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I think you used the wrong word in the sentence "She found out I was gay. She couldn't except that I loved her regardless of my orientation"
The word "except" does not fit there because of what it means which is to bar or ban something, or to take exception of something like 'the furries take exception to being insulted' meaning to take offense or disagree, if you were to re-word the sentence to state something like "She couldn't accept that I loved her regardless of my orientation" or "She couldn't expect me to love her, regardless of my orientation" or "She took exception to the fact that I loved her regardless of my orientation" or even "She couldn't accept my love for her, regardless of my orientation"
But that is about all I can say about it, good art work decent story nicely moving plot :3
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I think you used the wrong word in the sentence "She found out I was gay. She couldn't except that I loved her regardless of my orientation"
The word "except" does not fit there because of what it means which is to bar or ban something, or to take exception of something like 'the furries take exception to being insulted' meaning to take offense or disagree, if you were to re-word the sentence to state something like "She couldn't accept that I loved her regardless of my orientation" or "She couldn't expect me to love her, regardless of my orientation" or "She took exception to the fact that I loved her regardless of my orientation" or even "She couldn't accept my love for her, regardless of my orientation"
But that is about all I can say about it, good art work decent story nicely moving plot :3
You honestly don't have to change anything if you want, just wanted to show there was more than one way of putting it :3 I like the story and the art don't get me wrong, and grammar/spelling errors are to be expected, there isn't a comic alive today that doesn't have them. But I do hope any and all advice(?*) helps you grow as a writer.
*advice being that I hope you take any constructive criticisms as advice, and I hope this is seen as constructive and not destructive :3
*advice being that I hope you take any constructive criticisms as advice, and I hope this is seen as constructive and not destructive :3
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