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I mean, who expects a bloating when they're getting their teeth checked
Category Artwork (Digital) / Inflation
Species Western Dragon
Size 1152 x 958px
File Size 951.3 kB
This picture's okay, but there's a lot that could be improved, Blue. I'm sure with some practice you'll come up with awesome stuff, you have the potential.
Firstly, I'd like to comment on the composition of the piece itself. It's very disorganised and without any form or sense of there actually being something there. The dentist is standing in mid air, while Blue doesn't actually seem to be in a chair at all, but floating above it. Nitrous Oxide, being a heavier gas than air (indeed, it's N20, I believe, and the air is primarily pure Nitrogen - meaning that N20 is heavier than air) wouldn't make him float like this. Blue's pose is a little odd, is he lapsing into a coma or fitting with laughter? The body says the latter but the facial expression says the former. Try doing a thumbnail of the picture before you start so you can block out where everything goes so it doesn't look like they're floating in a void. :) You need a background, too, so that we have some context and comparison to see how big Blue actually is, and to give the picture some kind of grounding.
Look up the Rule of Thirds on google. :) There are four intersections where the most interesting parts of the picture should go - this avoids uncomfortable framing like in this one where the character's heads are almost off the edges.
Secondly, I have no idea where the lighting is coming from in this picture. It appears to be from above, but nothing has a shadow that really affects things (for example, where his belly is doesn't block light to the leg or tail.) The white lines I guess are the shiny bits like a balloon has, but if you look at a balloon (http://www.armuproducts.com/balloon.....s.balloons.jpg) the most intense light is the bit that's opposite to where the light falls - so there shouldn't be white lines overlapping with where the light hits. Doing some studies of balloons and stuff might help here :3
Finally, the speech bubble is a little weird. It seems to point at the hose rather than the character saying it (is the hose talking?), and the text is misaligned with the bubble's edges, leading it to look quite jarring.
There are good parts to this picture, such as Blue's facial expression, but I think you're capable of much more :)
Keep pushing yourself harder, don't lapse into complacency, and you'll go far.
Firstly, I'd like to comment on the composition of the piece itself. It's very disorganised and without any form or sense of there actually being something there. The dentist is standing in mid air, while Blue doesn't actually seem to be in a chair at all, but floating above it. Nitrous Oxide, being a heavier gas than air (indeed, it's N20, I believe, and the air is primarily pure Nitrogen - meaning that N20 is heavier than air) wouldn't make him float like this. Blue's pose is a little odd, is he lapsing into a coma or fitting with laughter? The body says the latter but the facial expression says the former. Try doing a thumbnail of the picture before you start so you can block out where everything goes so it doesn't look like they're floating in a void. :) You need a background, too, so that we have some context and comparison to see how big Blue actually is, and to give the picture some kind of grounding.
Look up the Rule of Thirds on google. :) There are four intersections where the most interesting parts of the picture should go - this avoids uncomfortable framing like in this one where the character's heads are almost off the edges.
Secondly, I have no idea where the lighting is coming from in this picture. It appears to be from above, but nothing has a shadow that really affects things (for example, where his belly is doesn't block light to the leg or tail.) The white lines I guess are the shiny bits like a balloon has, but if you look at a balloon (http://www.armuproducts.com/balloon.....s.balloons.jpg) the most intense light is the bit that's opposite to where the light falls - so there shouldn't be white lines overlapping with where the light hits. Doing some studies of balloons and stuff might help here :3
Finally, the speech bubble is a little weird. It seems to point at the hose rather than the character saying it (is the hose talking?), and the text is misaligned with the bubble's edges, leading it to look quite jarring.
There are good parts to this picture, such as Blue's facial expression, but I think you're capable of much more :)
Keep pushing yourself harder, don't lapse into complacency, and you'll go far.
I have to say, I find your suggestions a bit off. I mean, yes, the shading could stand some improving, bot most of the other stuff kinda strikes me as odd.
First of all, this is a picture with an anthropomorphic dragon impossibly inflating from an anthropomorphic fox. With all that reality thrown out the window, I don't think it's too far of a stretch to say that the Nitrous Oxide isn't obeying the laws of physics either. I have seen pictures with people floating from oxygen or even from CO2, so the idea that a gas doesn't behave like it would in the real world doesn't faze me.
As for the lack of background, yes, a background would have helped (I wouldn't know it was a dentist visit without the caption) but the piece still stands, Blue is being inflated. Dentist office or no, it still does the main job of portraying an inflation.
Lastly, I had no problems with the speech bubble. Sure, he could have made it slightly more clear that the bubble was comming from the fox, but it's not a big deal. The speech bubble clearly denotes excitement and the fox is clearly happy, so it seems fine to me. I had no problems at least.
First of all, this is a picture with an anthropomorphic dragon impossibly inflating from an anthropomorphic fox. With all that reality thrown out the window, I don't think it's too far of a stretch to say that the Nitrous Oxide isn't obeying the laws of physics either. I have seen pictures with people floating from oxygen or even from CO2, so the idea that a gas doesn't behave like it would in the real world doesn't faze me.
As for the lack of background, yes, a background would have helped (I wouldn't know it was a dentist visit without the caption) but the piece still stands, Blue is being inflated. Dentist office or no, it still does the main job of portraying an inflation.
Lastly, I had no problems with the speech bubble. Sure, he could have made it slightly more clear that the bubble was comming from the fox, but it's not a big deal. The speech bubble clearly denotes excitement and the fox is clearly happy, so it seems fine to me. I had no problems at least.
Well, regarding the n20 thing, there is such thing as versisimilitude. After all, you wouldn't say iron is lighter than air, and then say "Well, it has dragons in it, and dragons aren't real! I am justified!". That's just silly. You have to have a reason that it's lighter than air. Gasses inflating things I can understand, since gas inflates objects in reality (this is just switching one property for another for the picture's premise). There's no reason that n20 would be lighter than air.
But the background, this is something I think is necessary. Yes, it shows Inflation, but it's representing inflation at a dentist's office, by a dastardly dentist. There is absolutely nothing in the picture that really screams "dentist" apart from the chair, and even then that's a tenuous link. With an actual background and scenery, and maybe some props, and definitely a costume for the dentist, then the picture is given context. Right now, it's just "inflation, yay", which is a little boring. I know Blue's capable of it, so this is why I suggested it. It will differentiate it from all the other contextless inflation pictures, and make for an interesting picture. After all, is it not better that a picture pleases on an aesthetic and compositional level too, rather than only a purely visceral one? I mean, there's a lot you could do with the concept, composition wise. And dentists offices are a playground of props and little details that just make a picture feel more alive. Right now, this one's a little dry, and could be improved a hell of a lot by the addition of those little details that aren't required, but would enrich a picture far more.
And shouldn't the dentist have more of a, well, sneaky expression? Right now he just looks like , which isn't very sneaky at all. Characterisation is an important thing. His dialogue suggests something underhand, but his facial expression is so generic and bland it kind of makes it a little odd to look at.
But the background, this is something I think is necessary. Yes, it shows Inflation, but it's representing inflation at a dentist's office, by a dastardly dentist. There is absolutely nothing in the picture that really screams "dentist" apart from the chair, and even then that's a tenuous link. With an actual background and scenery, and maybe some props, and definitely a costume for the dentist, then the picture is given context. Right now, it's just "inflation, yay", which is a little boring. I know Blue's capable of it, so this is why I suggested it. It will differentiate it from all the other contextless inflation pictures, and make for an interesting picture. After all, is it not better that a picture pleases on an aesthetic and compositional level too, rather than only a purely visceral one? I mean, there's a lot you could do with the concept, composition wise. And dentists offices are a playground of props and little details that just make a picture feel more alive. Right now, this one's a little dry, and could be improved a hell of a lot by the addition of those little details that aren't required, but would enrich a picture far more.
And shouldn't the dentist have more of a, well, sneaky expression? Right now he just looks like , which isn't very sneaky at all. Characterisation is an important thing. His dialogue suggests something underhand, but his facial expression is so generic and bland it kind of makes it a little odd to look at.
Gas inflation at the dentist isn't a new concept at all, Blue. It goes all the way back to the 1930s with the animated short "Stratos-Fear" (in which human character 'Willie Whopper' literally goes into orbit from becoming a living balloon during his visit to the dentist) - which you can see on YouTube. More recently (if you consider the 1970s recent), I have a similar dentist/gas inflation gag in a "Tom & Jerry" comic book (from Gold Key) - which the cat is temporarily blown-up by an irate patient near the end of the story.
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