...when's chapter 7 coming?
I have finally got around to reading this series...and must say it is an intriguing story thus far. You really can tell you love the history of the era...it is woven nicely into the story without being overbearing but well enough to say you know your stuff. Bravo!

The only critique I would have at this point is a matter of personal preference in format. Sometimes it was hard distinguishing who was speaking when everything is together in one paragraph, dialog with prose...it made me have to read extra carefully so I didn't mistaken who was talking.

But...I want to know what happens...who all survives that blast? I wanna know!
Seems like its been several months since this was posted...don't let lack of views/comments discourage you (I know I have with my stuff). It seems like it will be a good story!

Ah! Thank you for taking a look at this series :) I thank you for the top comment!

Aye. And this aspect I was looking at. My main concern about that was that I was trying to avoid overly long sentences, but still retaining the interest with the sentence. However, with this idea, I have run into problems, but I think it decreases the amount of "he/she/they/ect. Said.* xD I will take this into account for Ch.7! I thank you!

Ahh, but that's the mystery! :) nah, this is my writer's block that's responsible xD I wanna write this so bad but I can't and my mind says no x.x though I'm glad you like it, and I will post number 7 as soon as possible!

How was the length of it? Good enough or should I make it longer?

You are actually doing great with length. The story flows nicely and is not bogged down with details. I can still picture the setting and can let my imagination fill in any details without hesitation. This is something I'm not great at in my own writing. I tend to get very wordy without realizing it, putting in more detail than necessary.

And I have the same issues with the he said/she said, and honestly, I'm not in much a position to offer advice on that as I'm still figuring it out and what works for me. Perhaps simply making a new paragraph for the dialog so it's not lost in the background? I know it can make paragraphs seem too short but does make reading a little easier. For me anyway but this is all a matter of opinion.

Drat that annoying block! If we figure out how to kill it we'll have to let each other know, lol. But I look forward to seeing what happens! Now need to read the other story, just didn't have time before class this morning XD!

Ah ok.. Hey, detail ain't bad in my eyes! :D

Well, the way I do it, is I end the main actions of the character in question, then I switch to another in the same room, or, if he/she is far away, I end the segment in a good way, then move to the next one. This works for me though '^^ I do not know your writing fundamentals.

Aye! And it sucks because I have SOOO many good ideas for this story! It's gonna go all the way to Berlin from Stalingrad, so I got work to do! XD

Ah you good! ^__^ aye. Let me know what you think of DP: LoD.