Looks pretty good so far. Trixie should sound a bit more, you know, like she does on the show, but otherwise great.

Hehe. What a story full of possiblities. I wonder if teenage Jake can control himself. ;)

We'll see. :)

As for Trixy, I never did like all the 'street slang' in the show. I'm not saying it doesn't fit, I'm just implying that now, as the kids have grown up some, they've dropped much of the stereotypical 'ghetto slang'. They still use it, but to a much lesser degree. I hope I'm not messing with it too much, I'm just implying that much of that was a phase they passed through, though some trace lingers.
You have all the right to criticize though. Maybe you're right, Let. I'm merely showing what I was thinking when I wrote this. Besides, This is mostly all about Jake. The others will have few, if any, more appearances through the story.
But that's just my intention now; we'll see how it develops soon. :D

Looks good. So far. Can't wait to see the next peice!

WOW!! this is good part1 i cant wait to see part 2!! :) keep up the good work Drakin!! :) *faves*

Nice, can't wait to read part 2 ^^

That...is actually not bad. And that's saying something, considering it's from a Disney show...

Hehhe looks like Jakes going to get even larger