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After two weeks of refining, it is complete! Ladies and gentlemen (and all those in-between), I humbly give you the final, complete, finished Balans backstory you always wanted! This completed version also comes with many easter eggs to many users in my life. I want to take the time to thank all those who helped me to edit the story in your downtime. Your feedback really helped! Now I can begin work on a truly wonderful otter-tunity that's coming up in the works! You can learn more about the idea in this journal entry!
As is tradition, here's the final changelog for Balans's Introduction:
* Tightened word use again, this time focusing on polishing word choice.
* Went on a holy crusade against annoying past tense ("-ed" words) in the text. Brought the population of "-ed" words down from 136 to 57. Present tense is best tense!
* Added an amazing picture to the story, which you can see here!
* Single-spaced the story, and crunched it down to fit on four pages.
* Removed the watermark in favor of a less obnoxious copyright footer w. link to main FA page. Future drafts will still have the watermark that crosses over the side, simply saying "DRAFT".
With the completion of this story, I want to formally thank everyone on this list for their help and feedback. Without you, this story would never be complete:
sarnaqj
xsini
zessique
rwstcz
feandkh14
With that all said, please enjoy the final, completed version of Balans's Introduction. Let me know what you think in the comments below!
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Click here for Draft 2
Click here for Draft 1
Click here for "Balans and Asher" picture in story
As is tradition, here's the final changelog for Balans's Introduction:
* Tightened word use again, this time focusing on polishing word choice.
* Went on a holy crusade against annoying past tense ("-ed" words) in the text. Brought the population of "-ed" words down from 136 to 57. Present tense is best tense!
* Added an amazing picture to the story, which you can see here!
* Single-spaced the story, and crunched it down to fit on four pages.
* Removed the watermark in favor of a less obnoxious copyright footer w. link to main FA page. Future drafts will still have the watermark that crosses over the side, simply saying "DRAFT".
With the completion of this story, I want to formally thank everyone on this list for their help and feedback. Without you, this story would never be complete:
sarnaqj
xsini
zessique
rwstcz
feandkh14With that all said, please enjoy the final, completed version of Balans's Introduction. Let me know what you think in the comments below!
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Click here for Draft 2
Click here for Draft 1
Click here for "Balans and Asher" picture in story
Category Story / Macro / Micro
Species Western Dragon
Size 120 x 120px
File Size 179.4 kB
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Balans I have to ask: Was this the first time that you've written something like this?
If it was, then I applaud you, sir for making this. It's certainly one way to make a first impression.
If it was, then I applaud you, sir for making this. It's certainly one way to make a first impression.
In a way, it is and it isn't. The story of how Balan's story forms is an evolution over a year irl. It began as a joke with friends, that grew with RP's and interactions, and it became this massive character (no pun intended) that I felt like I could use for future works. But in terms of writing in general, this is not my first time. I've been writing short stories and character things since I was 11 years old. A decade of dedication to the written word, as of this comment. I plan on making even more stories in time.
Thanks for the kind words Kess. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. I hope it made a good first impression for everyone on the site. Wouldn't do me any good to say I'm a writer and not have anything on the site haha. Hope all is well on your end, and hope to see you soon.
Thanks for the kind words Kess. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. I hope it made a good first impression for everyone on the site. Wouldn't do me any good to say I'm a writer and not have anything on the site haha. Hope all is well on your end, and hope to see you soon.
Balans
Really, now?
You've been creating stories since you were 11 years old? Well, that explains it. Is it any wonder why your intro story turned out as well as it did? Clearly, you've put a lot of thought into what you wrote and it showed, then.
When you have more stories to publish, feel free to let me know when that happens and where they are.
I'm open to giving writers of any stripe a chance.
And incidentally, you just DID make a good impression (on me, at least, anyway).
Really, now?
You've been creating stories since you were 11 years old? Well, that explains it. Is it any wonder why your intro story turned out as well as it did? Clearly, you've put a lot of thought into what you wrote and it showed, then.
When you have more stories to publish, feel free to let me know when that happens and where they are.
I'm open to giving writers of any stripe a chance.
And incidentally, you just DID make a good impression (on me, at least, anyway).
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