
The sixth chapter of my new story - Jazmyn - the anthro vixen alone in the real world except for Ken Morita, the human who shelters her.
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Category Story / All
Species Vulpine (Other)
Size 120 x 120px
File Size 229.5 kB
I love this story. I just discovered it recently and have read all the chapters. You sir, are quite good at writing. I doff my hat to you. Kacey's artwork is just the icing on the cake so to speak. It's such a nice touch and her work is outstanding as well. I can't wait until chapter 7.
Keep up the good work!
Motomo
Keep up the good work!
Motomo
I wonder what the pictures on the book looks like on it's respected chapters. Anyway, I've been reading the story for awhile now. I've beginning to see the problems that people said about your characters that they are almost too perfect. But it doesn't change the fact that these kinds of renaissance people really do exist in our world anyway. You can still make a good story with people that are like this and your story is pretty much the proof of that.
I think there's one problem that I have with the entire story so far, is the unmentioning of Jazmyn's ears and tail in the story. Even though I think the point of your story is to show that Jazmyn is a person, but she is still a fox anthro person with these type of appandages. I feel like they should also be mentioned more in stories like these to remind us that she does have these things, and be more reflected or better used when describing her feelings and emotions, especially how they wave about when the character is walking. I just feel like that they should be mentioned more around Jazmyn when she does things other than when she puts on clothes.
Though I am glad that Jazmyn by this point has finally told Ken that she is really more comfortable unclothed and if he respects her then he shouldn't have tried to put alot of pressure on her by making her wear clothes all the time and shouldn't try to make her change just to fit his need. Which is almost the kind of leading point in my initial deviations at Deviantart and my stories in general too.
I think there's one problem that I have with the entire story so far, is the unmentioning of Jazmyn's ears and tail in the story. Even though I think the point of your story is to show that Jazmyn is a person, but she is still a fox anthro person with these type of appandages. I feel like they should also be mentioned more in stories like these to remind us that she does have these things, and be more reflected or better used when describing her feelings and emotions, especially how they wave about when the character is walking. I just feel like that they should be mentioned more around Jazmyn when she does things other than when she puts on clothes.
Though I am glad that Jazmyn by this point has finally told Ken that she is really more comfortable unclothed and if he respects her then he shouldn't have tried to put alot of pressure on her by making her wear clothes all the time and shouldn't try to make her change just to fit his need. Which is almost the kind of leading point in my initial deviations at Deviantart and my stories in general too.
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