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Here we go with Night Jackal's bio.
Night Jackal is the adopted daughter of Twilight Wolf, and while still learning the ropes of being a superhero, she has a lot of untapped potential and power! Expect to see her in future stories!
Circuit Breaker ©
kallenwindchaser She gave me permission to put her character in this bio.
All other characters, BSPI, MI-Hero, UN Global Watch, Anthrohumans, Maxicorp, Crusaderverse © me
Night Jackal is the adopted daughter of Twilight Wolf, and while still learning the ropes of being a superhero, she has a lot of untapped potential and power! Expect to see her in future stories!
Circuit Breaker ©
kallenwindchaser She gave me permission to put her character in this bio.All other characters, BSPI, MI-Hero, UN Global Watch, Anthrohumans, Maxicorp, Crusaderverse © me
Category Story / All
Species Jackal
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 23.5 kB
Good to finally know more about this character.
Just a critique concerning the part about Circuit Breaker. I understand that you probably already have the story on how these two first met all maped out in your head and really want to tell that story, but in my opinion, you gave a little bit too much of the story away. What, I feel, you should have done was said that they became friends after Night sent out a call for help and Breaker answered. That's it. In doing this you peaked the readers interest by saying that Circuit Breaker came when Night Jackal needed help, but you didn't give away any of the story and in turn made the reader want to know more.
Other then that, great bio and interesting character. I look forward to the stories with her and Twilight.
PS: Really like the fact that you gave her a cutting torch even though her powers make her a living plasma torch. Subtlely illustrates the forward thinking on either Twilight Wolf or Night Jackal's part.
Just a critique concerning the part about Circuit Breaker. I understand that you probably already have the story on how these two first met all maped out in your head and really want to tell that story, but in my opinion, you gave a little bit too much of the story away. What, I feel, you should have done was said that they became friends after Night sent out a call for help and Breaker answered. That's it. In doing this you peaked the readers interest by saying that Circuit Breaker came when Night Jackal needed help, but you didn't give away any of the story and in turn made the reader want to know more.
Other then that, great bio and interesting character. I look forward to the stories with her and Twilight.
PS: Really like the fact that you gave her a cutting torch even though her powers make her a living plasma torch. Subtlely illustrates the forward thinking on either Twilight Wolf or Night Jackal's part.
Thank you for the constructive criticism. I wanted to give people a taste of future stories. I know I may have spoiled some stories but I try to give a taste not the whole meal if you know what I mean.
And thank you for liking the cutting torch idea. I wanted to give both characters subtlety as night jackal is still learning the limits of her powers and her equipment helps in case she can't use her powers or she doesn't have time to use them. Again thank you for the advice and praise! I greatly appreciate it!
And thank you for liking the cutting torch idea. I wanted to give both characters subtlety as night jackal is still learning the limits of her powers and her equipment helps in case she can't use her powers or she doesn't have time to use them. Again thank you for the advice and praise! I greatly appreciate it!
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