9 years agoHi, As you may have noticed if you watch me, I am kind of on a role with writing lately, so I thought I would ask all you nice people who watch me and fave and comment on my stories, what would you like to see?
If there is a topic or character I have covered before and you would like to see more of, let me know. If there is a topic I have never covered but you would like to see my take on it let me know too.
Note that this is not a free requests journal, and I do not guarantee I will do anything you suggest, I just want to gauge my audience and see what people like.
Though if there is something you really really want I am always open for commissions, just saying!
If there is a topic or character I have covered before and you would like to see more of, let me know. If there is a topic I have never covered but you would like to see my take on it let me know too.
Note that this is not a free requests journal, and I do not guarantee I will do anything you suggest, I just want to gauge my audience and see what people like.
Though if there is something you really really want I am always open for commissions, just saying!
Going to Q Con!
Posted 9 years agoHi, I am going to Q-Con this weekend! If you are Northern Irish, you will probably already know what that is. If you arn't, then it is an anime and games convention at Queen's University in Belfast. I don't know why I am telling you that, not like any of you will be going.
Anyway, to any NIFurs following me who cares. I will be there. I am just gonna be hanging out, nothing special, I will probably be wearing my Gabumon onesie for a bit. But yeah, this will be my 4th year at Q Con and I am as excited for it as ever. I will probably take some pics, I may share them here, who knows. If you are in NI and are going to Q Con, leave a comment! Although I probably know most of you who will see this thanks to the furmeets I used to attend.
Incidentally, to the rest of you, did you know I live in Northern Ireland? Probably not, since I don't think I have ever mentioned it. Well, that is a fact about me I guess.
Anyway, to any NIFurs following me who cares. I will be there. I am just gonna be hanging out, nothing special, I will probably be wearing my Gabumon onesie for a bit. But yeah, this will be my 4th year at Q Con and I am as excited for it as ever. I will probably take some pics, I may share them here, who knows. If you are in NI and are going to Q Con, leave a comment! Although I probably know most of you who will see this thanks to the furmeets I used to attend.
Incidentally, to the rest of you, did you know I live in Northern Ireland? Probably not, since I don't think I have ever mentioned it. Well, that is a fact about me I guess.
Where else to find me
Posted 9 years agoI am not leaving FA or anything, but I thought I should post some links here. You will not find anything on those other sites that is not here, save for one story on Sofurry.
I have been on sofurry for ages and I just signed up for Furry Network. When Furry Network allows you to import stories from FA all my stories will be imported, but now there is nothing there. I just thought it is better to have another site as a contingency plan in case Furaffinity stops working or bans me or something.
https://liariv.sofurry.com/
https://beta.furrynetwork.com/liariv/
I have been on sofurry for ages and I just signed up for Furry Network. When Furry Network allows you to import stories from FA all my stories will be imported, but now there is nothing there. I just thought it is better to have another site as a contingency plan in case Furaffinity stops working or bans me or something.
https://liariv.sofurry.com/
https://beta.furrynetwork.com/liariv/
A small rant regarding cub art
Posted 9 years agoI like diaper art. I like pictures and stories about characters in diapers, if you have seen my gallery and favorites, this should not be news to you, but there is one aspect of it I do not like.
Please, do not take this the wrong way. This is obviously a very popular thing, it must be or I wouldn't just see it so much. What I am about to say is my opinion, and my opinion alone, if you like it, great, but I just want to share my opinion on it.
I do not like babyfur art. At all. I think it is extremely creepy.
Now, my problem with babyfur art is obviously much more down to me than the actual art, and I will explain why. I have a pretty liberal view to cub art, I do not mind loli and shota in the slightest, but something I DO have a problem with, is very young characters, like toddler age or younger. Now sure, "Babies and toddlers wear diapers! It's natural!" and yes it is, but in furry art, I find diapers to be inherently sexual. It is just the way my kink works, I can see a picture of a diapered character and be like "Damn that's hot!" even if nothing sexual is going on.
So when I see pictures or stories of real toddler characters in diapers, it makes me think that there must be somebody getting off to this. Here is an example. I will not mention any names here, but there is this author who does diaper stories I quite like, and one of his stories was just about two cubs having a playdate, which was fine and innocent if not a bit boring, then they used their diapers and it was written in a very detailed and fetishistic way. I have also seen pictures of young cub characters that are similar to fetish pics of adult characters in diapers. Sure it is probably considered to be cute and innocent to most, but it just makes me sick!
Of course if adult furry characters are pretending to be babies, that is something I am totally fine with, that is just age play. (As long as it's not mental regression but that is something for another day) But sexualised toddler and baby characters are just not something I can deal with. I hope I have explained it adequately, and I am not making this to attack or insult anybody who does get cub art, as there is a good chance they do not see it as sexual, but I just had to get this off my chest. Thanks for listening.
Please, do not take this the wrong way. This is obviously a very popular thing, it must be or I wouldn't just see it so much. What I am about to say is my opinion, and my opinion alone, if you like it, great, but I just want to share my opinion on it.
I do not like babyfur art. At all. I think it is extremely creepy.
Now, my problem with babyfur art is obviously much more down to me than the actual art, and I will explain why. I have a pretty liberal view to cub art, I do not mind loli and shota in the slightest, but something I DO have a problem with, is very young characters, like toddler age or younger. Now sure, "Babies and toddlers wear diapers! It's natural!" and yes it is, but in furry art, I find diapers to be inherently sexual. It is just the way my kink works, I can see a picture of a diapered character and be like "Damn that's hot!" even if nothing sexual is going on.
So when I see pictures or stories of real toddler characters in diapers, it makes me think that there must be somebody getting off to this. Here is an example. I will not mention any names here, but there is this author who does diaper stories I quite like, and one of his stories was just about two cubs having a playdate, which was fine and innocent if not a bit boring, then they used their diapers and it was written in a very detailed and fetishistic way. I have also seen pictures of young cub characters that are similar to fetish pics of adult characters in diapers. Sure it is probably considered to be cute and innocent to most, but it just makes me sick!
Of course if adult furry characters are pretending to be babies, that is something I am totally fine with, that is just age play. (As long as it's not mental regression but that is something for another day) But sexualised toddler and baby characters are just not something I can deal with. I hope I have explained it adequately, and I am not making this to attack or insult anybody who does get cub art, as there is a good chance they do not see it as sexual, but I just had to get this off my chest. Thanks for listening.
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