ah, the story continues. nice perspectives, I can imagine them being hard to make right...

generally spoken, if you distribute speech bubbles among the page/panel freely without indicating who speaks them (although it's quite clear here), keep in mind that everybody receives them different. so, they should be placed so that there is no confusion as to which bubble should be read first. unless, of course, it doesn't matter. also, don't make the mistake of many superhero comics and add large bubbles which take a minute to read within action scenes where one would expect the characters to act instead of talk. each bubble takes it time, and you can direct the time flow within the panels with it. there are other tricks, too, of course.

anyway, on to whatever mistake I can correct...
bubble#1: "is never THE SAME for ANY given individual" (at least I think it is more correct ^^')
#2: typo: "Measured"
#5: exchange 'caught' with 'journaled' and 'basal' with 'basic'
#6: I guess you meant to say "here the spells aquire meaning'. "sense" might hint at them gaining conciousness, which reminds me of the 'Living Spells' from D&Ds Eberron setting.
#7: "Were it not for this place, all magic professions known in the outside world would cease to exist"
#8: "We, the ones in ultimate charge..."
#10: "and at the very top..."


that should do the trick. ^^

I am considering your corrections and suggestion; the ones am sure are, well, correct, haven't applied by mere lack of time. The others, I have to review 'cause I have to decipher what ii really intended to say (yep, that's correctly translated)

And your commentary about overly saturated speech action sequences, it's certainly a major flaw, I'll risk "sin", for most of the american comic, (specially superhero) industry, yes
I remember a parody of two characters saying that givin a lenghty speech in a midjump should be another mutant power, lol.
Certainly I expect that I would handle it a bit better than that.

reworking them pages seems to be a lot of work to me. good thing they are digital. :)

talkative superhero comics are one of my pet peeves. inconsitencies are what takes any fun out of me... also, stories as flat as the colouring. :P

Certainly, with a few honorable exceptions, wich rarely last long...