I like how you arrange the paragraphs and such....it makes it really easy to read.

Yeah, I was wondering if I was putting too much space in between them or not, especially the short bits of dialogue. In my original version they were bunched together a lot more, and when I was reading it I felt like it was a little distracting. So I added some extra spaces in hopes of alleviating that, but I hoped I didn't do it too much so that it became distracting like that too. So I'm glad to hear it worked for you.

Glad I rarely had to deal with "stuck-up bimbos" when I was in high school, but you know what, I can't stand anyone picking on anybody. Every time I see that, I automatically assume they are jealous of something the other person has. I always ask "If you are so good, why are you trying to bring that person down to your level?"

Yeah....I think in Mary's case, she probably isn't jealous of Allison in particular, she just sees her as an easy target. There's no doubt Mary has some issues of her own that leads her to bullying, but I think she takes it out on Allison just because she feels like she can do so with no retaliation.